走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence about current habits, then add a brief past detail. Use linking words and correct verb forms to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot. When I was a child I used to walk about 45 minutes to school, and I continued walking a lot when I went to college, so walking has become a regular part of my life.

建议: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Give one or two specific details (when, who, where) and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I often went outside because I loved walking. I usually walked with my friends in the evenings and mornings, which helped me stay fit and enjoy time with them.

建议: Organize the answer: state the main reason then support with two clear points. Use accurate collocations (e.g., 'peace of mind', 'stress relief') and tidy grammar.

示例: People like to walk in parks because it offers peace of mind and stress relief. Furthermore, walking in parks is good exercise and the fresh air and scenery make the experience enjoyable.

建议: Be concise and fluent: give a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add 2 specific supporting details (travel time, activities). Remove filler words and correct verb forms.

示例: I would like to hike near Champa Devi, which is close to Kathmandu. The hike takes about two to three hours to reach the summit and one to two hours to return, and I could relax and enjoy the views with my friends.

建议: Answer directly and clearly: name the place, give specific details (distance/time, who you went with, what you saw). Avoid hesitation and correct awkward comparisons.

示例: Recently I went for a walk at Woodkill, which is about 20 minutes from my house. My father walks there every evening and I joined him; the area is very scenic and peaceful, similar to parts of Kathmandu.

× When I was a child my school was far away from my home and I have to walk almost 45 minutes to go to school and after schooling also I went to when I went to college there also I have to walk plenty.

✓ When I was a child my school was far from my home and I had to walk almost 45 minutes to get to school; after school, when I went to college, I also had to walk a lot.

Mixed and incorrect tense usage: the sentence begins in past time ('When I was a child') so verbs describing habitual past actions should be in past tense ('had to', 'went'). Also 'far away from my home' is wordy; 'far from my home' is natural. 'To go to school' -> 'to get to school' or 'to school'. 'After schooling also I went to when I went to college there also I have to walk plenty' is ungrammatical and uses present tense 'have to' incorrectly. Suggest rewriting with consistent past tense and clearer phrasing.

× Yes, I often go outside as I really love walking as walking makes me fit and there were a lot of my friends who love walking and I love walking with them.

✓ Yes, I often went outside because I really loved walking; walking made me fit, and many of my friends loved walking too, so I enjoyed walking with them.

The context is past (question asked about childhood), so present tense verbs ('go', 'love', 'makes') are inconsistent. Use past tense 'went', 'loved', 'made'. 'There were a lot of my friends who love walking' mixes past and present; change to 'many of my friends loved walking'. Also replace redundant 'as' and improve cohesion with conjunctions.

× We also go for evening and morning walk with them and yeah, I love spending time with them.

✓ We also went for evening and morning walks with them, and I loved spending time with them.

Again, the question refers to past habits, so use past tense 'went' and 'loved'. 'Walk' should be plural 'walks' when referring to repeated occasions. Replace casual 'yeah' with formal wording or omit.

× I think this date is a very hectic schedule and whenever we go for a walking it feels really relief, like Peace of Mind.

✓ I think these days we have very hectic schedules, and whenever we go for a walk it feels really relieving, like peace of mind.

'This date' is incorrect; use 'these days' for current time. 'A very hectic schedule' should be plural 'very hectic schedules' to match general statement. 'Go for a walking' is wrong; use 'go for a walk'. 'Feels really relief' is incorrect—'relief' is a noun; use adjective/gerund 'really relieving' or 'gives real relief'. Capitalization: 'Peace of Mind' should be lowercase 'peace of mind'.

× I find really peace whenever I walk and it also kept me fit.

✓ I find real peace whenever I walk, and it also keeps me fit.

Tense inconsistency: 'find' (present) with 'kept' (past). If speaking about a general truth/habit now, use present tense for both: 'find' and 'keeps'. 'Find really peace' is awkward; use 'find real peace'. If referring to past, change both to past ('found' and 'kept').

× That's why I really love walking and a lot of people walk for their physical fitness basically.

✓ That's why I really love walking, and many people walk for their physical fitness.

'A lot of people' is acceptable but 'many people' is more formal. 'For their physical fitness basically' is redundant; remove 'basically' or place it appropriately. Simplify word order for clarity.

× So I really want to go to hiking near Champa Devi.

✓ So I would really like to go hiking near Champa Devi.

'Go to hiking' is incorrect collocation. Use 'go hiking' or 'go on a hike'. Also 'I really want' is acceptable but 'I would really like' is more natural when speaking about a hypothetical desire in response to 'if you had the chance'.

× It's really near Kathmandu.

✓ It's really near Kathmandu.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct. (No change needed.)

× It's umm, it takes all it, I think it's take two to three hours to go to reach there.

✓ It takes about two to three hours to get there.

Original is wordy and ungrammatical: 'it takes all it' and 'it's take' are incorrect. Use concise phrasing 'it takes about two to three hours to get there.' 'Go to reach there' is redundant; 'get there' is natural.

× And uh, and again, takes one to two hours to come back.

✓ And it takes one to two hours to come back.

Missing subject 'it' before 'takes'. Remove filler words 'uh' and duplicated 'and'. Maintain parallel structure with previous sentence.

× And there I can enjoy with my friend.

✓ And I can enjoy myself with my friend there.

'Enjoy with my friend' is awkward; 'enjoy myself with my friend' or 'enjoy time with my friend' is better. Place 'there' appropriately. Also article 'my friend' is fine if referring to one friend; if plural, use 'friends'.

× I have my relaxation time.

✓ I can have my relaxation time.

In context of hypothetical 'if I had the chance', use conditional or modal: 'I would have' or 'I could have' rather than simple present 'I have'. Suggest 'I could relax' or 'I would have time to relax.'

× I would definitely be stress free.

✓ I would definitely be stress-free.

'Stress free' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before or after 'be'. Use 'stress-free' and consider 'stress-free' with a hyphen. Also 'be' + adjective is fine with conditional 'would'.

× So recently I went to walk, uh, near, umm, what's called, that's called Woodkill.

✓ Recently I went for a walk near a place called Woodkill.

'Went to walk' is awkward; use 'went for a walk'. Remove fillers and repeated phrases 'what's called, that's called'. Use article 'a place called Woodkill' for clarity. 'Recently' fits present perfect sometimes ('I have recently been'), but past simple 'I went' is acceptable with 'recently'.

× It's near to my house.

✓ It's near my house.

Use 'near' without 'to' in this context. 'Near to' is nonstandard in many varieties of English.

× And my dad every day he went there for evening walk.

✓ My dad went there every day for an evening walk.

Word order and tense: remove redundant subject 'he' after 'my dad'. Place 'every day' before verb or after; 'every day he went there' is acceptable but more natural: 'My dad went there every day for an evening walk.' If referring to habitual past, past simple 'went' is correct. For present habitual, use 'goes'.

× And I have also recently been there.

✓ I have also been there recently.

Word order: 'recently' usually goes at the end of the present perfect sentence. 'Have also recently been there' is understandable but less natural. Both forms are acceptable; rearrange for natural flow.

× It's a very nice, uh, scenic place as Kathmandu.

✓ It's a very nice, scenic place like Kathmandu.

'Place as Kathmandu' is incorrect. Use 'like Kathmandu' to indicate similarity. Remove filler 'uh'. Alternatively, if meaning it is as scenic as Kathmandu, say 'It's a very nice, scenic place, similar to Kathmandu.'