食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Keep your answer concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons (using linking words) and avoid repetition. Use past tense when talking about childhood. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

示例: My favourite food is biryani. I have loved it since I was a child because of its rich spices and fragrant rice, which remind me of family gatherings. For example, my mother used to make biryani on special occasions, and the smell always made the meal feel festive.

建议: Answer directly using correct tense and avoid fillers. Give a clear topic sentence about preference in childhood, then add a specific reason with a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., ‘when I was young’).

示例: When I was young, I preferred homemade food because it tasted fresher and was healthier. For instance, my family cooked simple meals with fresh vegetables, which made me feel safe and well-nourished.

建议: Be specific and organized: say whether you change your diet seasonally, then give two clear examples using linking words (e.g., ‘for example’, ‘also’). Avoid fillers and unclear phrases like ‘food card’ or ‘wedding section.’

示例: Yes, I change what I eat at certain times of the year. For example, at New Year’s I often have a barbecue and some Western dishes, and at weddings I usually enjoy traditional dishes such as beef curry and sweet desserts.

建议: Answer directly with a clear statement, then give a concise reason and one specific example or memory. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use correct tense and phrasing like ‘It hasn’t changed’ or ‘I still love biryani.’

示例: No, it hasn’t changed; I still love biryani. I enjoy it because of its complex flavours and because it reminds me of family celebrations—for example, we often eat biryani at festivals and special dinners.

× My favorite food is biryani. I and I love to eat biryani when I was a kid and during my lifestyle I always like to eat biryani because it is.

✓ My favorite food is biryani. I loved to eat biryani when I was a kid and throughout my life I have always liked to eat biryani because it is delicious.

Problems: incorrect pronoun order 'I and I', tense inconsistency ('love' with 'when I was a kid'), awkward phrase 'during my lifestyle', and sentence fragment ending with 'because it is'. Suggestion: Use correct pronoun single subject 'I', match past habit with 'loved' for childhood or use present perfect 'have always liked' for continuing preference, replace 'during my lifestyle' with 'throughout my life', and complete the clause by adding an adjective ('delicious').

× Hi, I was when I was a young I always prefer to homemade food because it is a so delicious and safe for us and and when my bachelor life I always love to eat homemade food.

✓ When I was young, I always preferred homemade food because it was very delicious and safe for us, and during my bachelor life I also loved to eat homemade food.

Problems: extra filler 'Hi', redundant 'I was when I was a young', incorrect verb tense 'prefer' for past habit, wrong article 'to homemade food', awkward phrase 'a so delicious', repeated 'and', and awkward 'when my bachelor life'. Suggestion: Remove filler, start with 'When I was young', use past tense 'preferred' for past habit, say 'homemade food' without 'to', use 'very delicious' rather than 'a so delicious', and use 'during my bachelor life' or 'when I was a bachelor'.

× Yeah, I occasionally change my food card because when a new year I always celebration with a barbecue and some western food.

✓ Yeah, I occasionally change my diet because at New Year I always celebrate with a barbecue and some Western food.

Problems: 'change my food card' is incorrect collocation; 'when a new year' is wrong preposition and article; 'always celebration' uses a noun instead of the verb. Suggestion: Use 'change my diet', 'at New Year' or 'on New Year's', and use the verb 'celebrate'. Capitalize 'Western' as a proper adjective.

× But uh, in a wedding section, I always love to uh, wedding food like beef Curry something.

✓ But at weddings, I always like wedding food such as beef curry and similar dishes.

Problems: 'in a wedding section' is unidiomatic, repeated fillers 'uh', 'I always love to wedding food' incorrect structure, inconsistent capitalization 'Curry'. Suggestion: Use 'at weddings' and 'I like wedding food such as ...', use lowercase 'curry' unless part of a name, and avoid fillers.

× No, it's not a chance in my life because in my childhood I always love to eat biryani and in the nowadays I also love to eat biryani because, uh, biryani.

✓ No, it hasn't changed in my life because in my childhood I always loved to eat biryani, and nowadays I also love to eat biryani because I think it is the most delicious food.

Problems: 'it's not a chance' is incorrect vocabulary for 'hasn't changed', tense mismatch 'always love' for childhood (should be past 'loved'), awkward 'in the nowadays', sentence fragment 'because, uh, biryani'. Suggestion: Use 'hasn't changed' or 'has not changed', use past tense for childhood habits, 'nowadays' without 'the', and complete the reason clause with a full clause like 'because I think it is the most delicious food'.