走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail about when and with whom you walk. Avoid repetition and filler words.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk in the mornings with my friend, and sometimes I go for a short walk with my father before breakfast.

建议: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and one or two specific details about frequency, duration, and feelings. Use correct past tense verbs and link ideas with simple conjunctions.

示例: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child. I used to walk with my friends every morning for about three or four hours, and I felt very happy because we played and talked together.

建议: Give a concise general reason followed by specific benefits. Avoid fillers and repetitive phrases; use linking words to connect reason and examples.

示例: People like walking in parks because it reduces stress and improves mood. For example, morning walks offer fresh air and the sight of other walkers can be motivating and make the experience more social.

建议: Answer directly with the place and one or two specific reasons why you would choose it. Use clear sentence structure and avoid repetition.

示例: I would like to take a long walk at Sukhna Lake with my friend because it has beautiful scenery and plenty of fresh morning air. Also, seeing many other walkers would make it enjoyable and motivating.

建议: Use a clear past-tense sentence saying when and where you walked, and give one specific detail about duration or how you felt. Keep it concise and avoid repeating phrases.

示例: Last week I went for a long walk with a friend in the morning. We walked for about three to four hours, which was fun and made me feel energetic afterwards.

× Yes, I walk a lot and when I have free time that time I walk with my friend and but sometime I'm in the morning time I do walk with my father.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot, and when I have free time I walk with my friend; sometimes in the morning I walk with my father.

The original sentence misuses auxiliary 'do' and has awkward repetition and word order. Use present simple 'walk' for habitual actions, remove unnecessary 'do', place time expressions ('sometimes', 'in the morning') in natural positions, and combine clauses with commas or conjunctions for clarity.

× Yes, I remember when I was a child, that time I go with my friend for walking in the morning time and that time I do walk almost three and four hours and that time I feel very good because that time take a lot of fun with my friends so that.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a child; at that time I used to go walking with my friends in the morning and I would walk for three to four hours. I felt very good because I had a lot of fun with my friends.

The context is past, so use past forms: 'used to go' or 'went' and 'walked' instead of present 'go' and 'do walk'. Replace 'take a lot of fun' with 'had a lot of fun'. Adjust time phrases and sentence structure for clarity.

× Because people think that when they do, uh, walk in park and that time they feel good and easily reduce the stress in their mind and that time they feel good.

✓ Because people think that when they walk in a park they feel good and easily reduce stress in their minds.

Use present simple 'walk' for general truths; remove unnecessary 'do'. Use article 'a park'. 'Reduce the stress in their mind' is unidiomatic; use 'reduce stress in their minds' or 'reduce stress'. Avoid repetition of 'feel good'.

× And when they do, uh, do walk in park in the morning time and that time they see lot of, uh, pupils, which can improve the and motivate for walking.

✓ And when they walk in the park in the morning, they see many other people, which can encourage and motivate them to walk.

Replace 'pupils' (students) with 'people' or 'other people' unless 'pupils' was intended; 'which can improve the and motivate for walking' is ungrammatical. Use 'encourage and motivate them to walk'. Include article 'the park' and use 'many' instead of 'lot of'.

× I think yes, when I give chance and that time do take a long walk with my friend in Sukhna Lake, because I think that in Sukhna Lake they feel good good.

✓ Yes, if I had the chance I would take a long walk with my friend at Sukhna Lake, because I think Sukhna Lake feels pleasant.

The question is conditional hypothetical, so use second conditional: 'if I had the chance, I would...'. Use preposition 'at Sukhna Lake'. Avoid repeating 'good' and say 'feels pleasant' or 'is pleasant'.

× And because in Socratic lot there a lot of people do walk in the morning time.

✓ And because in Sukhna there are a lot of people who walk in the morning.

Fix place name (assuming 'Socratic' was 'Sukhna' or 'Sukhna Lake'); correct word order 'there are a lot of people' and use relative clause 'who walk'. Use 'in the morning' instead of 'in the morning time'.

× And that time people feel good because they see lot of people in the morning time and that time they easily get a lot of air in morning time.

✓ People feel good because they see many people in the morning and breathe a lot of fresh air.

Replace 'get a lot of air' with 'breathe a lot of fresh air'. Use 'many' for countable 'people' and avoid repeating 'that time' and 'in morning time'.

× I remember last week ago with my friend for walking and that time I take lot of fun in because I do walking with my friend in morning time and that time I almost do walking three and four hours and so that I feel good and after and that time I do exercise in the morning time.

✓ I remember last week I went walking with my friend, and we had a lot of fun. We walked for about three to four hours in the morning, and I felt good. After that I exercised in the morning.

Use simple past 'went', 'had', 'walked', 'felt' for completed past actions. Remove unnecessary 'do' auxiliaries. Use 'about three to four hours' for duration and improve sentence segmentation for clarity.