走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use simple linking words to contrast (e.g. "but"), correct verb forms and countable expressions ("much time" → "much time" or "a lot of time").

示例: I walk when I have time, especially for short journeys. But if I'm in a hurry or the destination is far, I usually take public transport.

建议: Answer directly and give one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and correct collocations ("kindergarten finished at 3:00 PM", "have a lot of time", "take me to the park").

示例: Yes, I often did. Kindergarten finished at 3:00 PM, so I had a lot of free time and my grandpa usually took me to the park to play.

建议: Make one clear point and support it with specific reasons. Use correct nouns and articles ("fresh air", "green plants") and complete sentences. Avoid filler phrases like "I guess the main".

示例: I think people like walking in parks because of the fresh air and greenery, which help them relax. In addition, parks are quiet and safe places for exercise.

建议: Use a clear conditional sentence and correct word order. Give one or two specific details about the park and the benefit. Avoid repetition and choose natural phrases ("recharge after a busy day").

示例: If I had the chance, I would walk in a large city park with a lake and many trees. A long walk there would help me relax and recharge after a busy day.

建议: Use correct past tense for recent activities and provide a complete, fluent description. Avoid hesitations and repetitions; name the river clearly and give a specific sensory detail (e.g. "I can hear the water").

示例: Lately I went for a walk along a river near my home, which is called Zhujiang, the main river in Guangzhou. Walking there I could hear the water and see people exercising.

× It depends on it depends.

✓ It depends.

Redundant repetition; only one instance is needed. Use a single present tense phrase 'It depends' to answer the question concisely.

× If I have time, I will choose to walk the walk to the destination on foot.

✓ If I have time, I will choose to walk to the destination on foot.

Remove the repeated noun 'the walk' which is unnecessary and incorrect here. The conditional 'If I have time' correctly sets a future choice 'I will choose to walk'. Keep the infinitive 'to walk' followed by the prepositional phrase 'to the destination on foot'.

× I will choose go to the destination on foot.

✓ I will choose to go to the destination on foot.

After 'choose' when expressing an action, use the infinitive form 'to go'. The original omitted 'to', which is ungrammatical. Use 'to go' to form a correct verb complement.

× But if I don't have many time and so.

✓ But if I don't have much time, I won't.

Use 'much time' (uncountable) rather than 'many time' (incorrect plural). Also complete the sentence to contrast with the previous idea; add a negative clause like 'I won't' or 'I won't walk' to make it grammatical and clear.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The question already uses past tense 'Did', so use the base form 'go'. The phrase 'for a walk' is the idiomatic collocation rather than 'to have a walk'. Change 'have a walk' to 'for a walk'.

× Yes, absolutely because the kindergartens just as after at 3:00 PM, so I have many time to work outside and my grandpa will bring me to the park for work.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because kindergarten finished at 3:00 PM, so I had plenty of time to play outside and my grandpa would take me to the park.

Match past time reference: use past tense 'finished' and 'had' for past habits. 'Kindergartens' should be singular 'kindergarten' and 'after at' is incorrect. Use 'finished at 3:00 PM'. 'Many time' is incorrect; use 'plenty of time'. 'Work outside' is wrong for a child's activity; use 'play outside'. Use 'would take me' or 'took me' to indicate habitual past action.

× I think the main I guess the main reason is that there are fresh air in the park and many green planets.

✓ I think the main reason is that there is fresh air in the park and many green plants.

Use a single phrase 'the main reason'. 'There are' should match the noun: 'fresh air' is uncountable, so use 'there is fresh air'. 'Planets' is a wrong word; use 'plants'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word choice.

× Many green plants and people can.

✓ There are many green plants, and people can relax there.

The original fragment is incomplete and unclear. Provide a complete clause: state the existence of plants and explain what people can do (e.g., relax). This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× I want to go to the large City Park we where where have the large lake and green green trees.

✓ I want to go to the large city park where there is a large lake and many green trees.

Remove repeated words and fix word order: 'city park' is not a proper noun here, so use lowercase 'city park' unless it's the name. Use 'where there is' to introduce existence. Use 'many green trees' for natural plural. Eliminate duplications.

× I think it can help me recharge myself under a busy day bef after a busy day.

✓ I think it can help me recharge after a busy day.

'Recharge' does not require 'myself' in this context; it's natural to say 'recharge' or 'recharge myself' but shorter 'recharge' is preferred. 'Under a busy day' is wrong prepositional choice; use 'after a busy day'. Remove duplicated 'bef' and 'after'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

Use present perfect 'have gone' to refer to recent experiences 'lately'. The original used simple past 'did you go', which is acceptable but 'lately' commonly pairs with present perfect.

× Lately I go for walk along the along a river near my home, uh which called which is called Zhu Zhu Jiang is umm main river in Guangzhou and along with the river I can hear.

✓ Lately I have been walking along a river near my home, which is called Zhujiang. It is the main river in Guangzhou, and walking along it I can hear birds and see many people.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been walking' for recent habitual actions. Fix articles: 'a river' not 'the along a river'. Use correct relative clause 'which is called Zhujiang'. Remove filler 'umm' and complete the final clause to explain what you hear; the original sentence was incomplete. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural word order.