走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 注意语法和词序，使用更自然的表达，并保持句子简洁。比如将“extremely likes go hiking”改为“I really enjoy hiking”或“My mother loves hiking”并将时态和主谓一致处理。可使用一到两句补充原因或频率以丰富内容。

示例: Yes. My mother loves hiking, so she motivates me to walk every day. I usually walk for about 30 minutes in the evening to relax after work.

建议: 注意时态一致和名词复数形式，避免直译。应把过去习惯用“used to”后接动词原形；细节应更具体，例如描述一次记忆而不是笼统列举。

示例: Absolutely. My parents used to take me to the children's park or nearby mountains. I especially remember catching fish once with my father and flying kites with my brother — those trips were relaxing and fun.

建议: 避免重复与冗余，使用连贯连接词并提供具体细节支持观点。修正语法错误（例如“they can see the gorgeous sky”主语不明确），避免重复词“enjoying enjoying”。

示例: People walk in parks for several reasons, but I think the main one is the fresh air. Parks have many trees and open space, so you can breathe easily and enjoy the clear sky, which helps you relax after a busy day.

建议: 注意用词自然与句子逻辑，例如“during my work”不明确。可以说明具体时间或原因，句子保持简洁并用合适的连接词。

示例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the coast. Walking by the sea at sunset is very relaxing, and I enjoy the fresh air and the changing colors of the sky.

建议: 提高语法准确性和连贯性，使用正确时态和代词（e.g. “I went to a snack street near my school with my friends”）。表达情感时更具体，说明发生了什么和朋友如何安慰你。

示例: I recently walked down a snack street near my school with a friend. I was feeling stressed about my studies, so we talked for a long time — she listened to me and cheered me up, which made me feel much better.

× Yes, my mom extremely likes go hiking so she definitely motivate me to take a walk every day.

✓ Yes, my mom extremely likes going hiking, so she definitely motivates me to take a walk every day.

原句中“extremely likes go hiking”中“likes”后应接动名词“going”，而非动词原形“go”。此外，“extremely”用于修饰动词“likes”虽可接受，但更自然的结构是将动词与动名词连用。句中“motivate”需与第三人称单数主语“she”一致，改为“motivates”。建议：动词like后接动名词（like doing），注意主谓一致（第三人称单数动词加-s）。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

这个句子语法上可以接受，但更地道的表达是使用过去时态的频率副词放在助动词后："Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?" 原句没有严重时态错误，仅建议把短语调整为更自然的"for a walk"。

× Absolutely, my parents used to take me to the children park or the mountains to let me take a walk.

✓ Absolutely, my parents used to take me to the children's park or the mountains to let me have a walk.

原句中“children park”应为所有格形式“children's park”。另外“let me take a walk”虽然可理解，但更自然的是“let me have a walk”或直接“take me for a walk”。建议：复合名词“children's park”使用所有格，选择更地道的搭配。

× What I really enjoy was catch the fish or fly the kites, especially when I get a souvenir there.

✓ What I really enjoyed was catching fish or flying kites, especially when I got a souvenir there.

句子时态不一致且动词形式错误。句首用过去时“was”，后面的动作应使用动名词形式“catching, flying”而非不定式。同时时间状语也应改为过去时“got”。建议：在表示一般喜欢的动作或跟过去时态搭配时使用动名词。

× There are several reasons for people to take a walk in parks.

✓ There are several reasons for people to take walks in parks.

“to take a walk”在泛指时可改为复数或不定式都可，但与“several reasons”搭配更自然的是复数名词“to take walks”或使用动名词“for people taking walks in parks”。建议：注意名词单复数与语境一致，使表达更自然。

× However, when it comes to choosing one to talk about, I believe that it is the fresh air in parks.

✓ However, when it comes to choosing one to talk about, I believe it is the fresh air in the parks.

此句可接受，但更自然的是在“parks”前加定冠词“the”，表示特指在公园里的空气。建议：根据语境使用定冠词。

× There are numerous trees in the parks and they can see the gorgeous sky and it is enjoying enjoying.

✓ There are numerous trees in the parks, and you can see the gorgeous sky — it is very enjoyable.

原句中“they can see”中代词指代不清，应使用一般人称“you”或“people”。重复“enjoying enjoying”是错误，应使用形容词结构“it is very enjoyable”或副词“very”。建议：避免重复，注意代词指代的一致性及形容词/副词的正确形式。

× From my perspective, the coastal cities are extremely romantic, so I prefer to take a long walk nearby the sea so that I can enjoy the sunset and the beautiful sceneries during my work.

✓ From my perspective, coastal cities are extremely romantic, so I prefer to take a long walk by the sea so that I can enjoy the sunset and the beautiful scenery during my time off work.

原句中“nearby the sea”用法不当，应改为“by the sea”或“near the sea”。“sceneries”通常不可数，改为“scenery”。“during my work”不自然，意为工作时看日落应改为“during my time off work”或“when I'm not working”。建议：注意介词搭配（by/near the sea）、不可数名词用法以及时间短语的自然表达。

× It's a snack street where is nearby my school.

✓ It's a snack street that is near my school.

原句“where is nearby my school”结构不正确。应使用关系从句“that is near my school”或“which is near my school”。此外，“nearby”多用作副词或形容词独立使用，放在“is”后不自然，常用“near”。建议：使用正确的关系从句结构和介词/副词搭配。

× I went for work with my friends.

✓ I went there with my friends.

“went for work”在此语境不合适，表示“去工作”而非“去那里散步/逛街”。根据上下文，应为“went there”。建议：根据语境选择合适的动词短语。

× Actually I am a bit of sad at that moment because of the heavy stress of studies and we chatted a lot and she comfort me and cheer me up.

✓ Actually I was a bit sad at that moment because of the heavy stress of my studies, and we chatted a lot; she comforted me and cheered me up.

句中时态不一致，应全部使用过去时“was”。“a bit of sad”错误，正确为“a bit sad”。“stress of studies”应为“stress of my studies”。动词“comfort”与“cheer”在过去时需加-ed，且“cheer up”在过去为“cheered me up”。建议：保持时态一致，使用正确的形容词结构和名词所有格，动词过去式要正确变化。