走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, use correct tense and prepositions, and limit to 2–4 short sentences. Add one specific detail (how often, when, or purpose) using a linking word.

示例: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I usually walk for about an hour every morning because it helps my physical health and clears my mind before work.

建议: Use past simple consistently and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details (who you went with, what you did). Use linking words like 'and' or 'sometimes' correctly.

示例: Yes, I did. Every afternoon I walked outside with my friends, and we often ran and played games together.

建议: State the main reason first, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'. Use correct nouns and verbs (park, walk, relax).

示例: People like walking in parks because the environment is peaceful and the air is fresh. For example, in the morning and afternoon people walk to relax, exercise, or meet friends.

建议: Answer conditionals clearly: use 'I would' for hypothetical situations. Give one specific place and a reason why, using a linking word like 'because' or 'so'. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

示例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the Shirma River bank because it is very long and peaceful, especially on weekend mornings.

建议: Use past simple to describe a recent action and be specific about place and distance. Make one clear sentence answering the question, then add one short detail (how far or why). Avoid filler words and repetition.

示例: Recently I went to my sister's house for a walk. It is about one or two kilometers from my home, so I walked there to visit her and get some exercise.

× Yes, I work a lot, every door an hour or two hour walking so it's good for my physical health and when I have a convenient time.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot. I walk for an hour or two at a time, which is good for my physical health and I do it when I have free time.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' and mixed present simple with unclear phrases. Use present simple 'I walk' for habitual actions. Replace 'every door' and 'convenient time' with natural expressions 'for an hour or two' and 'free time'. Separate into clear sentences for readability.

× Yes, when I were a child, I got outside for walking, uh, every afternoon.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I went outside to walk every afternoon.

The incorrect verb form 'were' should be 'was' for singular first/third person in past. 'Got outside for walking' is unnatural; use 'went outside to walk'. Maintain past tense for habitual past actions.

× Uh, uh, when I was a child, every afternoon I went to outside and I working with my friends partner and sometimes they play running so and most of the time.

✓ When I was a child, every afternoon I went outside and played with my friends. Sometimes we ran, and we did that most of the time.

The original sentence has mixed tenses and incorrect word order. 'Went to outside' is wrong order; use 'went outside'. 'I working' should be past 'I played'. Simplify and keep past tense consistent. Break into shorter clauses for clarity.

× People like to working in parks because park environment is so cozy and fresh air.

✓ People like working in parks because the park environment is cozy and the air is fresh.

Use the gerund 'working' correctly as 'like working' is acceptable, but 'to working' is incorrect; use 'like working' or 'like to work'. Add articles: 'the park environment' and 'the air is fresh' for grammatical completeness.

× So when any afternoon time and morning time people like to work in park and park at when and people walking park the refresh.

✓ So in the afternoons and mornings, people like to walk in the park because it is refreshing.

Use correct prepositions and time expressions: 'in the afternoons' and 'in the mornings'. Use 'walk in the park' instead of 'work in park'. Simplify to a clear cause: 'because it is refreshing'.

× MMM when I if I had a chance, I take a long walk, uh, in our cities Bank of Shirma River Shirma River bank is so long and everyday morning when I have a convenient time weekends morning I.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the Shirma River bank. It is very long, and I go there on weekend mornings when I have free time.

The question is about a hypothetical situation, so use conditional 'If I had the chance, I would take'. Original mixed tenses and missing articles: use 'the Shirma River bank' and 'on weekend mornings'. Use present habitual 'I go there' for routines.

× Recently I work my I want my sister house by working in my sister house for a long, uh, far with from my house almost to or two kilometer.

✓ Recently I went to my sister's house. It is far from my house, almost one or two kilometers away.

The student mixed present and past. Use past simple 'I went' for a recent completed action. Use possessive 'my sister's house' and correct distance expression 'one or two kilometers away'.

× And I, I work, uh, I, I, I went to working.

✓ And I went for a walk there.

The phrase 'I went to working' is ungrammatical. Use past simple 'I went' and a proper verb phrase 'for a walk' to describe the action. Remove redundant filler words.