爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and concise structure (max 5 sentences). Avoid repetitions and unclear phrasing. Add one or two specific details and a linking word. Practice correct verb tenses and singular/plural forms.

示例: Yes. My main hobby is playing football, which I have done since childhood. I used to play in school competitions and now I often play with my friends in the local park. I also enjoy singing in my free time, especially at family gatherings.

建议: Give a clear, concise answer with correct past tense and fewer hesitations. Start with a topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then provide one or two specific examples using linking words (for example, "for example" or "also"). Avoid filler words and incorrect grammar like "I am very eager to singing."

示例: Yes. As a child, I loved singing and dancing. For example, I often performed in school shows and practiced traditional dances with my family. These activities helped me build confidence and made me very happy.

建议: Answer directly using present perfect or simple present to show continuity (e.g., "I have played football since childhood"). Keep sentences short, correct verb forms, and include a brief specific detail about where or how often you play. Use one linking word to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I have played football since childhood. I played for my school team and now I still play regularly with friends in the neighborhood park. Playing football has stayed with me because it keeps me fit and helps me socialise.

建议: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example "also" or "too") and correct verb agreement ("my brother also likes"). Provide a brief specific detail about how you share the hobby.

示例: Yes. My brother also likes football and we have played together since childhood. We often meet on weekends to practice or play friendly matches in our local park.

× As do I have hobbies that I want to play a football since childhood I play every sports event where at school or with gathering with my friends.

✓ I have had a hobby of playing football since childhood; I play in every sports event at school and when I gather with my friends.

The original sentence has incorrect word order, unnecessary auxiliary 'do', and mixed tense/phrasing. Use 'I have had' or 'I have had a hobby of' to express a hobby continuing from childhood to present. Use 'playing football' (gerund) after 'hobby of'. Use 'since childhood' as a time expression placed after the activity. Replace 'every sports event where at school or with gathering with my friends' with clear phrases: 'every sports event at school and when I gather with my friends'. Combine clauses with appropriate punctuation to avoid run-on sentence.

× I love football, playing footballs so and also singing too.

✓ I love football and playing football, and I also like singing.

The original repeats ideas and uses plural 'footballs' incorrectly. Use conjunctions correctly and avoid redundant words ('so', 'too'). 'Playing football' is the correct gerund phrase; 'like' is a better verb collocation with 'singing'.

× I, I have hobbies when I, I wasn't, I was tired.

✓ When I was a child, I had hobbies even though I sometimes felt tired.

The original is disfluent and mixes tenses and fragments. Clarify time ('When I was a child') and use past tense 'had' for childhood. If mentioning tiredness, add a clause 'even though I sometimes felt tired' to make a complete, grammatical sentence.

× My parents tell me about I am very eager to singing and dancing.

✓ My parents told me that I was very eager to sing and dance.

Use past tense 'told' to match 'when I was a child'. Reported speech requires 'that' and change present 'am' to past 'was'. Use infinitives 'to sing and dance' rather than 'to singing and dancing'. Pronoun and verb forms must agree.

× So in childhood, I'm basically very much, uh, likes to singing and dancing.

✓ So in my childhood, I basically liked singing and dancing very much.

Use past tense 'liked' for childhood. 'I'm' is present and incorrect here. 'Likes to singing' mixes third-person 'likes' with gerund 'singing'; instead use 'liked singing' or 'liked to sing'. Move adverb 'very much' to natural position.

× As I had that hobby continually of playing football when I was child, I play football in in school and now I'm getting older, but also I continuously playing with my friends in neighborhood garden football.

✓ I have continued my hobby of playing football since I was a child; I played football at school, and now that I'm older I still play with my friends in the neighborhood park.

Use 'have continued' or 'have had' to show continuity from childhood to present. 'When I was child' needs article: 'a child'. Use past 'played' for school period and present 'still play' for current habit. Replace 'continuously playing' with 'still play' and 'neighborhood garden' with 'neighborhood park' for natural English. Fix duplicated word 'in in'.

× My brother also like to play football with me from my childhood and that he is my family members who wants to join with me to play football every time from childhood I guess.

✓ My brother also liked to play football with me since our childhood; he is the family member who has wanted to join me to play football all the time.

Maintain past/present consistency: 'also liked' or 'also has liked' from childhood. Use 'since our childhood' not 'from my childhood' when referring to both siblings. 'Family members' should be singular 'family member' here; use correct verb forms: 'has wanted' or 'wanted'. Remove redundant phrases 'I guess' or place them appropriately. Also use 'join me' rather than 'join with me'.