阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 어휘 선택과 문법 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장을 간단히 말한 뒤, 두세 개의 구체적 이유나 예시로 뒷받침하세요. 예를 들어 장르(소설·스릴러·코미디)를 언급할 때는 정확한 단어(‘novels’, ‘the suspense of thrillers’)를 사용하고, 불필요한 표현(예: 'songness', 'my hands wet')은 제거하세요. 연결어(for example, also, because)를 사용해 문장을 논리적으로 이어주고, 한 답변은 최대 3–4문장으로 유지하세요.

示例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially novels. I like thrillers because their suspense keeps me engaged and curious about what will happen next. I also read comedy novels when I want something light and funny. For example, last month I finished a humorous book that made my commute much more enjoyable.

建议: 의견은 분명하지만 문장 구조와 반복이 문제입니다. 먼저 명확한 주제 문장을 말하고, 그 이유를 1–2개의 구체적인 이유로 설명하세요. 불필요한 중복('because' 반복)과 어색한 표현('the paper is. Pretty to read')을 피하세요. 연결어(especially, since, because)를 사용해 이유와 결과를 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

示例: I prefer reading on a screen, mainly because it is more convenient. For instance, I can adjust the font size and read in the dark using a backlight. Although paper books are pleasant to hold, I often choose my tablet for long reading sessions because it reduces eye strain and is easy to carry.

建议: 의미는 전달되지만 문법과 어휘 사용이 부정확합니다. 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장을 쓰고, ‘언제 주의 깊게 읽는지’와 ‘언제 그렇지 않은지’를 구체적 예와 함께 나누어 설명하세요. 더 정확한 표현(‘important documents’, ‘casual messages’)과 연결 표현(‘for example’, ‘however’)을 사용하세요.

示例: I need to read carefully when the material is important, such as legal documents, work emails, or instructions. For example, I always read contracts slowly to avoid mistakes. However, I don't read carefully when the content is casual, like social media posts or simple advertisements.

× I like the songness of thrillers because I like my hands wet when I'm reading the books.

✓ I like the suspense of thrillers because I feel tense when I'm reading books.

'songness' is not a correct word; likely intended 'sogginess' or 'sadness' but context implies 'suspense'. 'my hands wet' is ungrammatical for expressing emotional reaction; use 'I feel tense' or 'I get nervous'. Also 'the books' is unnecessary; use 'books'. Replace incorrect vocabulary and revise phrase structure to convey intended meaning clearly. Korean: 'songness'는 올바른 단어가 아니며 문맥상 'suspense'가 적절합니다. 'my hands wet'는 감정 표현에 적합하지 않으므로 'I feel tense' 등으로 바꿔야 하고, 'the books' 대신 'books'가 자연스럽습니다.

× Yes, I like reading a book, especially on novels, and I like the songness of thrillers because I like my hands wet when I'm reading the books.

✓ Yes, I like reading books, especially novels, and I like the suspense of thrillers because I feel tense when I'm reading them.

Mixing singular 'a book' with 'novels' and using 'the books' creates number inconsistency. Use plural 'books' and refer back with plural pronoun 'them'. Also replace 'especially on novels' with 'especially novels' for idiomatic expression. Korean: 'a book'와 'novels'가 혼용되어 수 일치 문제가 발생합니다. 'books'로 통일하고, 지시대명사도 복수형 'them'으로 바꿔야 합니다.

× I prefer to read on screen because I'm not usually read on paper because the paper is. Pretty to read, but I think it's more comfortable to read on screen.

✓ I prefer to read on a screen because I don't usually read on paper; paper is pretty to look at, but I think it's more comfortable to read on a screen.

Incorrect preposition usage: use 'on a screen' or 'on screens' and 'read on paper' is okay but sentence structure is broken. 'the paper is. Pretty to read' is fragmented and 'pretty to read' is awkward—use 'pretty to look at'. Also fix double 'because' and subject omission 'I don't usually read'. Korean: 전치사 사용이 부정확하고 문장이 파편화되어 있습니다. 'on screen' 대신 'on a screen' 또는 'on screens'를 쓰고 'pretty to read'는 'pretty to look at'으로 고쳐야 합니다. 또한 'I don't usually read'로 주어를 명시해야 합니다.

× I prefer to read on screen because I'm not usually read on paper because the paper is. Pretty to read, but I think it's more comfortable to read on screen.

✓ I prefer to read on a screen because I don't usually read on paper; paper is pretty to look at, but I think reading on a screen is more comfortable.

The original has fragmented clauses and incorrect clause linking. Remove redundant 'because' and join ideas with a semicolon or conjunction. Ensure each clause has a subject and verb ('I don't usually read'). Clarify 'paper is pretty to look at' and overall readability. Korean: 문장 구성에 오류가 있어 절이 잘못 연결되어 있습니다. 중복된 'because'를 제거하고 세미콜론이나 접속사로 문장을 정리해야 합니다. 각 절에 주어와 동사를 명확히 하세요.

× I need to read carefully when it has very important components, but it is not must thing when it explains common things not important.

✓ I need to read carefully when something has very important parts, but it is not necessary when it explains common, unimportant things.

Tense is present but phrasing is awkward and ungrammatical: 'it has very important components' should be 'something has very important parts' or 'a text has important parts'. 'it is not must thing' is ungrammatical—use 'it is not necessary' or 'it's not a must'. Also restructure 'common things not important' to 'common, unimportant things'. Korean: 현재 시제를 사용하지만 표현이 어색합니다. 'it has very important components' 대신 'something has very important parts'를 쓰고, 'it is not must thing'는 'it is not necessary'로 고쳐야 합니다. 'common things not important'는 'common, unimportant things'로 정리하세요.

× I need to read carefully when it has very important components, but it is not must thing when it explains common things not important.

✓ I need to read carefully when something has very important parts, but it is not necessary when it explains common, unimportant things.

Original uses 'must' incorrectly as a noun phrase 'must thing'. Use modal/adjectival phrase 'it is not necessary' or 'it's not a must' to express lack of obligation. Ensure modal meaning is clear and grammatically correct. Korean: 'must'를 명사처럼 잘못 사용했습니다. 의무나 필요성을 표현하려면 'it is not necessary' 또는 'it's not a must'로 고쳐야 합니다.