爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Сократите повторы и используйте более естественные фразы. Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одно-два связанных пояснения с подходящими связками. Исправьте согласование (например, "help" вместо "helps" для множественного подлежащего). Избегайте тавтологии (двойное «unwind").

示例: I enjoy reading and jogging. They both give me energy throughout the day and help me relax after a stressful day, so I usually jog in the morning and read in the evening.

建议: Уберите неуверённые вставки ("uh", "That's nice question") и исправьте грамматику ("used to swim" вместо "used to swimming"). Дайте связную структуру: утверждение + причина + результат, используя связки (for example, however, so).

示例: Yes, I used to swim a lot as a child. However, I later discovered I was allergic to chlorine, so I had to stop swimming and switched to jogging instead.

建议: Сделайте начало более естественным ("I've enjoyed reading since childhood"). Следите за временем (helped → helps) и артиклями/множественными числами ("non-fiction articles"). Объедините предложения связкой, чтобы звучало плавнее.

示例: I've enjoyed reading since childhood because it helps me discover new ideas and broaden my horizons, and I still read non-fiction articles once or twice a week.

建议: Избегайте неточных выражений и незавершённых мыслей (фраза кончается "gives us an opportunity"). Употребляйте более естественные слова ("Arabic" без "the") и соединяйте причинно-следственные части связками (so, therefore). Завершайте мысль конкретным результатом.

示例: Yes. For example, my mother and I both enjoy learning foreign languages, so we often speak Arabic together in the evenings; it helps us relax and gives us a chance to practise our speaking skills.

× Yes, yes, I am fond of reading and jogging for the reason that these two hobbies particularly give me energy for the rest of the day and helps me to unwind unwind after a stressful day.

✓ Yes, yes, I am fond of reading and jogging because these two hobbies particularly give me energy for the rest of the day and help me to unwind after a stressful day.

The verb 'help' must agree with the plural subject 'these two hobbies'. Use the base form 'help' after a plural subject, not 'helps'. Remove the redundant phrase 'for the reason that' and replace with 'because' for natural phrasing; remove duplicated word 'unwind'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid redundant words. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× That's nice question. Of course I had uh, I used to swimming a lot.

✓ That's a nice question. Of course I used to swim a lot.

After 'used to' the base form of the verb is required ('swim'), not the -ing form. Also add the indefinite article 'a' before 'nice question'. Suggestions: use 'used to' + base verb and include necessary articles. Grammar problem type ID:8

× However, when I grew up I realized that I actually had the allergy to the water in the pool.

✓ However, when I grew up I realized that I actually had an allergy to the water in the pool.

Use the indefinite article 'an' before a singular countable noun 'allergy'. Without it the sentence is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'an allergy' or 'allergies' depending on meaning. Grammar problem type ID:22

× That is why I quit swimming.

✓ That is why I quit swimming.

Sentence is grammatically correct; 'quit' correctly indicates a past action connected to the past realization. No change needed. Explanation: 'quit' is acceptable in simple past; can also say 'stopped swimming' for variation. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I've enjoyed reading since my childhood because it helped me to discover new ideas and to broaden my horizons.

✓ I have enjoyed reading since my childhood because it has helped me discover new ideas and broaden my horizons.

When referring to an action that began in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect ('have enjoyed', 'has helped'). 'Helped' suggests a completed past action; 'has helped' matches the ongoing relevance. Also omit 'to' before verbs in this parallel structure ('discover', 'broaden') for natural style. Grammar problem type ID:6

× And still I like to read some non fictions an article once or twice a week.

✓ I still like to read some non-fiction articles once or twice a week.

Non-fiction is uncountable or used as a compound adjective 'non-fiction articles'. 'Some non fictions an article' is incorrect. Use plural 'articles' with 'once or twice a week'. Also move 'still' appropriately. Suggestion: 'I still like to read non-fiction articles once or twice a week.' Grammar problem type ID:14

× Of course we have.

✓ Of course we do.

After the question 'Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?' the short affirmative answer uses the auxiliary 'do', not 'have' alone. 'We have' is not ungrammatical but 'we do' is the natural short response. Recommend using 'Yes, we do.' Grammar problem type ID:12

× For instance, my mother and I are both really passionate about learning foreign languages.

✓ For instance, my mother and I are both really passionate about learning foreign languages.

Sentence is correct. 'Passionate about learning foreign languages' is appropriate. No change needed. Grammar problem type ID:22

× That is why at the end of the day, we usually have a conversation in the Arabic language because it helps us to relax after a stressful day and also gives us an opportunity.

✓ That is why, at the end of the day, we usually have a conversation in Arabic because it helps us relax after a stressful day and also gives us an opportunity to practice.

Use 'in Arabic' rather than 'in the Arabic language' for fluent phrasing; omit the article 'the'. Remove 'to' after 'helps us' ('helps us relax'). The original ends abruptly with 'gives us an opportunity'—specify 'to practice' to complete the idea. Suggestion: include the purpose after 'gives us an opportunity'. Grammar problem type ID:22