走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Good direct answer and personal detail. To improve, make the response more concise, avoid filler words, and add one specific reason or benefit of walking using a linking word. Keep to no more than five sentences.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot — I walk to the subway station every morning before school. Because it gives me fresh air and helps me wake up, I find it a pleasant way to start the day.

建议: You answered honestly but was hesitant and used awkward phrasing and fillers. To improve, begin with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers, correct grammar (family not families; infrastructure is uncountable), and give one or two specific memories using a linking word.

示例: I don't remember exactly, but I often walked with my family when I was a child. For example, our neighbourhood had a safe playground and wide pavements, so we would stroll there every weekend.

建议: The answer gives reasons but is repetitive and worded awkwardly. Improve by using clearer, varied vocabulary, avoiding repetition (use 'enjoy the scenery' once), and linking reasons coherently. Provide a specific example or result.

示例: People enjoy walking in parks because the peaceful atmosphere helps them relax. For instance, many visitors feed birds or admire the flowers, which makes the experience restorative.

建议: Clear preference but slightly informal phrasing and repetition. To improve, state your choice directly, give a reason why, and use linking words. Limit to two or three sentences.

示例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk along a bustling shopping street because I enjoy window‑shopping and popping into interesting shops. Also, the lively atmosphere would make the walk more enjoyable.

建议: You answered with relevant details but used fillers and mixed tenses. Improve by using past tense for a recent activity, removing fillers, and adding one specific detail about the walk (time, favourite shop or what you saw).

示例: Recently, I walked along a street near my home that has many restaurants and coffee shops. I especially enjoyed browsing a small souvenir shop and stopping for a coffee at a cosy café.

× Yeah, I do enjoy walking, and it's necessary for me to walk to the subway station every morning before school.

✓ Yeah, I do enjoy walking, and it's necessary for me to walk to the subway station every morning before school.

No correction needed: 'walking' is correctly used as a gerund after 'enjoy' and 'to walk' correctly follows 'necessary for me'. Suggestion: None.

× Actually, I can't really remember that, but I think I do often go for a walk with my families.

✓ Actually, I can't really remember that, but I think I often went for walks with my family.

The question asked about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Do often go' is present; change to 'often went'. 'Families' is incorrect here: 'family' (singular, collective) is used to mean the person's relatives. Also 'go for a walk' when habitual in the past is better as 'went for walks' (plural) or 'went for a walk'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits (often went) and use 'family' for the immediate relatives.

× And I remember that the community when, uh, of my childhood is quite friendly and there are many infrastructures and facilities for children.

✓ I remember that the community where I grew up was quite friendly, and there were many amenities and facilities for children.

Sentence is ungrammatical and mixes tenses. 'When, uh, of my childhood' is incorrect; use 'where I grew up' to refer to the place. Because this is about the past, use past tense 'was' and 'were'. 'Infrastructures' is not commonly used for local facilities; 'amenities' is more natural. Suggestion: simplify the clause and match tense to past context.

× Perhaps it is because the atmosphere was quite enjoyable in the park and people can like feed some cats or simply enjoy scenery in the park.

✓ Perhaps it is because the atmosphere in the park is enjoyable and people can feed some cats or simply enjoy the scenery.

The question is general (present reasons why people like to walk in parks), so present tense should be used: 'is enjoyable' rather than 'was quite enjoyable'. 'Can like feed' is ungrammatical; either 'can feed' or 'may like to feed'. 'Enjoy scenery' needs the definite article: 'enjoy the scenery'. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements and correct verb combinations.

× If I've got the chance, I will definitely choose to have a walk in a shopping mall or a street that is full of shops where I can get in and take a look.

✓ If I get the chance, I will definitely choose to walk in a shopping mall or along a street full of shops where I can go in and take a look.

Conditional sentence: in first conditional, use present simple in the 'if' clause ('If I get the chance') rather than present perfect ('If I've got the chance'). 'Choose to have a walk' is wordy; 'choose to walk' is natural. 'Get in' is incorrect for entering shops; use 'go in'. 'A street that is full of shops' can be shortened to 'a street full of shops' or 'along a street full of shops'. Suggestion: use 'If I get...' for possibilities and simpler verb phrases.

× Basically I just, umm, take a walk at a street that is near my home where there are, uh, restaurants and coffee shops and also some souvenir shops where I can take a look.

✓ Basically I just take a walk on a street near my home where there are restaurants, coffee shops and also some souvenir shops that I can look around.

For habitual present actions, present simple 'take' is acceptable but preposition is incorrect: we walk 'on' or 'along' a street, not 'at' a street. 'Take a look' is fine but better as 'look around' for shops. Use commas to separate items in a list. Suggestion: use 'on/along' with 'street' and prefer 'look around' for browsing shops.