走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve pronunciation and grammar, avoid repetition, and make sentences concise with a clear topic sentence and supporting reason. Use linking words for cohesion and correct word choice (e.g., 'walk' not 'wok', 'every day' two words, 'to keep me fit' → 'to keep myself fit'). Limit to up to 4–5 sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'stay healthy', 'lose weight', 'feel refreshed').

示例: Yes, I walk most days for about 45 minutes to an hour to stay healthy and lose weight. In addition, walking helps me feel more energetic and refreshed, especially when I walk outdoors. I usually walk in the morning because it improves my mood and clears my mind.

建议: Provide a direct topic sentence about your childhood walking habits, reduce hesitations and filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details (where, who, activities). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' for coherence and correct collocations (e.g., 'absorbed in gadgets', 'play outside').

示例: Yes, I often played and walked outside when I was a child because there were fewer electronic devices back then. For example, I used to walk to the park with my siblings and friends to play games and explore the neighborhood, which kept us active.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetitions. Use linking words ('for example', 'because') and more precise vocabulary ('the best way to unwind', 'relax and recharge'). Keep answers concise and correct verb forms and articles ('most people love').

示例: People like walking in parks because it is a gentle form of exercise that helps them relax and recharge. For example, after a long day many choose an evening walk to enjoy fresh air and calm surroundings, which reduces stress.

建议: Use a clear conditional structure and avoid filler sounds. Give one strong reason and a specific detail to support your preference. Correct phrasing ('beside the river' → 'by the river', 'provides beautiful scenery'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk near the mountains because the air is fresh and the scenery is beautiful. Walking there would feel more energizing than walking by a river, and I could enjoy peaceful views and wildlife.

建议: Begin with a clear past-time sentence, remove hesitations, and use correct adverbs ('often' or 'frequently' instead of 'oftenly'). Provide a specific time and one or two details about what you did or who you met. Use linking words for flow ('because', 'also').

示例: Recently I went for a walk along the seafront because I live nearby and usually walk there in the mornings. The sea air makes me feel refreshed, and I often chat with neighbors or other walkers while I exercise.

× Yes, I like wok very much as an exercise.

✓ Yes, I like walking very much as an exercise.

The student wrote 'wok' (spelling error) and used a noun form incorrectly; 'walking' is the correct gerund to describe an activity. Use the gerund (verb + -ing) when referring to activities: 'I like walking'. Suggestion: Practice forming gerunds from verbs for activities (walk -> walking).

× I do everyday walking around 45 minutes and one hour every day.

✓ I walk every day for about 45 minutes to one hour.

The original uses 'do everyday walking' which is awkward and has word order problems. Use the simple present 'I walk' for habitual actions, and place time expressions after the verb phrase: 'for about 45 minutes to one hour'. Suggestion: Use 'I walk every day' + 'for' + duration to describe routine activities.

× I walk to keep me fit and to reduce my belly fit.

✓ I walk to keep myself fit and to reduce my belly fat.

Use the reflexive pronoun 'myself' after 'to keep' when referring back to the subject. 'Belly fit' is incorrect; the intended noun is 'belly fat'. Suggestion: Use 'myself' for reflexive actions and check noun choice ('fat' not 'fit') for body descriptions.

× Sometimes I want to when I have to make myself energize and refreshed at that time.

✓ Sometimes I want to walk when I need to make myself feel energized and refreshed.

The original sentence has missing words and incorrect verb forms ('want to when I have to make myself energize'). Use 'want to walk' and 'make myself feel energized and refreshed' for natural expression. 'Energized' is the correct past participle/ adjective form and 'feel' links the state. Suggestion: Keep verbs complete ('want to walk') and use 'feel' + adjective to describe states.

× Yes, during my childhood, the scenario was totally different from right now as today's kids are very much absorbed in their gadgets.

✓ Yes, during my childhood the situation was totally different from now because today's kids are very much absorbed in their gadgets.

'Scenario' is odd in this context; 'situation' is more natural. 'Right now' can be shortened to 'now'. The tense 'was' is correct for past; adjust word choice and conjunction: use 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity. Suggestion: Prefer 'situation' for daily-life comparisons and use 'because' to show cause.

× But at, at when I was a child and we used to play outside with siblings and friends and that's a very not common phenomena.

✓ But when I was a child we used to play outside with my siblings and friends, and that was a very common phenomenon.

Remove extra filler 'at, at'. Use 'my siblings' to clarify possession. 'That's a very not common phenomena' mixes tense and polarity; use past tense 'was' and positive phrase 'a very common phenomenon' (phenomenon singular). 'Phenomena' is plural. Suggestion: Avoid fillers, ensure noun number agreement (phenomenon vs phenomena) and align tense consistently.

× Nothing is special.

✓ Nothing special to mention.

The sentence 'Nothing is special' is grammatically acceptable but sounds awkward in conversation. 'Nothing special to mention' is more natural as a short response. Suggestion: Use common short conversational phrases for succinct replies.

× So yes, uh, I walked run.

✓ So yes, I used to run and walk.

'I walked run' combines two verbs without correct form. Use 'used to' for past habitual actions or list verbs with 'and': 'I used to run and walk' or 'I used to walk and run'. Suggestion: When listing past habits, use 'used to' or coordinate verbs with 'and'.

× Walking is very good exercise for your health.

✓ Walking is a very good exercise for your health.

Add the article 'a' before 'very good exercise' because 'exercise' is a countable noun in this context when referring to a type of activity. Alternatively, use 'Walking is very good for your health.' Suggestion: Remember articles with countable nouns: 'a very good exercise' or rephrase without 'exercise'.

× It refreshes you, energizes you and it's a bet best technique to unwind yourself after a long tiring day.

✓ It refreshes and energizes you, and it's the best technique to unwind after a long, tiring day.

Remove redundant 'you' after verbs when subject is clear. 'a bet best' seems to be a mispronunciation of 'the best'; use 'the best'. 'Unwind yourself' is acceptable but 'unwind' alone is more natural. Add comma in 'long, tiring day'. Suggestion: Use 'the best' for superlative, avoid redundant pronouns, and place commas between adjective pairs.

× That's why most of the people, uh loves walking and most of the people love to walk in the evening just to relax and energize themselves.

✓ That's why most people love walking, and most people like to walk in the evening just to relax and energize themselves.

'Most of the people' can be shortened to 'most people'. Use 'love' (plural) to agree with plural subject; original had 'loves' (singular). Keep verb consistent: 'love' or 'like'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid unnecessary articles with 'most'.

× If I have a chance to go for a long walk, I will definitely would like to go besides the river or uh near the mountains as both are my favorite places to visit uh.

✓ If I had a chance to go for a long walk, I would definitely like to go beside the river or near the mountains, as both are my favorite places to visit.

The conditional is mixed: use second conditional for an unlikely or hypothetical situation. Change 'If I have' to 'If I had' and 'will definitely would like' to 'would definitely like'. 'Besides the river' should be 'beside the river'. Suggestion: Use consistent conditional forms: If + past, would + base verb.

× But uh, near the mountains, UH will be more refreshing and energetic as it provides a very good uh scenery also.

✓ But near the mountains would be more refreshing and energizing, as it also provides very good scenery.

Don't use 'UH' as a subject. Use 'would be' to match conditional. 'Energetic' describes people; use 'energizing' to describe the place. 'A very good scenery' is incorrect; 'scenery' is uncountable so omit 'a'. Suggestion: Choose adjectives appropriately (energizing vs energetic) and treat 'scenery' as uncountable.

× Uh, recently I, uh, I had a walk near the sea because I lived beside the sea so oftenly in the morning, I walk there.

✓ Recently I took a walk near the sea because I live beside the sea, so I often walk there in the morning.

Mix of tenses: 'recently' + 'had a walk' is acceptable but 'took a walk' is more natural. If the student still lives by the sea, use present 'I live' and 'I often walk there'. 'Oftenly' is incorrect; use 'often'. Place 'in the morning' after the verb phrase. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with current facts (present for current residence), use 'often' not 'oftenly'.

× It really energizes and refreshes me, and it also provides me an opportunity to socialize with the people.

✓ It really energizes and refreshes me, and it also gives me an opportunity to socialize with people.

Use 'gives me an opportunity' rather than 'provides me an opportunity' for natural phrasing (both possible). Omit 'the' before 'people' unless referring to a specific group. 'Provides me an opportunity' is grammatical but less natural. Suggestion: Use 'people' without 'the' for general groups and prefer natural verb-object collocations like 'gives me an opportunity'.