阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “it increases my vocabulary” and “it enhances my comprehension” are fine but don’t repeat structure). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep sentences short (maximum 3–4). Also correct common errors: say “I enjoy reading” or “I like reading,” use “it increases my vocabulary” (not “it increase”), and “it helps me concentrate” (not “stay concentrate”).

示例: I enjoy reading because it improves my vocabulary and enhances my comprehension. For example, reading novels exposes me to new words, while news articles help me understand different writing styles. As a result, I find it easier to follow lectures and discussions.

建议: Start with a clear preference sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, and, moreover). Avoid vague phrases like “so many others.” Fix grammar: say “I prefer reading on paper” and “it helps build my comprehension.” Keep to 2–3 sentences total.

示例: I prefer reading on paper because I find it easier to focus and remember what I read. For example, when I read printed books I can annotate and flip back to review, which helps me understand complex ideas better.

建议: Answer directly with a clear contrast and specific reasons. Use linking words like “whereas” correctly and complete the second clause. Improve wording: say “I read carefully in the morning because I’m fresh and focused, whereas in the evening I skim when I’m tired or busy.” Give a brief example of what you read carefully vs. skim.

示例: I read carefully in the morning because I’m fresh and can concentrate on difficult material, such as academic articles. In the evening, however, I usually skim emails or news because I’m tired and have less time.

× Of course, I'm very patient about reading as it offers numerous benefits including it increase my vocabulary skill as well as it also enhances my comprehension skill.

✓ Of course, I'm very patient about reading as it offers numerous benefits, including increasing my vocabulary and enhancing my comprehension.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'it' before verbs and has awkward noun phrases 'vocabulary skill' and 'comprehension skill'. This is a pronoun and word-choice issue. Replace 'including it increase' with the gerund 'including increasing' to show what reading does. Use parallel gerunds 'increasing' and 'enhancing' and simpler nouns 'vocabulary' and 'comprehension'. Also add a comma before 'including' for clarity.

× Apart from that it helps me to stay concentrate on.

✓ Apart from that, it helps me to stay concentrated.

The original uses incorrect phrasing 'stay concentrate on' and lacks a comma. This is an article/word form and sentence-structure issue: 'concentrate' should be the past participle adjective 'concentrated' or the gerund phrase 'stay focused'. Remove the trailing preposition 'on' unless specifying an object (e.g., 'on my work'). Add a comma after the introductory phrase.

× Actually pretty much both but mostly I guess enjoy reading on paper as it offers lots of benefits such as builds my comprehension skills strongly along with it offers numerous articles and so many others.

✓ Actually I enjoy both, but I mostly prefer reading on paper because it offers many benefits, such as greatly improving my comprehension and providing access to numerous articles.

The original sentence is run-on and ungrammatical. It contains informal fragments ('pretty much both'), incorrect clauses ('such as builds my comprehension skills strongly'), and redundant 'it offers'. Restructure into clear clauses: 'I enjoy both, but I mostly prefer...' Use 'improving' (gerund) rather than 'builds' after 'such as', and simplify phrases ('many benefits', 'providing access to numerous articles'). This fixes sentence structure and ensures parallel forms.

× Actually in the morning I stay very refreshed and relaxed at the time I read carefully any articles, whereas in the evening time I stay quite busy with my hectic routine so.

✓ In the morning I feel refreshed and relaxed, so I read articles carefully, whereas in the evening I am quite busy with my hectic routine.

The sentence uses awkward verbs and word order ('stay very refreshed', 'at the time I read carefully any articles'). Replace 'stay' with 'feel' and move adverbs to natural positions. Use 'read articles carefully' for natural word order; avoid unnecessary words like 'time' and ending with 'so'. This corrects tense and improves clarity and naturalness.