走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No/I sometimes do). Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors, use correct comparative structures, and keep under five sentences. Include one specific reason with a linking word (because/so) and a short example.

示例: I sometimes walk a lot, especially when I have free time because walking helps me stay fit. For example, I walk for 30 minutes each evening to improve my health and clear my mind, but when I am short on time I usually cycle because it is faster.

建议: Begin with a clear, natural topic sentence and avoid unclear phrases. Use specific details and correct plural/singular forms. Use a linking word to add one supporting detail. Keep sentences simple and fluent.

示例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because my parents liked to take me to different places. For instance, they took me to parks and playgrounds, which helped me get more exercise and explore new environments.

建议: Give a clear main idea then two brief, specific supporting reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore). Correct word choice (infrastructure → amenities) and avoid repetition. Keep sentences cohesive and natural.

示例: People like walking in parks because parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery. For example, the trees and open areas provide a calm atmosphere, so visitors can relax and get light exercise away from busy workplaces.

建议: State your choice clearly, then give one or two concise, specific reasons linked with words like because or and. Avoid vague or disfluent phrases and check grammar (I haven't been there; the air quality is very attractive). Keep it natural and under five sentences.

示例: I would like to take a long walk in Switzerland because I have never been there and I have read storybooks that describe its beautiful landscapes. Also, recent reports say the air quality is excellent, which makes it an ideal place for long, refreshing walks.

建议: Answer immediately with a clear topic sentence (I walked at... ). Use correct prepositions and concise supporting details: location, duration, and one specific feature. Avoid repetition and keep sentences grammatically correct.

示例: I recently went for a walk in Xujiang Heritage Lake Park, which is about a 10-minute walk from my house. It has beautiful scenery and fresh air, so I enjoy going there to relax and exercise.

× Sometimes, if I am free, of course I'd like to do a some work exercise to, uh, strengthen my health and condition.

✓ Sometimes, if I am free, of course I'd like to do some exercise to strengthen my health and condition.

Error: unnecessary 'do a' before 'some work exercise' and incorrect noun phrase. 'Do exercise' or 'do some exercise' is correct; 'work' is redundant. Use 'do some exercise' and remove extra 'a' and 'work'. Also omit the comma before 'to' and keep infinitive 'to strengthen'. Suggestion: say 'do some exercise' or 'exercise'.

× However, if sometimes I'm really busy with some study work or anything else, I like to ride a bicycle than work because that's more efficiency.

✓ However, if I am really busy with study or other work, I prefer to ride a bicycle rather than walk because that is more efficient.

Errors: 'like to ride... than work' uses incorrect comparative structure; use 'prefer X rather than Y'. 'That's more efficiency' is wrong word form; use adjective 'more efficient' or 'more efficient for me'. Also 'study work' is awkward; use 'study' or 'other work'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to ride a bicycle rather than walk' and 'more efficient'.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

No correction required: the sentence is grammatically acceptable in past tense question form. It matches the prompt asking about past habits.

× I remember when I was in my kindergarten and in my primary school, my parents often took me to walk to another spaces.

✓ I remember when I was in kindergarten and in primary school, my parents often took me to walk in different places.

Errors: unnecessary articles 'my' before kindergarten/primary school in this context; 'to walk to another spaces' wrong preposition and plural form. Use 'walk in' or 'for a walk in' and 'different places' (not 'another spaces'). Suggestion: 'took me for walks in different places'.

× Spaces not only enlarge my wheels but also strengthen my fitnesses.

✓ Those places not only broadened my horizons but also improved my fitness.

Errors: 'spaces' wrong noun; 'enlarge my wheels' is an incorrect metaphor/translation; 'fitnesses' is incorrect plural. Use idiomatic expressions: 'broaden my horizons' and 'improved my fitness'. Also tense adjusted to past. Suggestion: use singular uncountable 'fitness'.

× I really thank them a lot.

✓ I am really thankful to them.

Style: 'I really thank them a lot' is understandable but not idiomatic. Prefer 'I am really grateful to them' or 'I really appreciate them'. Suggestion: use 'I am really grateful to them'.

× People like walking in parks because parks provide different spaces and different infrastructions like open areas and fresh air or some trees.

✓ People like walking in parks because parks provide a variety of spaces and facilities, such as open areas, fresh air, and trees.

Errors: 'different spaces and different infrastructions' has misspelling and wrong word choice; 'infrastructions' should be 'infrastructure' or 'facilities'. Use 'a variety of' instead of repeating 'different'. 'Some trees' is awkward; list items consistently. Suggestion: use 'a variety of spaces and facilities'.

× That's quite different from business workplaces.

✓ That is quite different from business workplaces.

Minor style: contraction 'That's' is acceptable; no grammatical error. No change needed aside from optional formality. Kept sentence as is with full form for consistency.

× Spending time in park helps helps people feel more relaxed, get fresher and light exercise.

✓ Spending time in the park helps people feel more relaxed, get fresher air, and get light exercise.

Errors: repeated 'helps', missing article 'the' before 'park', 'get fresher' lacks object (air), and 'light exercise' needs verb 'get' or 'do'. Correct placement: 'helps people feel more relaxed, get fresher air, and get light exercise.' Suggestion: remove duplicate words and include necessary articles and objects.

× I think I will choose to go to Switzerland, not only because I haven't been that place before, but also for some fairy tales I read when I was a child within With today's report I found the sweetest, uh, air quality or anything else is quite attracting me.

✓ I think I would choose to go to Switzerland, not only because I have not been there before, but also because of the fairy tales I read when I was a child; moreover, I found that its excellent air quality attracts me.

Errors: 'I will choose' is acceptable but conditional 'would' fits hypothetical 'where would you like...' 'haven't been that place' incorrect object; use 'been there'. Sentence is run-on and awkward: 'for some fairy tales I read' should be 'because of the fairy tales I read'. 'is quite attracting me' incorrect; use 'attracts me'. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, use correct pronoun 'there', and correct verb forms.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural with past simple question 'Where did you go...'. No major grammatical error; this is a stylistic preference.

× I just took a walk in the park which near my house about 10 minutes walk on foot let's park named Xujiang Heritage Lake Park.

✓ I just took a walk in the park near my house, about a 10-minute walk on foot; it's called Xujiang Heritage Lake Park.

Errors: relative clause 'which near my house' missing verb; needs 'that is/which is near my house' or 'the park near my house'. 'About 10 minutes walk on foot' needs hyphenation and article: 'about a 10-minute walk'. 'let's park named' is incorrect; use 'it's called' or 'named'. Suggestion: use clear relative clauses and correct noun phrases.

× It's not only have the beautiful scenery but also really great air air.

✓ It not only has beautiful scenery but also really great air.

Errors: 'It's not only have' wrong verb form; after 'it' use 'has'. Repeated 'air air'. Also 'the beautiful scenery' can be 'beautiful scenery' without 'the'. Suggestion: use 'It not only has... but also...'.