爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two main hobbies, then give specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'helps me manage', 'watch movies', 'go to the cinema'). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: I have a few hobbies, but my main one is yoga because it helps me relax and manage stress. I also enjoy watching films, especially horror, because they are exciting and keep me on edge. Finally, I like going to the cinema to eat popcorn and relax with friends.

建议: Clarify and correct grammar and verb forms, and use linking words to make chronology clear. Condense repetitive phrases and provide one specific example of achievement. Use past simple/past habitual forms correctly ('I used to play volleyball and run', 'I remember').

示例: Yes. I used to play volleyball and do athletics when I was a child. I trained about two hours every school day, and I competed in local events — my team even won a championship and I earned several medals.

建议: Make a clear link between past and present with appropriate tenses and correct grammar. Use linking words such as 'although' or 'now' and fix verb forms ('helps me manage stress'). Be specific about how the hobby continues (which activities and frequency).

示例: Yes — I have always enjoyed sports. As a child I played volleyball and did athletics, and now I practice yoga and go to the gym several times a week. Although the activities have changed, exercise still helps me manage stress and stay fit.

建议: Organize answer with a clear topic sentence then contrast family members using linking words ('for example', 'however'). Correct grammar ('he likes to play on the computer', 'I’m trying to persuade him to go to the gym'). Keep it concise and avoid repetition ('let let').

示例: It varies. For example, my father and I often go to the gym together because we both enjoy exercising. However, my husband prefers computer games and rarely exercises, although I try to persuade him to join me at the gym sometimes.

× Yes, my favorite hobby is doing yoga because I think it's really relaxing and it helps me managing my stress.

✓ Yes, my favorite hobby is doing yoga because I think it's really relaxing and it helps me manage my stress.

After 'helps' we should use the base form of the verb (help + do), not the gerund. Use 'help me manage' rather than 'help me managing'. This is a common collocation: 'help' + object + base verb. Also 'managing' creates an unnecessary continuous idea here; keep simple base form.

× Also I love to see movies, for example, I love the horror movies.

✓ Also I love watching movies; for example, I love horror movies.

Use 'watching movies' (verb + -ing form) for the action and omit the definite article before the general plural 'horror movies'. 'The horror movies' would refer to specific films. Also replace 'see' with 'watch' which is more natural for films.

× And finally, I think going to cinema would be my last hobby because I really enjoy to eat popcorn and build.

✓ And finally, I think going to the cinema would be my last hobby because I really enjoy eating popcorn and relaxing.

Use 'going to the cinema' with the definite article 'the' in this context. After 'enjoy' use the gerund 'eating' not 'to eat'. The verb 'build' does not make sense here; likely intended 'relax' or 'chill'. I used 'relaxing' to match the intended meaning.

× When I was a child, I used to love to play volleyball and doing and running.

✓ When I was a child, I used to love playing volleyball and running.

After 'used to love' prefer the gerund 'playing' and 'running' rather than mixing infinitive and gerund. Remove the extra 'doing' which is unnecessary and ungrammatical here.

× I remembered that I did almost two hours at my school every day of both sports and also I used to compete and I won a lot of medals with my friends.

✓ I remember that I practiced both sports at school for almost two hours every day, and I used to compete and won a lot of medals with my friends.

Tense consistency: 'I remembered' is unnatural for a habitual past fact; 'I remember' or 'I used to' is better. 'Did almost two hours at my school' is ungrammatical; use 'practiced ... for almost two hours at school every day'. Combine clauses to avoid repetition and keep past habitual meaning.

× We won the championship.

✓ We won the championship.

Sentence is correct; 'won' appropriately uses past tense for a completed past event. No change necessary.

× Yes, my hobby is doing sports.

✓ Yes, my hobby is playing sports.

'Doing sports' is understandable but 'playing sports' is more natural collocation in English when referring to participating in sports. Use gerund form after 'is'.

× When I was a child I used to play volleyball and I did athletics.

✓ When I was a child I used to play volleyball and do athletics.

After 'used to' maintain parallel structure with base verb forms: 'used to play' and 'used to do' or 'used to play volleyball and do athletics'. 'I did athletics' mixes forms; keep parallelism.

× Now when I'm an adult I'm doing yoga and going to the gym.

✓ Now that I'm an adult I do yoga and go to the gym.

For habitual present actions use the simple present 'do' and 'go' rather than present continuous. 'I'm doing yoga' could work if emphasizing a current ongoing action, but for routines 'I do yoga and go to the gym' is preferred.

× I think sports are really relaxing and helps me managing my stress off my workload.

✓ I think sports are really relaxing and help me manage the stress from my workload.

With compound subject 'sports' (plural), the verb should be plural 'help' not 'helps'. After 'help' use base verb 'manage' rather than gerund. 'Managing my stress off my workload' is awkward; use 'manage the stress from my workload' for clarity.

× It depends on my family member.

✓ It depends on the family member.

Use 'the family member' or 'which family member' to refer generally; 'my family member' is odd without specification. Alternatively, 'It depends on the family member' is more natural.

× For example, with my dad we love to do exercise and we go to the gym together.

✓ For example, my dad and I love to exercise and we go to the gym together.

Use 'my dad and I' as the subject for natural word order. 'Love to do exercise' is awkward; 'love to exercise' or 'love exercising' is more natural. Keep parallel structure.

× However, with my husband, he doesn't like to go to the gym.

✓ However, my husband doesn't like to go to the gym.

Remove the redundant pronoun 'he' when 'my husband' is the subject. The verb 'doesn't like' is correctly conjugated for third person singular.

× He loves to play on computer which is a hobby that I don't like.

✓ He loves to play on the computer, which is a hobby that I don't like.

Use 'on the computer' or better 'play computer games' / 'play on the computer'. Include the definite article 'the'. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is a hobby...'.

× I'm trying to let let him to go to gym.

✓ I'm trying to let him go to the gym.

After 'let' use the base verb without 'to': 'let him go'. Remove the duplicate 'let'. Include the definite article 'the' before 'gym'. 'Trying to let' is okay but 'trying to get him to go to the gym' is another natural alternative.