阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words (uh, um) and repair phrases. Aim for natural phrasing and keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I do enjoy reading, especially books related to my major in nutrition and self‑improvement titles. For example, I recently read a nutrition textbook that helped me understand dietary planning, and a personal development book that taught practical time‑management techniques.

建议: Answer directly and finish your example. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and avoid trailing sentences. Mention one clear reason and a brief specific example. Keep it to two or three sentences.

示例: I prefer reading on paper because it's easier to highlight and write notes while studying. For example, when I revise for exams I underline key points and write margin notes, which helps me remember information better.

建议: Structure the answer with a clear contrast and use linking words (whereas, while, because). Give a concise specific example for each case and avoid hesitations. Keep it within three sentences.

示例: I read carefully when preparing for exams because I need to understand and memorize concepts. In contrast, when I read a newspaper or my diary I usually skim because I only want the main ideas and I don't need to remember every detail.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and complete your contrasting examples. Use linking words (for example, however, therefore) and avoid unfinished sentences. Be specific about when you choose scanning and when detailed reading, and provide a short reason for each.

示例: It depends on my purpose: for studying complex topics I prefer detailed reading because I need to fully understand concepts. However, for practice tests or general information I use scanning to locate key facts quickly.

× 'Honestly speaking, I like to read, but I'm not really fond of it.'

✓ 'Honestly speaking, I like to read, but I'm not really fond of reading.'

'It is a sentence structure issue: the pronoun "it" is vague and doesn't clearly refer to the gerund phrase "reading." Replacing "it" with "reading" clarifies the meaning and maintains parallel structure. Suggestion: use the gerund when referring back to an activity (reading).'

× 'Umm, I read books, uh, that are, uh, related to my major that is nutrition.'

✓ 'I read books that are related to my major, which is nutrition.'

'Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure: the original has filler words and an awkward appositive clause. Use "which is nutrition" or "which is nutrition" after a comma for a natural appositive. Also remove unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: keep clauses concise and use commas correctly for nonrestrictive information.'

× 'Other than that, I like to read, uh, books which focus on self improvement.'

✓ 'Other than that, I like to read books that focus on self-improvement.'

'Sentence structure and adjective form: use "self-improvement" as a hyphenated noun/adjective, and prefer "that" for restrictive clauses restricting the type of books. Remove filler words for clarity.'

× 'I enjoy reading them and it's, uh, they're, they have some type of message that I get and.'

✓ 'I enjoy reading them because they convey a message that I understand.'

'Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure: the original is fragmented and uses redundant pronouns (it's, they're, they). Recast as a clear cause-effect sentence: "because they convey a message that I understand." Suggestion: avoid fillers and ensure a complete clause with subject and verb.'

× 'Honestly, I prefer both uh, but to the one which I am more inclined towards is to read on a paper.'

✓ 'Honestly, I like both, but I am more inclined to read on paper.'

'Present tense and sentence structure issue: original mixes forms and uses incorrect prepositional phrasing "to read on a paper." Correct phrasing is "read on paper" or "read on a paper copy." Also simplify "prefer both" to "I like both" or "I prefer both formats." Suggestion: use concise present-tense constructions.'

× 'It's easy to highlight things on a paper as compared to the reading on a screen as well.'

✓ 'It's easier to highlight things on paper compared to reading on a screen.'

'Incorrect use of prepositions and comparative structure: use "on paper" (no article) and say "easier" for comparison. Remove unnecessary "the" before "reading." Suggestion: use correct prepositions with medium nouns and comparative adjective forms.'

× 'For instance, when I read, I am uh, I used to make points, so that is easy when I'm reading on.'

✓ 'For instance, when I read, I make notes, so it is easier on paper.'

'Sentence structure and tense issue: "I used to make points" implies past habit; context requires present habitual. "Make points" is colloquial; "make notes" is clearer. End phrase "when I'm reading on" is incomplete—add the object "paper." Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and complete the comparative phrase.'

× 'I read very carefully when I am preparing for exams or tests, while when I am reading newspaper or a diary, uh, then I just skim the text and I don't have to, uh, you know, go in depth for it.'

✓ 'I read very carefully when I am preparing for exams or tests, but when I read a newspaper or a diary I just skim the text and I do not need to go into depth.'

'Present tense and article/preposition issues: use "read a newspaper" or "read newspapers" (article or plural) and say "go into depth" not "go in depth for it." Replace fillers and contractions for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent present continuous/simple forms and correct verb-preposition collocations.'

× 'And the other reasons include that I don't need to memorize those details, so.'

✓ 'Another reason is that I do not need to memorize those details.'

'Incorrect use of quantifiers and sentence structure: "the other reasons include that" is awkward and plural while speaker gives a single reason. Use "another reason is that" for a single item. Remove trailing filler. Suggestion: match singular/plural and finish sentences fully.'

× 'I it totally depends on what I am reading and what is the purpose behind reading it.'

✓ 'It totally depends on what I am reading and on the purpose of the reading.'

'Sentence structure: stray pronoun "I it" is an error; remove the extra pronoun and parallelize the second clause. "Purpose behind reading it" is wordy; "purpose of the reading" is clearer. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb order and parallel structure.'

× 'For instance, if I am preparing for an exam, then I would go for a detailed reading.'

✓ 'For instance, if I am preparing for an exam, I will do a detailed reading.'

'Present tense/modal usage: the conditional "would" suggests hypothetical; because the clause begins with "if I am preparing" (a real present/future situation), use "will" for future or present simple "I do a detailed reading." Suggestion: align conditional and result clauses properly.'

× 'But if I am preparing for uh, MCQS in general or uh, something that is not of a great importance, then I will, uh, use.'

✓ 'But if I am preparing for MCQs in general or something that is not very important, then I will skim.'

'Sentence structure and word choice: fix abbreviation "MCQS" to "MCQs," use "not very important" instead of "not of a great importance," and complete the sentence by specifying the action (e.g., "skim"). Remove fillers. Suggestion: choose precise verbs and finish clauses.'