走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 文法と語彙の誤用が多く、意味が不明瞭な箇所があるため、簡潔で正確な表現に直してください。また、話の構成（主旨→補足）を整え、リンク語（for example, usually）を使って流れをよくしてください。具体的には「work」を「walk」に直し、習慣・頻度・最近の経験を分けて述べる練習をしてください。

示例: Yes, I do walk quite often. Usually I walk for about 30 minutes around my house on weekends. For example, last week I walked to a nearby museum and enjoyed the fresh air during my walk.

建议: 時制と語順のミス（現在形／過去形混在）と不自然な表現が目立ちます。まず時制を過去形に統一し、公園の描写や頻度を具体的に述べる練習をしてください。また「prayed something」は文脈に合わない可能性があるため、実際に何をしたのか（played, had a picnicなど）を明確に述べるようにしてください。

示例: Yes, I went outside very often as a child because there was a large park near my house. It was one of the biggest parks in my hometown, and my family and I often went there to play or have picnics.

建议: 発音ミス（work→walk）を直し、語彙は適切ですが、理由の提示に加えて一つ具体例や効果（e.g. reduce stress）を加えるとさらに良くなります。接続語（because, so, therefore）を使い、論理的につなげる練習をしてください。

示例: People like to walk in parks because they can enjoy nature and fresh air. For example, seeing trees and flowers and listening to bird songs often helps people relax and reduce stress.

建议: 意味の取り違え（opportunity to work→opportunity to walk）や、国と動物の関連（Franceは誤り）などの内容誤りがあるため、正確な語彙と文の構造を使って答えてください。条件節（If...）の後は仮定法やwouldを使うこと、動物や理由を具体的に説明することを練習してください。

示例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in the forests of New Zealand. I want to see native plants and wildlife like birds, and the peaceful scenery would help me relax.

建议: 意味不明な表現や語彙の誤用（worked→walked、heart beyond→hard to understand）と時制や文のつながりが不自然です。まず場所を明確に（e.g. along the river）述べ、季節の理由を簡潔に説明する練習をしてください。接続詞（but, because）を正しく使い、短く正確な文を心がけてください。

示例: Lately I have been walking along the river near my house. In spring the weather was pleasant, but recently it has become very hot and there are many insects, so I don't enjoy walking there as much now.

× Yes, I like to work on weekend.

✓ Yes, I like to walk on weekends.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' (word choice error) and 'on weekend' is incorrect preposition/number use. Use 'on weekends' for habitual action. Suggestion: use plural 'weekends' for regular activities and the correct verb 'walk'.

× I work about 30 minutes around my house and recently I went to our museum to buy work and I could enjoy working.

✓ I walk for about 30 minutes around my house and recently I went to our local museum to buy some art, and I enjoyed it.

'I work about 30 minutes' uses wrong verb and tense; use 'walk' and 'for' with duration. 'Our museum' is odd; 'local museum' is clearer. 'to buy work' is unclear; likely 'to buy some art'. 'I could enjoy working' mixes modals and wrong verb; use simple past 'I enjoyed it.' Suggest practicing correct verb selection and duration expressions.

× I often go outside when I was a child because in near my house there is a large park, one of the most large park in my hometown.

✓ I often went outside when I was a child because near my house there was a large park, one of the largest parks in my hometown.

Tense mismatch: 'I often go' should be past 'I often went' for a past time frame. 'in near my house' is incorrect preposition; use 'near my house'. 'one of the most large park' is ungrammatical; use comparative form 'one of the largest parks'. Practice past tense consistency and correct adjective comparison and prepositions.

× So I went there with my family and we prayed something.

✓ So I went there with my family and we did something together.

'prayed something' is semantically odd unless referring to religious activity; likely meaning 'did something'. Using 'prayed' is incorrect choice; replace with appropriate verb. If intended 'played', use that. Ensure correct verb choice and clarity.

× People like to work in parks because they want to feel the atmosphere of nature.

✓ People like to walk in parks because they want to enjoy the atmosphere of nature.

'work in parks' is wrong verb; 'walk' fits context. 'feel the atmosphere of nature' is awkward; 'enjoy the atmosphere of nature' or 'feel close to nature' is better. Use verbs that match meaning.

× In parks there are a lot of trees and plants so they can feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ In parks there are many trees and plants, so people can feel relaxed and comfortable.

Pronoun 'they' ambiguously refers to 'parks'; better to specify 'people'. Also 'a lot of' is informal but acceptable; 'many' is more precise. Suggest matching subjects and pronouns clearly.

× If I had an opportunity to work, I want to go to the forest in New Zealand.

✓ If I had an opportunity to go, I would go to the forests in New Zealand.

Conditional sentence mixed forms incorrectly: 'If I had...' requires 'I would...' not 'I want'. Also 'opportunity to work' is wrong verb; should be 'opportunity to go'. Use correct second conditional structure: If + past, would + base verb.

× This is because I can not only for France but also animals such as kangaroo and koalas, so it makes me relax and peaceful.

✓ This is because I can see not only the scenery but also animals such as kangaroos and koalas, which makes me feel relaxed and peaceful.

Sentence is ungrammatical and word choices are wrong: 'can not only for France' is meaningless. Likely intended 'see not only the scenery' or 'visit places in nature'. Use plural 'kangaroos'. 'It makes me relax and peaceful' should be 'which makes me feel relaxed and peaceful.' Suggest rewriting for clarity and correct adjective/adverb use.

× Lately I worked along my heart beyond along to river.

✓ Lately I walked along the river near my home.

'Worked' is wrong verb; use 'walked'. Original phrase 'along my heart beyond along to river' is unintelligible; replaced with 'along the river near my home' which fits context. Ensure correct verb choice and coherent prepositional phrases.

× In spring there is not uncomfortable because temperature is not high.

✓ In spring it is not uncomfortable because the temperature is not high.

Missing subject 'it' and article 'the' before 'temperature'. Word order wrong: 'there is not uncomfortable' should be 'it is not uncomfortable.' Use definite article with 'temperature' when referring to specific seasonal temperature.

× But recently the temperature is extremely high and there are a lot of bugs, so I don't like to go.

✓ But recently the temperature has been extremely high and there have been a lot of bugs, so I don't like to go.

Use present perfect 'has been' and 'have been' for recent ongoing conditions. 'There are a lot of bugs' is fine for general, but with 'recently' better to use present perfect. Suggest using present perfect for recent changes that continue into present.