走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: แก้แกรมมาร์และความชัดเจน: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ตรงประเด็นและเป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น ใช้ tense ที่ถูกต้อง ปรับคำพูดที่คลุมเครือ และลดคำฟุ่มเฟือย ตัวอย่างจุดที่ต้องปรับ: 'my child have' → 'my child has', ลบวลีที่ไม่ชัดเจน ('well wish a each department S'), และบอกเหตุผลสั้น ๆ ว่าเดินเพื่อออกกำลังกายหรือไปส่งลูก

示例: Yes, I walk regularly. I usually take a short walk every weekday to accompany my child to school and to get some exercise.

建议: ปรับคำศัพท์และความหมาย: แก้คำที่พูดผิด ('kiss' → 'kid') และปรับโครงสร้างให้กระชับ ใช้ linking word เล็กน้อยเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น 'because' และหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำซ้อน ('a short walking or a choose a walk')

示例: Yes, I did when I was a kid. I walked to school every weekday, so now I prefer short walks rather than other ways of traveling.

建议: ปรับไวยากรณ์และให้รายละเอียดชัดเจน: แก้ subject-verb agreement ('surrounding make' → 'surroundings make'), ใช้คำที่เหมาะสมกว่า ('relaxed' แทน 'a release') และยกตัวอย่างที่ชัดเจนและสั้น ๆ ใช้ linking word เช่น 'for example' อย่างถูกต้อง

示例: I think parks offer fresh air and green surroundings, which help people feel relaxed when they are stressed. For example, visiting a public park usually makes me feel more energetic and calm.

建议: ทำให้คำตอบเป็นไปได้จริงและชัดเจน: แก้ข้อผิดพลาดหลายจุด (เช่น 'If it had a shell' unclear, 'Arabic near Bangkok' unclear) ควรระบุสถานที่จริงและสาเหตุอย่างตรงไปตรงมา ใช้ tense ถูกต้องและลดการย้ำคำ

示例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the riverside near Bangkok because the beautiful views and gentle sounds of the water help me relax after work.

建议: ปรับความลื่นไหลและความถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์: ใช้รูป tense ที่เหมาะสม ('I was walking' → 'I walked' หรือ 'I have been walking'), ลบบทเว้นวรรคเสียง (uh) และให้รายละเอียดเพิ่มขึ้น เช่น กิจกรรมที่ทำในสวน ใช้ linking word เช่น 'because' และ 'so'

示例: Recently I walked in the public park near my house because it is convenient for my family and me to exercise there. We often go together and have a short chat while walking.

× Absolutely, I'm walking a lot because my child have to well wish a each department S so I have a short walk every weekday.

✓ Absolutely, I'm walking a lot because my child has to visit each department, so I take a short walk every weekday.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'my child' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. 'Well wish a each department S' is unclear; likely 'visit each department' or 'go to each department'. Use 'take a short walk' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with singular/plural subjects and choose clear verbs for actions.

× Yes I did when I was a kiss.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a kid.

Wrong word choice: 'kiss' is incorrect; the intended word is 'kid'. Maintain past tense 'did' and use correct noun. Suggestion: use appropriate vocabulary for age references.

× I had to walk uh, to school every weekday.

✓ I had to walk to school every weekday.

Unnecessary filler 'uh' removed for clarity. Past tense 'had to' is correct for habitual past obligation. Suggestion: omit fillers in written answers and keep consistent past tense.

× That's why I love a short walking or a choose a walk more than a other way.

✓ That's why I prefer a short walk to other ways of traveling.

Incorrect word forms and articles: 'short walking' should be 'short walk' (noun), 'a choose a walk' is ungrammatical; use 'prefer' + noun. 'a other way' should be 'other ways' or 'another way'. Suggestion: use 'prefer' for comparisons and ensure correct noun forms and articles.

× I think it's because the fresh air green surrounding make them feel a release.

✓ I think it's because the fresh air and green surroundings make them feel relaxed.

Prepositions and noun forms: 'fresh air green surrounding' needs conjunction 'and' and plural 'surroundings'. Verb agreement: 'surroundings' (plural) takes 'make'. 'Feel a release' is unnatural; use 'feel relaxed' or 'feel a sense of release'. Suggestion: join adjectives/nouns correctly and choose natural collocations.

× They're under pressure.

✓ They feel under pressure.

Verb choice: 'They're under pressure' is acceptable but 'They feel under pressure' more clearly expresses experience. Keep present tense generalization. Suggestion: use 'feel' to describe emotional states.

× For example, when I go to a public park a a lot is is called.

✓ For example, when I go to a public park, I feel refreshed.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and repetitive ('a a lot is is called'). Replace with clear idea: visiting park makes one refreshed. Suggestion: express cause-effect clearly and avoid repetition.

× It's make me more energetic.

✓ It makes me more energetic.

Subject-verb agreement: use 'makes' with singular subject 'it'. 'It's' (it is) + 'make' is incorrect. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and use contraction correctly.

× If it had a shell, I was sure walking uh, Arabic near Bangkok because the beautiful views uh, made me feel calm and uh, the sound is made me, made me feel a littleish under pressure, uh, after work.

✓ If I had the chance, I would go walking along the river near Bangkok because the beautiful views make me feel calm and the sounds help me relieve a little pressure after work.

Mixed conditional and tense errors: 'If it had a shell' is unclear; likely 'if I had the chance'. Use conditional 'I would go' for hypothetical. Maintain present tense 'make' for general effects. Remove fillers and correct word choice ('Arabic' incorrect; maybe 'riverside' or 'area near Bangkok'). 'Made me feel a littleish under pressure' is wrong; use 'relieve a little pressure'. Suggestion: use correct conditional structure 'If I had..., I would...' and choose precise nouns.

× Recently I was walking at the public park near my house because it's really convenient for my family and I to exercise there.

✓ Recently I walked in the public park near my house because it's really convenient for my family and me to exercise there.

Tense and pronoun case: 'Recently I was walking' can be simplified to simple past 'I walked' or present perfect 'I have been walking'. 'for my family and I' should be 'for my family and me' because it's the object of the preposition 'for'. Suggestion: use correct object pronouns and choose the most appropriate past tense.

× And, uh, we, we often go there and just, uh, have a small talk which, uh, nearby.

✓ We often go there and have a short chat with neighbors nearby.

Unnecessary fillers and awkward phrasing: 'have a small talk which nearby' is incorrect. Use 'have a short chat with people nearby' or 'with neighbors'. Suggestion: remove fillers, use natural collocations like 'have a chat' and indicate who you talk with using 'with'.