食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitations and repeated phrases; use precise vocabulary (e.g. "natural" not "more a nature"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: My favourite food is simple, natural dishes, such as steamed vegetables and grilled fish. I prefer these because they are minimally seasoned and easy to digest, so I feel light and healthy after eating them.

建议: Give a direct past-focused topic sentence and finish your thought: mention specific childhood foods and explain why you liked them using clear linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences; include a concrete example to show specificity.

示例: When I was young I liked plain, wholesome foods such as boiled rice, steamed vegetables and plain chicken. I enjoyed them because they were not sweet, made me feel energetic, and helped me stay healthy as a child.

建议: Answer directly and give specific examples of seasonal or festival foods with linking words (e.g. "for example", "during"). Reduce filler words and finish sentences fully. Mention one or two festivals and the typical foods to add concrete detail.

示例: Yes, we do. For example, during the Lunar New Year we eat dumplings and sticky rice cakes, and during the Mid-Autumn Festival we enjoy mooncakes. These festival foods are traditional and usually only eaten at those times.

× Well, basically I tend to choose the food which is more a nature.

✓ Well, basically I tend to choose food that is more natural.

The phrase 'more a nature' is incorrect English adjective usage. Use the adjective 'natural' to describe 'food' and 'more natural' to indicate comparative degree. Also use 'food that' instead of 'the food which' for natural phrasing.

× I think it's like the wholesome food which don't contain, which don't contain a lot of umm, uh, seasoned on it with it.

✓ I think it's wholesome food that doesn't contain a lot of seasoning.

Pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'food' is singular so use 'doesn't' not 'don't'. 'Which' is awkward here; 'that' is better for defining clauses. 'Seasoned on it with it' is redundant and incorrect; use the noun 'seasoning'. Remove filler words for clarity.

× So I think it will help my body feel light.

✓ So I think it helps my body feel light.

Tense mismatch: the speaker expresses a general belief, so present simple 'helps' is appropriate rather than 'will help' which implies future. Use consistent present tense for habitual or general statements.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? / Actually, I prefer the food which is is not which is not sweet and it's just like a wholesome food because I could feel nimble and light for my body and it definitely helping me to maintain my body at the.

✓ When I was young, I preferred foods that were not sweet and were wholesome because I could feel nimble and light, and they definitely helped me maintain my weight.

Multiple errors: the question is past, so the response should use past tense 'preferred' not present 'prefer'. Plural 'foods' better fits general types. Use past tense verbs 'were' and 'helped'. 'It definitely helping me to maintain my body at the' is incomplete and ungrammatical; clarify as 'helped me maintain my weight' for natural meaning.

× Actually, I prefer the food which is is not which is not sweet and it's just like a wholesome food because I could feel nimble and light for my body and it definitely helping me to maintain my body at the.

✓ When I was young, I preferred foods that were not sweet and were wholesome because they made my body feel nimble and light, and they definitely helped me stay healthy.

Pronoun reference and subject-verb agreement: use 'they' to refer to plural 'foods' and past tense 'made' and 'helped'. Rewording to 'stay healthy' or 'maintain my health' completes the idea and is natural.

× As in Chinese culture, sometimes we might have different traditional habit custom to eat all kinds of foods at the specific festival.

✓ In Chinese culture, sometimes we have different traditional customs of eating certain foods at specific festivals.

Preposition and noun usage: 'As in Chinese culture' is awkward; 'In Chinese culture' is idiomatic. Use 'customs' plural and the phrase 'customs of eating' or 'custom to eat' for clarity. 'At the specific festival' should be 'at specific festivals' to indicate general practice.

× So we usually have uh, have a chance to try different foods at some.

✓ So we usually have a chance to try different foods then.

Incorrect ending and filler: 'at some' is incomplete; use 'then' or 'at those times' to refer back to festivals. Remove duplicate 'have' and filler 'uh'. The gerund form is not required here; use simple infinitive 'to try' which is already correct.