爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with one clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (e.g., "It's the those are"). Use correct ordinal formatting and articles.

示例: I have several hobbies. Mainly, I enjoy dancing and singing, and I also like reading novels. For example, I dance twice a week to stay active, and I read fiction before bed because it helps me relax.

建议: Open with a direct topic sentence and group similar activities together. Use linking words (for example, and, also) to make the answer coherent, and correct small errors in phrasing (e.g., "playing along with our cousins" -> "playing with my cousins").

示例: Yes, I did. As a child I loved outdoor games and playing with my cousins. For example, we often played tag and built things with blocks, and I also watched cartoons after school.

建议: Give a clear, confident statement and correct tense and grammar errors ("I still enjoying it", "it feels me"). Use linking words to add one or two specific supporting details about how often you practise or why it matters to you.

示例: Yes. I have danced since I was five and I still enjoy it. I practise three times a week, and dancing helps me express myself and feel confident in social situations.

建议: Give a direct answer, avoid vague phrasing and correct unclear words (e.g., "like we are unique on our own ways", "mom likes to log", "I love mini"). Use one or two specific comparisons and linking words to clarify differences.

示例: No, our hobbies are quite different. For example, my father enjoys fixing motorcycles and talking about engines, while my mother prefers gardening. In contrast, I like dancing and singing, so our interests don't overlap much.

× Yes, I do have lots of hobbies. First is dancing, second singing and 3rd is reading novels.

✓ Yes, I do have lots of hobbies. First is dancing, second is singing, and third is reading novels.

Parallel structure and list items should use consistent forms and articles; 'second singing' lacks 'is' and commas are needed for clarity. Use 'third' instead of '3rd' in formal speech.

× It's the those are the things that I do when I have free time and I feel relaxed and happy doing it.

✓ Those are the things that I do when I have free time, and I feel relaxed and happy doing them.

Use correct demonstrative pronoun 'Those' (not 'It's the those'). Maintain plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'things'. Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses.

× Yes I did have hobbies when I was a child. It was playing games with my sister outside and playing along with our cousins and like playing blocks and toys and also watching cartoons.

✓ Yes, I did have hobbies when I was a child. They were playing games with my sister outside, playing with our cousins, playing with blocks and toys, and watching cartoons.

Use plural subject 'They' to refer to multiple hobbies (not 'It was'). Use simple past plural 'were'. Replace 'playing along with our cousins' with 'playing with our cousins' for correct collocation. Add commas for list clarity.

× The hobby that I think I've had since childhood is probably dancing. I've been dancing since I was 5 and I still enjoying it.

✓ The hobby that I think I've had since childhood is probably dancing. I've been dancing since I was five, and I still enjoy it.

After 'I still' you need the base verb 'enjoy' (not the -ing form). Use 'five' in words in formal speech. Maintain present perfect continuous 'I've been dancing' then simple present 'I still enjoy' to express current state.

× I still enjoy doing it until now and I can say it feels me.

✓ I still enjoy doing it now, and I can say it makes me feel true to myself.

'Until now' is awkward with 'still'; use 'now'. 'It feels me' is incorrect—use 'it makes me feel' followed by an adjective phrase. Maintain idiomatic expression 'true to myself.'

× It makes me feel true to myself.

✓ It makes me feel true to myself.

Sentence is correct; included to show final corrected version matches idiomatic usage. No grammatical change needed.

× No, it's surprising that we are different in those ways.

✓ No, it's surprising that we are different in those ways.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; kept as is. 'It's surprising that...' correctly introduces the comment.

× Like we are unique on our own ways.

✓ We are unique in our own ways.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'ways' (not 'on'), and omit the informal opener 'Like' in formal speech. 'Unique in our own ways' is idiomatic.

× So my father likes fixing things and talk about motorcycle and engines, but my mom likes to log so it's different.

✓ So my father likes fixing things and talking about motorcycles and engines, but my mom likes to read blogs, so it's different.

Maintain parallel gerund form: 'likes fixing' and 'talking' (not 'talk'). Use plural 'motorcycles' and 'engines'. 'Likes to log' is likely a mistake; interpreted as 'likes to read blogs' (or 'likes logging' if intended). If 'log' meant 'vlog' or 'blog', use the correct noun. Also add commas for clarity.

× I love mini.

✓ I love miniatures. (If you meant a specific thing, say 'I love mini cars' or 'I love miniature models.')

'I love mini' is incomplete and unclear. Provide the full noun 'miniatures' or specify the object to make the sentence grammatically and semantically clear.