爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar (use gerunds/infinitives correctly), and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep under five sentences.

示例: I enjoy playing football and browsing the Internet on my phone. However, recently I've started focusing more on studying because I want to use my time more productively. For example, I now spend two evenings a week practicing football and three evenings studying for my courses.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence, use correct past-tense forms, reduce repetition and fillers, and add a linking word to contrast past and present. Be specific about the games or a typical routine to enrich the answer.

示例: Yes, I used to play video games a lot when I was a child. I often spent 10 to 12 hours on weekends playing strategy and adventure games. However, nowadays I don't have time because I need to study and work, so I usually play only occasionally on holidays.

建议: Start with a clear, grammatical topic sentence (use present perfect or simple present), avoid pronoun errors, and use linking words to describe change over time. Correct verb forms and keep sentences concise.

示例: Yes, football has been my hobby since childhood. I used to play with my parents and brothers when I was young, but as I grew older I began playing mostly with friends, which helped me improve my skills.

建议: Answer directly, use correct possessive and verb forms, and avoid fillers. Give clear comparisons using linking phrases (for example, while/whereas). Be specific about activities and frequency.

示例: Yes and no. While my parents prefer watching TV and shopping, my brother and I share hobbies like playing football and using our phones to browse the Internet. For instance, we play football twice a week and check social media during our breaks.

× I usually play football and also, uh, using the Internet through my phone, but, uh, I'm trying to change my hobby a bit because, uh, I feel like it's, uh, I'm less right now.

✓ I usually play football and also use the Internet on my phone, but I'm trying to change my hobbies a bit because I feel like I'm less active right now.

The original uses the gerund 'using' incorrectly after 'and also' where a base verb 'use' is required for parallel structure. Use consistent verb forms in a list (play, use). Also 'less' needs a clear adjective; 'less active' is appropriate. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and choose an appropriate adjective.

× I probably gonna study more for more useful activities.

✓ I will probably study more and do more useful activities.

'Gonna' is informal and ungrammatical in formal writing; the correct future form is 'will' or 'going to'. The sentence structure also needs 'and' to join clauses. Suggestion: use 'will probably' or 'am going to' and join ideas clearly.

× When I was a child, I used to play game a lot.

✓ When I was a child, I used to play games a lot.

The noun 'game' should be plural 'games' to indicate repeated activities. This is a pluralization issue tied to countable nouns; use plural for habitual actions involving multiple instances. Suggestion: use 'games' or 'computer games' depending on meaning.

× Like I spend half a day, like 10 to 12 hour a day, uh, playing game.

✓ I used to spend half the day, about 10 to 12 hours a day, playing games.

Tense should match 'used to' (past habitual), so 'spend' should be 'used to spend'. Also 'hour' must be plural 'hours', and 'half a day' is better expressed as 'half the day'. Suggestion: keep past tense for childhood habits and correct plural forms.

× But nowadays, uh, when I get older, I got a lot of things to do, for example, like assignments in the class or work.

✓ But nowadays, as I have grown older, I have a lot of things to do, for example assignments in class or work.

The mixture of 'nowadays' (present) and 'when I get older' (future) is inconsistent. Use present perfect 'have grown' or simple present 'am older'. 'I got' is colloquial past; use 'I have' for current possession. Also 'assignments in the class' should be 'assignments in class' or 'class assignments'. Suggestion: maintain consistent present tense for current situations and avoid informal 'got'.

× I have to go to work, so I don't have any time to play game anymore.

✓ I have to go to work, so I don't have any time to play games anymore.

'Game' should be plural 'games' when referring to playing in general. Keep present tense 'have to' and 'don't have' for current obligations. Suggestion: use plural for general activities.

× You're playing football is my hobby when, uh, since, uh, I was in childhood, uh, because, umm, I usually spend time playing football with my brothers and also my parents was like, it's just the different players.

✓ Playing football has been my hobby since I was a child because I usually spent time playing football with my brothers and my parents were like different players.

The original has a confusing subject 'You're playing football' and incorrect tense and structure. Use 'Playing football has been my hobby since I was a child' for a hobby continuing from childhood. 'Was in childhood' is incorrect; use 'since I was a child'. 'My parents was' is subject-verb agreement error; 'parents were' is correct. Suggestion: start with the -ing noun 'Playing' to state a hobby and ensure subject-verb agreement and proper tense.

× For example, when I was a child, I played with my parents, but when I get older, I used to, I usually play it with my friends more.

✓ For example, when I was a child I played with my parents, but when I got older I usually played with my friends more.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I get older' should be past 'when I got older' to match 'played' and 'used to'. Also 'play it with my friends' has an unnecessary pronoun 'it'; simply 'played with my friends' is correct. Suggestion: keep past tense when describing changes over time and remove redundant pronouns.

× Yeah, uh, every of my family members have their own hobby.

✓ Yes, every one of my family members has their own hobby.

'Every of my family members' is incorrect; use 'every one of' or 'each of'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'every one' is singular so take 'has' not 'have'. Suggestion: use 'each of' or 'every one of' and match the verb accordingly.

× For example, my, my dad want to watch, uh, television.

✓ For example, my dad wants to watch television.

Third person singular requires -s: 'dad wants'. Also remove hesitation and extra comma. Suggestion: use 'wants' for he/she/it in present simple.

× My mother wanna, uh, go shopping and do some makeup.

✓ My mother wants to go shopping and put on makeup.

'Wanna' is informal and should be 'wants to'. Also 'do some makeup' is unnatural; 'put on makeup' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: use standard forms 'wants to' and appropriate verbs for collocations.

× But for me and my brother, we're different. We have the same hobbies and is playing football and, uh, serving the Internet, like using our phone during the day.

✓ But my brother and I are different. We share the same hobbies: playing football and using the Internet, like using our phones during the day.

Pronoun order and form: 'my brother and I' is standard. 'We're different' followed by 'We have the same hobbies' is contradictory but kept meaning: rearranged for clarity. 'We have the same hobbies and is playing football' has incorrect verb 'is'; use noun phrase 'playing football'. 'Serving the Internet' is incorrect word choice; should be 'using the Internet'. 'Phone' should be plural 'phones' if referring to both people. Suggestion: use correct pronoun order, plural nouns where appropriate, and correct verb forms/collocations.