爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp hơn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, dùng câu ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu), và dùng từ nối để mạch lạc. Nên nêu rõ một hoặc hai sở thích, lý do và lợi ích cụ thể. Ví dụ: giới thiệu sở thích, mô tả tần suất/ai cùng chơi, và lợi ích cụ thể như giữ dáng hoặc giảm căng thẳng.

示例: I enjoy playing sports and video games. I usually play badminton or football with my friends or my older brothers twice a week, which helps me stay fit and relax after studying. Playing with others also improves my teamwork and makes exercise more fun.

建议: Cần giữ thì đồng nhất (quá khứ khi nói về tuổi thơ), tránh lặp từ và rút gọn thông tin. Nên dùng một câu chủ đề ở thì quá khứ rồi thêm một hoặc hai câu chi tiết (tần suất, loại trò chơi, cảm nhận).

示例: Yes, when I was a child I loved playing games and sports with my friends. I often spent my free time playing online games or football with them, usually on weekends. Those activities were very fun and helped me make close friends.

建议: Cần rõ ràng hơn và đúng thì (quá khứ cho việc bắt đầu, hiện tại cho tình trạng tiếp tục). Tránh câu dài lộn xộn; trình bày thứ tự sự kiện rõ ràng: bắt đầu khi nào, tiếp tục ra sao, một ví dụ cụ thể vừa hoàn thành. Sửa ngữ pháp (have had → played).

示例: Yes, football has been my hobby since childhood. I always wanted to play an official match with my friends, and recently I finally played a friendly match with one of my best friends, which felt very meaningful.

建议: Cần diễn đạt chính xác và ngắn gọn: trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích khác biệt bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết. Sửa lỗi số nhiều/số ít và cụm từ (only children → the only child; have a strong person about football → am the only one really into football).

示例: Not really. I am the only one in my family who is really into football; most of my family prefer surfing the Internet or following fashion trends.

× My hobby is that I can play game and sports with my friend and my older brothers.

✓ My hobby is playing games and sports with my friends and my older brothers.

The structure 'My hobby is that I can play...' is unnatural. After 'hobby is' use a gerund (verb+ing). Also use plural 'games' and 'friends' for general activities and people. Suggestion: use 'My hobby is playing games and sports with my friends and my older brothers.'

× For example, when I have spent time, I often spend time playing badminton or football with my friends, so that I cannot also keep fit, but also to relax after studying hard.

✓ For example, when I have free time, I often spend it playing badminton or football with my friends, so that I can both keep fit and relax after studying hard.

The phrase 'when I have spent time' is incorrect; use 'when I have free time'. 'Spend time' needs an object ('it'). 'Cannot also keep fit, but also to relax' mixes negatives and infinitives incorrectly. Use 'can both keep fit and relax' to express two positive outcomes. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× When I was a child, my hobbies were playing game and sport with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, my hobbies were playing games and sports with my friends.

Use plural 'games' and 'sports' for general activities. The tense 'were' is correct for past. Keep gerunds 'playing'.

× When I have free time, for example, when I had spare time, I often take time to play online games with my friends.

✓ When I have free time, for example in my spare time, I often take time to play online games with my friends.

Mixed tenses: 'When I have free time' (present) followed by 'when I had spare time' (past) is inconsistent. Use present 'in my spare time'. 'Take time to play' is fine. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, of course, as a child I only wanted to have an official football match with my friends and recently if I fulfill my dreams as I have had a football match with one of my best friend which was really meaningful to me.

✓ Yes, of course. As a child I always wanted to play an official football match with my friends, and recently I fulfilled that dream by having a match with one of my best friends, which was really meaningful to me.

Tense and form issues: 'wanted to have an official football match' is unnatural; 'wanted to play an official match' is better. 'Recently if I fulfill my dreams as I have had' mixes conditional and perfect incorrectly. Use simple past 'I fulfilled that dream' or 'I had a match'. 'One of my best friend' needs plural 'friends'. Use 'which was really meaningful to me' to modify the whole clause.

× Not really, because in my family I am the only children who have a strong person about football and all the members are keen on surfing the Internet or fashion.

✓ Not really, because in my family I am the only child who is really into football, and the other family members are more keen on surfing the Internet or fashion.

'Only children' should be singular 'only child' because speaker is one person. 'Who have a strong person about football' is ungrammatical; use 'who is really into football' or 'who likes football strongly'. 'All the members are keen on' is awkward; use 'the other family members are more keen on'. Pronoun and noun agreement and idiomatic expressions corrected.