走路— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Do you walk a lot?
考生
Yes, I usually walk a lot because I don't have any car or bike like transportation things so I usually walk around around the city.
考官
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
考生
Yes, I was usually go outside because at that time we don't have any, uh, improvements smartphone. So we, I just go out and play with my friends.
考官
Why do people like to walk in parks?
考生
In my opinion, I think uh it is good at health and can get some relaxed feel because just in home I think it is not good for health.
考官
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
考生
I want to go London and I want to I really, really like to walk near the river. So in London Times River on your side, I want to walk along the river.
考官
Where did you go for a walk lately?
考生
Uh, just in my university because my university is, is big, so I can see the lake in our university and, umm, good architecture.
评估
总分
Part 1
Do you walk a lot?
分数: 60.0建议: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 반복이 있으며 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다. 첫째, 간결한 주제문을 말하고 중복된 표현(예: "walk around around")을 제거하세요. 둘째, "transportation things" 대신 "means of transport"나 "a car or a bike"같이 정확한 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 이유를 뒷받침하는 구체적인 세부사항(예: 거리, 목적)을 한두 문장으로 덧붙이되 전체 답변은 최대 5문장으로 유지하세요.
示例: Yes, I walk a lot because I don't own a car or a bike. As a result, I often walk around the city to run errands and commute to university, which helps me stay active.
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
分数: 55.0建议: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다("I was usually go" 등). 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하고 불필요한 말더듬("uh")을 줄이세요. 또한 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 어떤 활동을 했는지, 친구들과 어디서 놀았는지). 문장은 2~3문장으로 간결하게 구성하세요.
示例: Yes, I often played outside as a child because smartphones and gaming devices were less common then. I used to play football and ride bicycles with my friends in the neighborhood park.
Why do people like to walk in parks?
分数: 58.0建议: 의견 제시는 되었지만 표현이 어색하고 문법적 정확성이 떨어집니다("good at health", "get some relaxed feel"). 이유를 두세 가지로 구체적으로 제시하고 연결어(for example, because, so 등)를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요. 단어 선택을 더 자연스럽게 바꾸고 문장 수를 제한하세요.
示例: I think people enjoy walking in parks because it benefits their health and reduces stress. For example, fresh air and green surroundings make it easier to relax compared with staying at home.
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
分数: 50.0建议: 표현이 반복되고 장소 이름을 잘못 말하고 있어 혼란스럽습니다("Times River on your side"). 목적어와 전치사를 정확히 사용하고, 이유와 자세한 묘사를 한 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 예: 'walk along the Thames'처럼 정확한 지명 사용과 한두 가지 이유(경치, 분위기)를 포함하세요.
示例: I'd love to visit London and take a long walk along the River Thames because the riverside paths and historic architecture would be very pleasant to explore.
Where did you go for a walk lately?
分数: 65.0建议: 답변은 비교적 명확하지만 말을 더 자연스럽게 정리할 필요가 있습니다. 주제문을 간단히 말한 뒤 구체적인 세부사항(예: 걷는 경로, 느낀 점)을 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 중복과 말더듬을 줄이고 연결어(so, because)를 정확히 사용하세요.
示例: Recently I walked around my university campus. It is quite large, so I often stroll by the lake and admire the interesting architecture, which helps me relax between classes.
语法
× Yes, I usually walk a lot because I don't have any car or bike like transportation things so I usually walk around around the city.
✓ Yes, I usually walk a lot because I don't have a car or a bike for transportation, so I usually walk around the city.
문장에서 'any car or bike like transportation things'은 부적절한 전치사 및 어순 사용으로 의미가 모호합니다. 'a car or a bike for transportation'처럼 전치사 for를 사용해 목적을 명확히 하고 관사(a)를 추가해야 자연스럽습니다. 중복된 'around'도 제거하세요. Suggestion: Use 'for transportation' to express purpose and include articles with singular countable nouns.
× Yes, I was usually go outside because at that time we don't have any, uh, improvements smartphone. So we, I just go out and play with my friends.
✓ Yes, I usually went outside because at that time we didn’t have improved smartphones. So I just went out and played with my friends.
과거 상황을 설명하므로 과거 시제를 사용해야 합니다. 'was usually go'는 틀린 조합이고 현재형 'don't have'도 과거에 맞지 않습니다. 또한 'improvements smartphone'은 어색하므로 'improved smartphones'로 수정합니다. Suggestion: Use past simple for habitual past actions ('went', 'didn't have', 'played').
× In my opinion, I think uh it is good at health and can get some relaxed feel because just in home I think it is not good for health.
✓ In my opinion, I think it is good for health and helps you feel relaxed because just staying at home, I think, is not good for health.
'good at health'는 잘못된 전치사 사용입니다. 건강에 좋다는 표현은 'good for health'를 씁니다. 'get some relaxed feel'은 어색하므로 'helps you feel relaxed'로 바꾸고 'just in home'은 'just staying at home' 또는 'being at home'으로 해야 자연스럽습니다. Suggestion: Use 'good for' for benefits and use verbs like 'helps you feel relaxed' to describe effects.
× I want to go London and I want to I really, really like to walk near the river. So in London Times River on your side, I want to walk along the river.
✓ I want to go to London and I really, really like walking near the river. In London, along the Thames, I would like to walk by the river.
목적지 표현에는 전치사 'to'가 필요합니다 ('go to London'). 'Times River'는 잘못된 고유명사로 'Thames'가 맞습니다. 'on your side'는 의미가 불분명하므로 제거하고 'along' 또는 'by the river' 같은 전치사를 사용해 걷는 위치를 표현합니다. Suggestion: Use 'go to' for destinations and 'along/by the river' for walking next to a river.
× Uh, just in my university because my university is, is big, so I can see the lake in our university and, umm, good architecture.
✓ Uh, just at my university because my university is big, so I can see the lake on campus and the good architecture.
장소를 말할 때 'in my university'보다는 'at my university'나 'on campus'가 더 자연스럽습니다. 'see the lake in our university'도 'see the lake on campus'로 수정하고 'good architecture' 앞에 연결사 'and'로 연결했습니다. Suggestion: Use 'at my university' or 'on campus' for location and remove repeated words.
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