爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar; give one clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and avoid redundancy. For example, say you enjoy three hobbies and explain briefly how each helps you.

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies: reading books, watching movies and surfing the Internet. For example, reading helps me relax and learn new things, watching movies is a way to unwind, and surfing the Internet helps me keep up with news and hobbies.

建议: Use correct tense and clearer structure: start with a topic sentence in past tense, then give a specific detail with a linking word. Remove filler words and correct verbs.

示例: Yes, I had a hobby of riding a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode my bike from home to school every day, which kept me active and independent.

建议: Clarify meaning and fix word choice and grammar. State the hobby clearly and explain why you kept it, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid unclear phrases.

示例: Yes, I have enjoyed reading books since childhood. My parents encouraged me to read because it improves my studies, so I developed a habit of reading regularly.

建议: Be concise and use correct grammar and linking words. Give a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail about when or how you watch football together.

示例: Yes, my family and I all enjoy watching football. We usually watch matches together on weekends, which helps us bond and share conversations about the game.

× Umm yes, I have many hobbies like reading books, uh, watching movie and surfing the Internet.

✓ Umm yes, I have many hobbies like reading books, uh, watching movies and surfing the Internet.

The noun 'movie' should be plural 'movies' to match the plural list 'many hobbies' and parallel structure. Use plural nouns for multiple items and maintain parallel form in lists. Suggestion: Use 'movies' and keep items parallel: 'reading books, watching movies and surfing the Internet.'

× Umm I think uh these umm this hobby can help me eat really like up to a busy day.

✓ Umm I think this hobby can help me feel refreshed after a busy day.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice and word order ('eat really like up to a busy day' is ungrammatical). Replace incorrect phrase with 'feel refreshed after a busy day' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: Express effect clearly with correct verbs and prepositions: 'help me feel... after a busy day.'

× Umm, yes, when I will try, I had uh, some hobby like rode, rode a bicycle.

✓ Umm, yes, when I was a child, I had a hobby of riding a bicycle.

The original mixes future modal 'will' with past 'had' and repeats 'rode'. Use past tense consistently for childhood ('was') and the noun form 'riding' to describe a hobby. Suggestion: Use 'when I was a child' and 'a hobby of riding a bicycle.'

× Uh, I usually rode a bicycle when uh, I go to, I go to from my home to my school.

✓ Uh, I usually rode my bicycle when I went from my home to my school.

Mix of past 'rode' and present 'go' is inconsistent. Maintain past tense throughout. Also use 'my bicycle' and 'went' for past movement. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and simplify: 'I usually rode my bicycle when I went from home to school.'

× Yes, I have a hobby, the disease reading book because uh, when I will try my mom and my dad, uh talk, talk to me that reading book is good for your umm, study.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby: reading books, because when I was young my mom and dad told me that reading is good for my studies.

Original contains nonsense 'the disease', incorrect tense 'will try', and awkward phrasing. Replace with clear noun phrase 'reading books' and use past tense 'told' for parental advice, and 'my studies' for correct possessive. Suggestion: Use simple, clear expressions: 'when I was young my parents told me that reading is good for my studies.'

× So I usually reading book.

✓ So I usually read books.

'Usually' requires the base verb with appropriate tense: in present simple use 'read' (pronounced 'reed') and plural 'books'. Using 'reading' here is incorrect without auxiliary. Suggestion: Use 'I usually read books.'

× Uh, yes, my family and I both like, uh, watching football because, umm, it is, uh, this is the way to connect, uh, many members in, in my family.

✓ Uh, yes, my family and I both like watching football because it is a way to connect many members of my family.

Remove filler words and maintain present simple 'like watching'. Use 'a way to connect' and preposition 'of' for 'members of my family'. Suggestion: Keep sentence concise and use correct preposition 'of'.

× So I, so in the weekend we usually watching football.

✓ So on the weekend we usually watch football.

Place adverb 'usually' before the verb 'watch' in present simple. Use preposition 'on' with 'the weekend' (or 'at the weekend' in British English) and base verb 'watch' for habitual action. Suggestion: 'We usually watch football on the weekend.'