钥匙— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Энэхүү хариуг илүү байгалийн, цэвэр англи хэл дээр илэрхийлэхийн тулд: 1) “with myself”-ыг ашиглахгүй, зөв хэл нь “with me”; 2) давтагдсан үг, үгний оролцоог багасгах; 3) үг хоорондын холболтыг сайжруулах (for example, “one for my car, one for work, and one for my apartment”); 4) дуусталтай үгсийг арилгах (uh) зэрэг. Мөн хариултыг 1-2 өгүүлбэртэй, илэрхий, логик дарааллаар хэл. Энэ нь Natural & Effective, Basic Structure болон Vocabulary шаардлагад нийцнэ.

示例: I usually carry three keys with me: one for my car, one for my office, and one for my apartment. I keep them all on a single key ring so they don’t get lost.

建议: Энэ хариуг сайтар ангилаж, товч бөгөөд тодорхой болгох шаардлагатай. 1) “there was several cases”-ыг грамматик алдаагүйгээр “there were several times” гэж солих; 2) “used to lose” гэдгийг тодорхой хугацаа дээр хэрэглэсэн тохиолдолд хүнд ойлгомжтой болгох; 3) “uh” гэх мэт дүүргэлтийг арилгах; 4) тодорхой жишээ эсвэл тоон мэдээллийг өгөх (жишээ нь хэдэн удаа) нь Content-ыг сайжруулна.

示例: Yes. When I was a child I lost my house key several times, but I managed to find it on two occasions. For example, once I found it under the sofa the same day I lost it.

建议: Хариуг илүү логик, цэвэр болгохын тулд: 1) эхэнд нь шууд сөрөг буюу эерэг хариулт өгч, дараа туслан тодорхойлж тайлбарлах; 2) цагийн хэллэг (past simple) болон зөв хэлбэр хэрэглэх (I locked myself out, I called a friend) ; 3) цэгцтэй холбох үг ашиглах (for example, “so” эсвэл “so I called”) . Энэ нь Natural & Basic Structure дүрмэнд нийцнэ.

示例: Not often — I have only locked myself out once. At that time I locked myself out of my room, so I called a friend and they came to let me in.

建议: Хариултыг илүү байгалийн, товч болгох: 1) “It is a good idea” гэдгийг “I think it’s a good idea” гэж хувиргаж санааг илүү тодруулах; 2) илт давтагдаж буй үгсийг цэвэрлэх ("in case if" → "in case"); 3) холбоос үгс ашиглаж, тодорхой нөхцөл, болгоомжлол (trust, security) нэмэх нь яриаг баяжуулна; 4) доторх жишээ болон үр дагаврыг нэг өгүүлбэрт багтааж 2-3 өгүүлбэрээр хариул. Энэ нь Content болон Linking words шаардлагад нийцнэ.

示例: I think it’s a good idea to leave a spare key with a neighbour in case you lose or forget yours. However, you should only do this with someone you trust to avoid security risks.

× I usually bring three different keys with myself.

✓ I usually bring three different keys with me.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is used when the subject and object are the same person doing the action to themselves. Here the correct object pronoun is 'me'. Use 'me' after prepositions like 'with'. Example: 'I went with me' is wrong; use 'I went with him/her/me.' (English (Mongolia))

× One is car key, the another one is uh for the office door, and the third one for my apartment.

✓ One is the car key, the another one is for the office door, and the third one is for my apartment.

English requires articles before countable nouns. 'Car key' needs 'the' if referring to a specific key. Also 'the another one' is incorrect; use 'another one' or 'the other one' depending on meaning. Better: 'One is the car key, another is for the office door, and the third is for my apartment.' (English (Mongolia))

× One is car key, the another one is uh for the office door, and the third one for my apartment.

✓ One is the car key, another one is for the office door, and the third one is for my apartment.

Pronoun/phrase consistency: 'another one' is the correct form. Also each clause needs a verb: 'the third one for my apartment' lacks 'is'. Ensure each item has parallel structure: 'One is..., another is..., and the third is...'. (English (Mongolia))

× I put them in one key ring.

✓ I put them on one key ring.

Preposition choice matters: items are placed on a ring, so use 'on'. 'Key ring' is singular and fine; the issue is preposition, but because list requires referencing grammar types only, this correction addresses correct collocation rather than number. (English (Mongolia))

× When I was a child, I used to lose my house key and there was several cases, but uh, I remember that two times I found the key that I've lost.

✓ When I was a child, I used to lose my house key several times, but I remember that twice I found the key I had lost.

Combine 'used to' with 'lose' for habitual past, then express frequency as 'several times' or 'twice'. 'There was several cases' is ungrammatical; use 'several times'. For the earlier past action relative to another past time, use past perfect 'had lost' instead of present perfect 'I've lost'. Also 'two times' is more natural as 'twice'. (English (Mongolia))

× Yes, it happened once. Not often, but at a time when I have locked myself out, I directly called to my friend for help to come and unlock me from the room.

✓ Yes, it happened once. Not often, but when I locked myself out, I called my friend to come and unlock the door for me.

Use simple past 'locked' and 'called' for completed past events. Remove unnecessary 'have' (present perfect) which conflicts with specific past time. 'Called to my friend' should be 'called my friend'. 'Unlock me from the room' is unnatural; say 'unlock the door for me' or 'let me into the room'. (English (Mongolia))

× It is good idea because in case if you forget your key or lose your key then you can approach to your neighbor, ask them to give the spare key.

✓ It is a good idea because if you forget or lose your key, you can ask your neighbor to give you the spare key.

Include the article 'a' before 'good idea'. Use 'if' instead of 'in case if' (redundant). 'Approach to your neighbor' is incorrect; use 'ask your neighbor' or 'approach your neighbor'. Also 'ask them to give the spare key' should be 'ask them to give you the spare key' to clarify the recipient. Maintain concise conditional structure. (English (Mongolia))

× That's help.

✓ That helps.

'That's help' is incorrect because 'help' as a noun would need an article ('That's a help' is rare). Using the verb 'helps' expresses that the action is useful: 'That helps.' Match subject-verb and use correct form. 'That helps' is natural in response. (English (Mongolia))