阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 명확한 주제문으로 답을 시작하고, 문법 오류와 어색한 표현을 교정하세요. 또한 supporting detail을 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적인 예로 정리하고, 문장들을 연결하는 연결어를 활용하세요. 예: ‘Yes, I enjoy reading because…’로 시작하고 이유(취향, 얻는 것)와 구체적 예(최근에 읽은 책의 내용 또는 느낀 점)를 덧붙이세요.

示例: Yes, I enjoy reading because it is my favorite hobby and helps me understand different perspectives. For example, last month I read a novel about family relationships which made me see how people cope with loss. As a result, I feel more empathetic and open-minded.

建议: 중복되는 말(uh, umm)과 어색한 중복 표현을 줄이고 이유들을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 또한 하나의 주된 장점(예: 편의성)과 보조적인 장점(예: 메모 기능)을 짧고 구체적으로 제시하세요. 연결어(for example, also)를 사용해 자연스럽게 이어가세요.

示例: I prefer reading on a screen because it is very convenient for commuting. For example, I can read e-books on the subway and quickly highlight passages or add notes. Also, digital books save space and are easy to search.

建议: 문장의 의미가 불분명하고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 주제문으로 ‘I read carefully when…’ 형태로 명확히 답하고, 반대 상황도 하나의 문장으로 정리하세요. 또한 불필요한 말버릇(umm, uh)을 제거하고 구체적 이유나 예시를 제시하세요.

示例: I read carefully when I need to understand something important, such as study materials or work reports. However, when I am stressed or tired, I prefer light activities like meeting friends or watching videos, so I do not read seriously then.

建议: 간결한 주제문으로 선호를 밝히고, 이유와 구체적 예를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 현재 답변은 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확하고 예시가 불분명합니다. 예시를 하나 명확히 들어 ‘for example’로 연결하세요.

示例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me focus on the story and understand the characters. For example, when I joined a book exchange with friends, I read each book carefully so I could discuss its themes during our meeting.

× Yes, I like reading it is my favorite hobby.

✓ Yes, I like reading; it is my favorite hobby.

The original is a run-on sentence missing proper punctuation or conjunction between independent clauses. Use a semicolon or separate into two sentences to join related independent clauses correctly. Suggestion: 'Yes, I like reading. It is my favorite hobby.' or use a semicolon as corrected.

× When I read a book I can guess others perspective and I can so various views of life.

✓ When I read a book, I can guess others' perspectives and see various views of life.

Possessive form for others must be others' and 'perspective' should be plural to match context. 'So' is incorrect; use 'see' to express perceiving various views. Also add a comma after the subordinating clause.

× I think another.

✓ I think differently.

The fragment 'I think another' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use an adverb 'differently' to express a different opinion or 'I think another way' if meaning is different; corrected to a concise, grammatical form.

× I prefer to read on the screen on because I can read, uh, on the subway or bus, umm, it is very convenient and umm, I can leave some memo and highlight umm.

✓ I prefer to read on a screen because I can read on the subway or bus; it is very convenient, and I can leave memos and highlight text.

Preposition 'on the screen on' is redundant; use 'on a screen'. Use article 'a' before 'screen'. 'Memo' should be plural 'memos' for general capability. 'Highlight' needs an object 'text' or gerund; adjusted to 'highlight text'. Punctuation added for clarity.

× Umm, when I feel very stressful, umm, I wear some books and I come down and when I miss umm, a lot of dopamine at the time, uh, I, I don't read book.

✓ When I feel very stressed, I take out some books to calm down, and when I lack a lot of dopamine, I don't read books.

Use adjective 'stressed' not 'stressful' to describe feeling. 'Wear some books' is incorrect; likely 'take out' or 'read' books. 'Come down' replaced with 'calm down' for intended meaning. 'Miss ... dopamine' is unnatural; use 'lack' or 'have low' dopamine. 'I don't read book' needs plural 'books'.

× I met some of my friend.

✓ I met some of my friends.

'Some of my friend' is ungrammatical; use plural 'friends' and 'some of' requires plural noun. Alternatively, 'I met some friends' is acceptable.

× Umm I prepare detailed reading because I can focus on the books story.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because I can focus on the book's story.

'Prepare detailed reading' is incorrect verb choice; 'prefer' fits the context of preference. 'Books story' needs possessive 'book's'. Also add article 'the' was unnecessary before 'book's story', use 'the book's story' or 'the story of the book'.

× Umm, for example, umm, when I got some exchange, book exchange reading umm at the time my friend.

✓ For example, when I participated in a book exchange with my friend, I did more scanning than detailed reading.

Original is fragmented and unclear. 'Got some exchange, book exchange reading' is ungrammatical; clarify intended meaning as 'participated in a book exchange'. Added contrast to explain preference. Ensure sentence is complete with subject and verb.