走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答需要更直接和条理清晰。先用一句主题句直接回答（Yes/No），然后用一到两句解释原因，注意语法和时态，避免重复词和口头填充词（um, uh）。可使用连词（because, so）串联句子。

示例: Not really. I don’t walk very often because I’m usually busy with work and studying. However, I sometimes walk when I feel stressed because exercise helps me relax and improves my mood.

建议: 回答要用过去时并直接回应问题，给出具体习惯或频率，并用具体细节支持（what, when, with whom）。减少口头语，改用清晰词汇描述活动。

示例: No, I didn’t. When I was a child I preferred staying at home and using my phone to watch videos on apps like TikTok and Bilibili, so I rarely went for walks outside.

建议: 观点明确，但需用词准确并补充具体细节或例子。注意用词（working→walking），简练表达原因并用连接词（for example, because）加强逻辑。避免模糊或夸张的短语。

示例: People like walking in parks mainly because it helps relieve stress. Walking outdoors exposes them to fresh air and greenery, which boosts mood by releasing endorphins. For example, after a busy week I often walk in a park to feel calmer and more focused.

建议: 回答应更简洁并避免重复之前的表达。先直接给出地点，再说明具体原因和个人感受，使用连接词如 because or so 来组织句子。

示例: I would choose a large city park because it offers quiet trails and lots of trees. Walking there would help me relax and clear my mind, especially after a stressful period at work.

建议: 用过去时描述最近一次经历，注意句子结构（subject + verb）和词序，提供具体细节，如活动内容、同行者和感受，避免重复和无意义的口头填充。

示例: Last weekend I went to Jurong Park with my family. It’s close to my apartment, and we had a picnic by the lake and walked along the trails together, which was really relaxing.

× Oh, nearly not uh, or sometimes uh, why has why was stressful? I will choosing work and I think working can reduce some stressful and make me happy and relaxed.

✓ Oh, not really. Sometimes I feel stressed. I will choose to work because I think working can reduce stress and make me happy and relaxed.

句子结构混乱，含有口语填充词和不完整的从句。需要把多余的语气词去掉，按陈述句重组。建议：1) 用简洁的短句表达不同意思（否定、原因、结果）；2) 'will choosing' 是错误搭配，应改为 'will choose to' 或更自然的现在时 'I choose to work'；3) 'some stressful' 应改为不可数名词 'stress' 或 'some stress'。最终句子保持时态一致，逻辑清晰。

× Oh, absolutely not umm cause uh what I leisure time I more like a screw the phone and watching umm the media like TikTok and uh be Billy Billy.

✓ Oh, absolutely not. In my leisure time I prefer to scroll my phone and watch media like TikTok and Bilibili.

原句动词时态和词形混用，且词序错误。'I more like' 应为 'I prefer' 或 'I like ... more'；'a screw the phone' 为拼写和用法错误，应为 'scroll my phone'；'watching the media' 改为动词不定式或并列现在时 'scroll ... and watch ...'。建议使用现在时表达习惯性动作，并注意动词搭配和拼写。

× Umm, working in the park can make people unwind and release some feel good chemicals which is so vital for many people.

✓ Walking in the park can help people unwind and release some feel-good chemicals, which is very important for many people.

动名词与语义不匹配：用 'working in the park' 与上下文不符，应该是 'walking'。此外 'feel good chemicals' 需要连字符 'feel-good chemicals'，定语从句 'which is so vital' 中的先行词为复数 'chemicals'，谓语应改为复数 'are' 或重写为 'which is very important' 指整体效果。建议用合适的动名词并保持主谓数一致。

× For example, this is because we live in a dog eat dog world and over the past few years.

✓ For example, this is because we live in a dog-eat-dog world, especially in recent years.

句子不完整，末尾 'and over the past few years' 没有完成意思。需要把时间状语和原因连贯表达。建议合并为 'especially in recent years' 或补全后半句以表述变化。注意 'dog-eat-dog' 用连字符。

× Well, I will choose the park 'cause I think the park can make people unwind and release some feel good chemicals and makes me happy and to reduce my stress.

✓ Well, I would choose the park because I think the park can help me unwind, release feel-good chemicals, make me happy, and reduce my stress.

时态与情态错误：假设语气下更自然用 'would choose' 而非简单将来 'will choose'。结构上并列动词需保持一致，不能混用 'can help ... and makes'；应统一为不带 'to' 的动词原形或使用 'help me to unwind'。此外 'feel good' 需连字符。建议在假设句中使用 'would'，并并列使用一致的动词形式。

× Well, last weekend, uh, I with my family get to the Jurong Park. It's nearly my apartment, umm, my family together, uh, get it to take picnic and uh, walk or walk, scroll along.

✓ Well, last weekend I went to Jurong Park with my family. It's near my apartment. My family had a picnic together and we walked around and scrolled on our phones.

原句存在时态、词序和动词形式错误：'I with my family get to' 应为过去时 'I went to ... with my family'；'nearly my apartment' 应为 'near my apartment'；'get it to take picnic' 应为 'had a picnic'；最后的 'walk or walk, scroll along' 非常混乱，改为并列的过去时 'we walked around and scrolled on our phones'。建议使用简单过去时描述过去发生的事件，注意介词 'near' 和固定短语 'have/had a picnic'。