食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, add one specific detail (where you eat it or how it’s prepared) and use a linking phrase to extend your answer. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., crunchy, flavourful).

示例: My favourite food is chicken chop because the coating is crunchy and the meat stays tender. I especially enjoy it with a peppery gravy at a local café, and I usually have it about once a month as a treat.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense and correct basic grammar. Reduce fillers (uh), use linking words to explain why you liked it and give a specific example (ingredients, memory). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

示例: When I was young, I loved my mother’s spaghetti carbonara because it was creamy and full of bacon. I often asked her to make extra so I could take it to school, and the smell reminded me of home.

建议: Answer directly with a clear statement about seasonal eating, avoid hesitations, and give a coherent, specific example. Use linking words (for example, however) and correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., ‘not fresh’). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, one year I tried raw oysters during the summer, but I found them unpleasant because they tasted slightly off, so I avoid them now.

建议: Give a clear comparison between past and present tastes using correct grammar and linking words (for example, whereas, now). Be specific about new favourite food, why it changed (health, convenience), and avoid unclear phrases. Use 2–4 concise sentences.

示例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. Whereas I used to love my mother’s spaghetti carbonara as a child, I now prefer grilled chicken with vegetables because I want healthier, more protein-rich meals for work.

× My favorite food is chicken chop.

✓ My favorite food is chicken chop.

No grammatical error in this sentence; it is acceptable to state a favorite food. Keep as is.

× I love it because it is crispy and it is really delicious for me and I usually eat it at least once a month.

✓ I love it because it is crispy and really delicious, and I usually eat it at least once a month.

Remove the redundant subject 'it' and the unnecessary phrase 'for me' which is implicit. Use a comma before 'and' to join clauses. This improves fluency and avoids awkward repetition.

× When I was young, I really love to eat spaghetti carbonara, uh, from my mom.

✓ When I was young, I really loved eating spaghetti carbonara that my mom made.

The time expression 'When I was young' requires the past tense. Change 'love' to past 'loved' and use 'loved eating' or 'used to eat'. Also use 'that my mom made' for clarity.

× She really good in making it.

✓ She was really good at making it.

Use past tense 'was' to match 'when I was young'. Use the correct preposition 'good at' rather than 'good in'. This corrects verb and preposition usage.

× Usually she's, I will ask her to make it, uh, to, for me to bring it to school.

✓ Usually I would ask her to make it for me to bring to school.

The original mixes tenses and has extra words. Use 'would' or 'used to' to describe habitual past actions. Remove redundant 'to' and reorder to 'make it for me to bring to school'.

× Yeah, I, I usually eat different foods at different time of real, uh, such as the, there was a year that I try to eat, uh, oyster, oyster, and I think it is not great for me.

✓ Yeah, I usually eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, there was a year when I tried oysters, and I didn't like them.

Use plural 'times' and the phrase 'of the year'. Separate into two sentences for clarity. Use past tense 'tried' and simple phrasing 'didn't like them' instead of 'not great for me'.

× I, I, the taste is, you know, unfresh.

✓ The taste, you know, was not fresh.

Use 'was not fresh' rather than 'unfresh', which is nonstandard. Match past tense 'was' to the past event.

× Yeah, my favorite, favorite food change since I was child.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to describe a change from the past to now. Include the article 'a' before 'child'.

× For example, when I was times, like I said, I love to eat spaghetti carbonara, but now I love to eat, umm, chicken.

✓ For example, when I was younger, as I said, I loved to eat spaghetti carbonara, but now I like to eat chicken.

Use 'when I was younger' and past tense 'loved' for past preference. Use present tense 'like' for current preference. Remove filler words and correct word order.

× Green is really tasteful.

✓ Green chicken is really tasty.

'Tasteful' is incorrect for flavor; use 'tasty' or 'delicious'. Clarify what 'green' refers to (e.g., 'green chicken' or 'green curry'). If referring to a dish, name it clearly.

× And because I want to work, of course I need to obtain more.

✓ Also, because I want to work, I need to gain more experience/skills.

'Obtain more' is vague and awkward. Specify what is needed (experience, skills, qualifications). Use 'gain' or 'get' and a clear object to make the sentence meaningful.