走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap daha açık, kısa ve doğal olmalı. Konuya doğrudan başlayın, tekrarları ve gereksiz detayları çıkarın. "DVB" gibi belirsiz kısaltmaları açıklayın veya kullanmayın. Bir neden veriyorsanız, nedeninizi mantıklı bağlaçlarla (because / so / therefore) destekleyin ve 2-3 cümleyi geçmeyin.

示例: No, I don't walk much. I find walking quite boring, especially if I have nothing to listen to, so I prefer cycling or taking public transport instead.

建议: Çocukluk hakkında konuşurken zaman uyumuna dikkat edin (was/were, used to). Kısa ve net bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından bir neden veya değişimden bahsedin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin.

示例: Not really. When I was a child I often played with a small ride-on toy car, so I preferred driving it around rather than walking. However, I enjoy walking more now.

建议: Daha doğal ifadeler ve doğru kelime seçimleri kullanın (fresh air, good for health, comfortable paths). Cevabı bir ana fikirle başlatıp iki destekleyici neden verin; bağlaçlarla mantığı güçlendirin.

示例: People like walking in parks because the air is fresher and it's good for their health. Also, parks usually have paved paths and benches, which make walking more comfortable and pleasant.

建议: Koşullu cümle kurarken net olun (If I had the chance...). Tercihinizi kısa ifade edin ve iki neden verin. Yanlış kelime seçimini düzeltin (comfortable ve affordable gereksiz veya uygunsuz burada).

示例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains because I enjoy trekking and the scenery is peaceful. It also gives me good exercise and fresh air.

建议: Zaman ifadelerine dikkat edin (lately, recently, a year ago). Birinci cümlede mevcut durumu belirtin, sonra geçmişteki son yürüyüşünüzü kısa ve doğru zaman kullanarak anlatın. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dilbilgisi hatalarını giderin.

示例: I haven't walked much lately because I have a knee problem. About a year ago I walked in a park in Istanbul, which had very fresh air and beautiful views.

× I don't like walking because I think it's very boring thing.

✓ I don't like walking because I think it's a very boring thing.

The error is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'thing'. Use 'a' for singular countable nouns that are not specific. Suggestion: say 'a very boring thing' or better 'very boring' without 'thing'.

× So I have a DVB that's why I need to do something when I was walking while I was walking and that's why I don't like it.

✓ I have DVB, so I have to do something when I walk, and that's why I don't like it.

The original has redundant and incorrect tense usage ('was walking' and repeated phrase) and unclear clause order. Use simple present 'I walk' to describe habitual actions and connect ideas with 'so' or 'because'. Remove repetition.

× No, I wasn't because when I was a child I have a car for riding like a little car and it was so cute and that's why I wasn't like walking.

✓ No, I didn't, because when I was a child I had a small ride-on car that was so cute, and that's why I didn't like walking.

Mixes past and present: 'wasn't' is incorrect here; use 'didn't' for 'didn't walk'. 'Have' should be past 'had'. Use 'didn't like' for past habitual dislike. Also 'a car for riding like a little car' is rephrased to 'a small ride-on car' for clarity.

× But now I'm. Liking.

✓ But now I like walking.

'I'm liking' is incorrect; stative verb 'like' is normally used in simple present, not present continuous. Also sentence punctuation was broken. Use 'I like walking'.

× Because parks have a fresh air for people health and parks have a walking area, uh, which can people walk comfortable.

✓ Because parks have fresh air for people's health and a walking area where people can walk comfortably.

'A fresh air' should be 'fresh air' (uncountable). 'For people health' needs possessive 'people's health'. 'Which can people walk comfortable' has wrong word order and uses the adjective 'comfortable' instead of the adverb 'comfortably'. Use 'where people can walk comfortably'.

× And I think it's very crucial for parks.

✓ And I think that's very important for parks.

'Crucial for parks' is awkward here; 'important for parks' fits the context. Also 'it's' refers to previous idea; 'that's' is clearer. This is a wording/structure improvement.

× I think I'm going to a mountain.

✓ I think I would go to a mountain or I would go to the mountains.

'I'm going to a mountain' implies present continuous with planned movement; after 'If I had the chance' the conditional 'I would go' is appropriate. Also 'the mountains' is more natural for walking/trekking.

× I like trekking. It's very, very comfortable and to overtake and you can be afford, so it's good.

✓ I like trekking. It's very relaxing and affordable, so it's good.

Original uses inappropriate words: 'comfortable' could be 'relaxing'; 'to overtake' is irrelevant here; 'you can be afford' is incorrect — use 'affordable' to describe cost or 'I can afford it'. Rephrase to 'relaxing and affordable'.

× I didn't go for a walk lately because I have a knee problem now and it can be difficult for a walk.

✓ I haven't gone for a walk lately because I have a knee problem now and walking can be difficult.

Use present perfect 'haven't gone' to describe recent past up to now. 'It can be difficult for a walk' is awkward — use gerund 'walking' as the subject and 'difficult' without 'for a walk'.

× Uh, but I think one year ago I go a park in Istanbul and it's very fresh air and to.

✓ But I think one year ago I went to a park in Istanbul; it had very fresh air.

Use past simple 'went' for a completed action one year ago. 'Go a park' is wrong — use 'went to a park'. 'It's very fresh air' should be 'it had very fresh air' or 'the air was very fresh'. Remove stray 'and to'.