爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, avoid redundancy, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Add a linking word when giving examples.

示例: Yes. I have several hobbies, but listening to music and swimming are my favorites because they help me relax and keep fit. For example, I usually listen to music in the evening to unwind, and I go swimming at the weekend to clear my mind and get exercise.

建议: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms and word order, avoid awkward phrases, and provide a clear linking phrase for the routine. Keep it concise and specific about frequency.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I enjoyed dancing because my parents always applauded after my performances. As a result, we usually celebrated with a big meal after my weekly dance class.

建议: Correct sentence structure and word choice. Remove awkward fragments, use linking words to contrast past and present, and give specific examples of genres. Avoid invented terms like 'Public Music'.

示例: Yes, I do. I have enjoyed listening to music since I was a child, although my taste has changed over time. For example, I used to listen to children's songs, but now I prefer pop music and contemporary artists.

建议: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Use correct verb agreement and clearer phrases for preferences. Replace filler words and explain differences succinctly with linking words.

示例: Some of our hobbies overlap, but not all. For example, we all watch TV together, although my father prefers news while my mother and I enjoy watching dramas and variety shows, which is quite normal.

× Yes, I do have several hobbies with listening to music and the swimming being my favorite because they help me to relax and stay fit.

✓ Yes, I have several hobbies, with listening to music and swimming being my favorites because they help me relax and stay fit.

Incorrect use of 'with' plus gerunds and unnecessary 'the' before 'swimming'. Use 'swimming' (gerund) without 'the' and keep parallel structure 'listening to music and swimming'. Also use 'favorites' to match plural 'hobbies', and omit 'to' after 'help me' when followed by base verb.'

× For example, I often listen to music in the evening to unwind and I swimming at weekends to clear my mind and get exercise.

✓ For example, I often listen to music in the evening to unwind and I swim on weekends to clear my mind and get exercise.

After 'I' you need the base form 'swim', not the participle 'swimming'. Also use 'on weekends' (correct preposition) and keep parallel verb forms 'listen' and 'swim'.

× When I was a child I really enjoyed dancing because after I finished dance, my parents always applauded for me and we always have a big meal after my dance class per week.

✓ When I was a child I really enjoyed dancing because after I finished my dance class my parents always applauded for me and we always had a big meal once a week.

Tense consistency: narrative about childhood should use past tense ('had' not 'have'). Also use 'finished my dance class' (include possessive) and 'once a week' or 'after my dance class each week' for natural phrasing. 'Applauded for me' is acceptable but 'applauded me' is more natural; kept original meaning.

× Yes I do. I've enjoyed listening to music since I was a child. Even though my test in music has changed over time.

✓ Yes, I do. I've enjoyed listening to music since I was a child, although my taste in music has changed over time.

Incorrect word 'test' should be 'taste'. Also combine sentences for clarity: use 'although' instead of 'even though' at start of sentence here and keep present perfect 'has changed' which is correct. Added comma and corrected 'I do' punctuation.

× For example, in my childhood I prefer like the children music, but now I prefer like the pop Public Music.

✓ For example, in my childhood I preferred children's music, but now I prefer pop music.

Tense and word choice: talking about childhood uses past 'preferred'. 'Children music' should be 'children's music' (possessive). 'Prefer like' is incorrect; use 'preferred' or 'prefer' with direct noun. 'Pop Public Music' is wrong; use 'pop music'.

× Some of them are the same, but not all. For example, my family members and I all enjoy watching TV together, but my father prefer news and uh, my mother and I perform the TV shows, so I think that's quite normal in most families.

✓ Some of them are the same, but not all. For example, my family and I all enjoy watching TV together, but my father prefers news and my mother and I watch TV shows, so I think that's quite normal in most families.

Subject-verb agreement: 'father prefers' requires third person singular 'prefers'. 'My family members and I' is awkward; 'my family and I' is natural. 'Perform the TV shows' is incorrect verb; use 'watch TV shows'. Removed filler 'uh' for clarity.