钥匙— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify the main idea and correct word choice (keys, not kids). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Keep it concise and grammatical (max 3–4 sentences).

示例: Yes, I usually carry several keys with me. For example, I carry my house key, bike lock key, and a spare key for work. Also, I take them when I go out with friends or family because having spare keys makes me feel safer and more prepared.

建议: Be specific about an instance and use correct tense. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Provide one clear example of when it happened, what you did, and a brief result using linking words (e.g., so, then).

示例: Yes, I have lost my keys several times. For instance, last year I left my house key on a library desk, so I called my roommate and she brought a spare. After that incident, I started keeping a spare key with a close friend to avoid being locked out.

建议: Use correct verb tenses and sequence words to describe past events. Begin with a clear topic sentence about frequency, then give a specific past example and the consequence. Avoid filler words and repetition.

示例: I don't forget my keys often, but once when I was 22 at university I did lock myself out. At that time, I asked a classmate to contact my roommate, and she opened the door for me. Since then, I check my bag before leaving to prevent it from happening again.

建议: State your opinion clearly, then support it with concise, specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like because or however to structure the argument. Correct word choice (keys, not kids) and grammar will improve clarity.

示例: No, I don't think it's a good idea to leave keys with a neighbour because they might be away when you need them. For example, once my neighbour was on holiday and I couldn't get into my flat, so now I prefer to carry a spare key or leave it with a trusted family member.

× I always bring kids with me and when I go out with my friend or family because if you bring kids it can take you safer and convenient.

✓ I always bring my keys with me when I go out with my friends or family because if you bring keys it can keep you safer and make things more convenient.

The student used 'kids' instead of 'keys' (wrong pronoun/word) and inconsistent pronouns ('friend' vs 'friends'). Replace with 'my keys' and plural 'friends' for natural usage; use 'keep you safer' and 'make things more convenient' for correct collocations and meaning.

× Yeah sure, I usually lost my keys.

✓ Yes, I have usually lost my keys.

The student used simple past 'lost' with 'usually' which typically pairs with present perfect to indicate repeated past experiences up to now. Use present perfect 'have lost' for habitual past actions relevant to the present.

× I don't know why my one race is not it's so bad.

✓ I don't know why my memory is so bad.

The original sentence is unintelligible due to wrong words ('one race', 'it's'). Replace with 'my memory' to convey the intended meaning; use 'is so bad' for correct structure.

× And when I lost my keys I will have ask ask my ask help to my friend and family.

✓ When I lose my keys, I will ask my friends and family for help.

Tense and modal were incorrect and words repeated. Use present simple 'lose' for general situation or past 'lost' if referring to past; 'I will ask' for future response, and correct preposition 'for help'. Remove duplicates.

× I lost school kids and family keys and so on.

✓ I have lost my school keys, house keys, and family keys, and so on.

Replace 'kids' with 'keys' and add possessive 'my' for clarity; list examples with correct nouns 'school keys' and 'house keys'.

× Yeah, when I was 22 years old, in the university life, I forget the keys and lock myself out.

✓ Yes, when I was 22, during university, I forgot my keys and locked myself out.

Mix of past and present tenses: use simple past 'forgot' and 'locked' for a past event. Use 'during university' and 'my keys' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, when that happens, I will ask my classmate to help me and let let them to lock the door.

✓ When that happens, I ask my classmates to help me and let them open the door.

For habitual present responses use present simple 'ask'. Remove duplicate words. 'Let them open the door' is correct; 'let them to lock the door' was ungrammatical and unclear.

× Open the door, Yeah.

✓ They open the door for me.

Fragment corrected to a complete sentence with proper subject 'they' and object 'for me' to clarify who opens the door.

× I don't think so is a good idea because when you your kids leave your neighbor and your neighbor is not at home that situations you will not open the door so you need to take your keys every day.

✓ I don't think it is a good idea to leave your keys with a neighbor, because if your neighbor is not at home when you need them, you will not be able to get in, so you should carry your keys every day.

Many pronoun and word-choice errors: replace 'so is a good idea' with 'it is a good idea'; 'kids' should be 'keys'; fix word order and condition: 'if your neighbor is not at home when you need them'; use 'be able to get in' for ability and 'should carry your keys' for advice.