钥匙— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement), reduce fillers, and add one brief specific detail. Use linking words to make it coherent.

示例: No, I don't usually carry many keys. I live with my family, so my mother normally keeps the house keys for me. As a result, I only carry a key when I go out alone.

建议: Start with a clear statement about whether you lost your keys, use correct past tense, avoid vague phrases, and give one specific detail (when/place/how). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words.

示例: Yes, I lost my keys once when I was in high school. I left my backpack in the school library and later realized the keys were missing. After searching the library and asking at the lost-and-found, I never found them.

建议: Answer directly about frequency, use correct grammar (present simple for habits, past simple for one-time events), avoid long fragmented sentences, and add a concise specific example with linking words.

示例: No, I don't often forget my keys, but I did lock myself out once. That happened when I was interning in Japan and living alone, so I had to wait outside until a coworker came home and let me in.

建议: State your opinion directly, give 1–2 clear reasons with linking words, correct awkward phrasing, and avoid vague words like 'many reasons'—specify risks.

示例: I don't think it's a good idea to leave keys with a neighbour. For example, they could lose the keys or a stranger might get access to them, which would be a security risk for your home.

× So I didn't be the one who, uh, bring it with me.

✓ So I'm not the one who usually brings them with me.

Original uses incorrect verb forms: 'didn't be' is wrong (mixes past auxiliary with verb 'be') and 'bring' should be third person singular 'brings' to agree with 'who' referring to 'I' implicitly acting as subject in relative clause; also 'keys' plural needs 'them'. Use present simple 'I'm not the one who usually brings them with me' to match habitual action.

× Actually not because I just usually go home with my mom or like my family.

✓ Not really, because I usually go home with my mom or my family.

'Actually not' is awkward; use 'Not really'. 'Just usually' is redundant — use 'usually'. 'Like' is informal and unnecessary. Keep present simple 'I usually go' for habitual action.

× So I didn't be the one who, uh, bring it with me. So I just let them.

✓ So I'm not the one who usually brings them with me, so I just leave them with my family.

'It' is singular while 'keys' are plural; change to 'them'. 'Let them' is incomplete—use 'leave them with my family'. Also correct verb forms ('didn't be' -> 'I'm not', 'bring' -> 'brings').

× I have been lost, uh, during my high school.

✓ I lost them during high school.

'Have been lost' is incorrect for losing an object; use simple past 'I lost them' to describe a completed past event. Also 'during my high school' is awkward; use 'during high school'.

× I just like forget where it is and it just disappear from my back.

✓ I just forgot where they were and they disappeared from my bag.

Pronouns must agree in number: 'it' should be 'they' for 'keys'. Use past tense 'forgot' and 'disappeared' for a past event. 'From my back' is incorrect; likely 'from my bag' is intended.

× And it also the mystery that I don't know where it's gone.

✓ And it's a mystery; I don't know where they've gone.

Missing verb after 'it': use 'it's a mystery'. Use plural pronoun 'they' and present perfect 'have gone' (contracted 'they've gone') to express the unknown current location.

× And yeah, it's the time that I lost it.

✓ And yeah, that's when I lost them.

'The time that I lost it' is awkward; 'that's when I lost them' is natural. Use plural 'them' for keys and simple past 'lost' for the event.

× I have been forgotten key and locked myself out once and when I go uh sorry aboard like being an intern in Japan so I have to stay in the apartment my by myself and.

✓ I once forgot my keys and locked myself out when I went abroad to be an intern in Japan, so I had to stay in the apartment by myself.

'Have been forgotten key' is ungrammatical; use simple past 'forgot my keys'. 'Locked myself out' is correct but should follow past sequence. 'Go aboard' should be 'went abroad'. Use past tense 'had to stay' for resulting situation. Remove filler words and fix word order ('by myself').

× Do you think it's a good idea to leave your keys with a neighbour?

✓ Do you think it's a good idea to leave your keys with a neighbour?

This sentence is already correct. It properly uses 'it's' and 'a neighbour' and asks for opinion with 'Do you think'. No change needed.

× I don't think it's a good idea to leave something important with your neighbor, even they are like crossly too much to you or your family because like there are many reasons that can be danger.

✓ I don't think it's a good idea to leave something important with your neighbor, even if they are very close to you or your family, because there are many reasons it could be dangerous.

Replace 'even they are like crossly too much to you' with 'even if they are very close to you' to express closeness. 'Can be danger' is incorrect; use 'could be dangerous'. Use conditional 'even if' and modal 'could' to indicate possibility. Remove informal fillers like 'like'.