食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct grammar (use present perfect/simple present), and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase if needed. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct subject-verb and article errors.

示例: My favourite food is hamburgers. I have loved them since childhood, and I often buy one from a small burger shop near my house because they use fresh ingredients and a special sauce.

建议: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence, correct word choice and grammar, and give a specific detail or memory. Avoid repetition and repair phrases. Use linking words like "also" or "and" properly.

示例: When I was young I liked hamburgers and also ramen. I remember being very happy eating ramen with my family because we would sit together and talk about our day.

建议: Be more specific and fluent: use correct expressions for seasons/times of year, provide a clear example with brief explanation and connect sentences with linking words. Correct phrasing like "at different times of the year" and identify when you eat the food (season or festival).

示例: Yes, I do. In spring I often eat nanohana, a Japanese green vegetable, because it is in season and tastes fresh. In winter I prefer warm stews to stay warm.

建议: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence, use correct tense and grammar, and explain briefly with a reason and one specific example. Avoid unclear phrases like "which you are loved." Keep it natural and concise.

示例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed since childhood. I still prefer hamburgers because they remind me of family outings, so I still eat them often now.

× My favorite food is hamburger.

✓ My favorite food is the hamburger.

The noun 'hamburger' here refers to a specific kind of food as a general favorite; in English, singular countable nouns used in a general sense typically need the definite article 'the' or the plural form. Use 'the hamburger' or 'hamburgers'. Suggestion: say 'My favorite food is hamburgers.' if you mean the food in general.

× I love to eat hamburger from my childhood and uh also now I am often go to the hamburger shop near my house and buy hamburger for me.

✓ I have loved eating hamburgers since my childhood, and I still often go to the hamburger shop near my house and buy hamburgers for myself.

Multiple issues: 'from my childhood' requires present perfect continuous or perfect simple 'have loved' with 'since' for a period continuing to now (Grammar type 6 present tense and type 5 past tense also relate) and the verb phrase 'am often go' is incorrect; use simple present 'often go' or present perfect meaning 'still often go'. Use gerund 'eating' after 'love'. Use reflexive pronoun 'myself' instead of 'for me'. Also use plural 'hamburgers' for general reference. Suggestion: use 'have loved eating hamburgers since my childhood' and 'often go ... and buy hamburgers for myself.'

× As I said, I like hamburgers when I was young, but also I liked Ramelle in my childhood.

✓ As I said, I liked hamburgers when I was young, but I also liked ramen in my childhood.

Tense mismatch: 'I like hamburgers when I was young' incorrectly mixes present simple 'like' with past time 'when I was young' (use past 'liked'). 'Ramelle' appears to be a misspelling of 'ramen' and should be corrected. Suggestion: keep past tense for past habits: 'I liked hamburgers ...' and correct noun spelling.

× I'm I was so happy when I eat ramen with my family.

✓ I was so happy when I ate ramen with my family.

Incorrect auxiliary and tense: 'I'm I was' is wrong; use 'I was'. 'When I eat' is present tense but the context is past, so use past 'ate'. Suggestion: use simple past for past events: 'I was so happy when I ate ramen with my family.'

× Yes I do. I love to enjoy different foods in different times of year.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy different foods at different times of the year.

Awkward phrasing: 'love to enjoy' is unnecessary—use 'enjoy' or 'like'. 'Different times of year' needs the article 'the' and the preposition 'at' for time expressions. Suggestion: 'I enjoy different foods at different times of the year.'

× For example, I eat nanohana which is some green vegetables.

✓ For example, I eat nanohana, which is a green vegetable.

'Some green vegetables' is vague and disagrees in number with 'nanohana' (a specific vegetable); better to use 'a green vegetable' or 'a type of green vegetable.' Use a comma before the nonrestrictive clause. Suggestion: 'nanohana, which is a green vegetable.'

× It's made in Japan.

✓ It is grown in Japan.

'Made in Japan' implies manufactured; for a vegetable, the correct verb is 'grown'. Use 'grown in Japan' to describe origin of plants. Suggestion: say 'It is grown in Japan.'

× I think my favorite food is not change between now and when I was a child.

✓ I think my favorite food has not changed between now and when I was a child.

Tense and verb form: 'is not change' is ungrammatical; use present perfect passive or active 'has not changed' to indicate a state continuing from past to present. Also 'between now and when I was a child' is acceptable but 'since I was a child' is more natural. Suggestion: 'has not changed since I was a child.'

× Now I often eat hamburgers and snacks which you are loved.

✓ Now I often eat hamburgers and snacks that I have always loved.

Pronoun and verb errors: 'which you are loved' is incorrect structure and meaning. Likely intended 'that I have always loved' or 'that I used to love'. Use relative clause 'that I have always loved' or simple 'that I loved'. Suggestion: 'snacks that I have always loved.'