食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food, then give 1–2 specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases (e.g. “there”, “what I like pizza”).

示例: My favourite food is pizza. I especially enjoy it because the tomato sauce is rich and slightly sweet, and the melted cheese adds a creamy texture. For example, I like pizzas topped with mushrooms and pepperoni because they give a good balance of flavours.

建议: Answer directly and use past tense when talking about childhood. Use one clear topic sentence then support with a specific reason and example. Reduce filler words and repetition. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

示例: When I was young, I liked the same food — pizza. I loved it because it was cheesy and the tomato sauce had a slightly sweet taste. For example, my favourite toppings were mushrooms and pepperoni, which made the pizza more flavourful.

建议: Be specific about seasons or occasions and use clear grammar. State a concise main idea, then give 1–2 concrete examples of foods you try at particular times and why. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect country adjectives (use “Korean food”).

示例: Yes. I try different foods each year to explore new cuisines. For example, this year I tried Korean dishes like bibimbap and Korean BBQ, and next year I plan to try Japanese sushi because I enjoy fresh seafood and delicate flavours.

建议: Give a clear direct answer (yes or no) and then explain briefly. Use correct grammar for present perfect or simple present when appropriate. Mention one concrete addition and why you like it, using linking words like "however" or "also".

示例: No, my favourite food hasn't really changed; I still love pizza. However, I have added pasta to my favourites because I enjoy it with parmesan and oregano — the herbs add a fragrant, savoury taste.

× To be honest, I have a lot of different food which is my favorite but the most and the common one.

✓ To be honest, I have a lot of different foods that are my favorites, but the most common one is pizza.

The student used 'food' singularly when referring to multiple items; use plural 'foods' and 'that are my favorites'. Also 'which' was used awkwardly; use 'that' and restructure the clause for clarity. Use 'most common one is pizza' to state the single favorite clearly.

× Actually, I like pizza because it tastes good there and delicious.

✓ Actually, I like pizza because it tastes good and is delicious.

The word 'there' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. Use 'tastes good and is delicious' with parallel adjective structure. Also include verb 'is' before 'delicious'.

× A tomato sauce is the best thing, so that's why what I like pizza.

✓ Tomato sauce is the best thing, so that's why I like pizza.

Do not use the indefinite article 'A' before an uncountable noun like 'tomato sauce' in this general statement. Also remove 'what' which is incorrect; use 'I like pizza' and correct word order.

× Uh, actually, actually when I was young, I have the same food.

✓ Uh, actually, when I was young, I had the same favorite food.

When referring to the past, use past tense 'had' instead of present 'have'. Also clarify by adding 'favorite' to show meaning.

× I have changed.

✓ I haven't changed.

The speaker intended to say their preference has not changed; 'I have changed' is ambiguous and suggests the speaker changed themselves. Use negative present perfect 'I haven't changed' to indicate continuity.

× I'm still I like.

✓ I still like it.

The original has redundant pronouns and incorrect word order. Use 'I still like it' to express continued preference.

× I was liking pizza because umm it tasty and cheesy and the tomato sauce give it a rich, slightly sweet flavor.

✓ I liked pizza because it was tasty and cheesy, and the tomato sauce gave it a rich, slightly sweet flavor.

Use simple past 'liked' for past preference, 'was tasty' and 'was cheesy' or combine with commas. Use past 'gave' to match past timeframe. Also include 'was' before 'tasty'.

× And especially like pizza with mushrooms and all those and pepperoni and cheese.

✓ I especially liked pizza with mushrooms, pepperoni, and cheese.

Remove extraneous conjunctions 'and all those and'. Use parallel list with commas. Use past tense 'liked' to match context.

× There is a lot of difference.

✓ There are a lot of differences.

Use plural 'differences' with plural verb 'are'. The original singular 'a lot of difference' is unnatural here.

× Yes umm every year umm I'll try a new uh food like maybe the next year I will try sushi which is Japan and this year have tried Korea.

✓ Yes. Every year I try a new food; for example, last year I tried Korean food and next year I will try sushi from Japan.

Mixing tenses and missing articles caused confusion. Use present simple 'I try' for habitual action, past 'I tried' for last year, and future 'I will try' for next year. Also clarify 'Korean food' and 'sushi from Japan'.

× So every year I have I change food because I like to mixing and I'm tasting different foods.

✓ So every year I change what I eat because I like mixing and tasting different foods.

Remove extra 'I have'. Use 'change what I eat' for clarity. Use gerunds 'mixing and tasting' correctly without 'to' before 'mixing'.

× Umm, it depends. Where is the no to be honest.

✓ Umm, it depends. To be honest, no, it hasn't changed.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Rephrase to 'To be honest, no, it hasn't changed' to answer the question about change since childhood.

× Uh no, but I have add one more at at my list which I like.

✓ No, but I have added one more item to my list that I like.

Use past participle 'added' for present perfect 'have added'. Remove duplicated 'at'. Use 'item' or 'dish' and 'to my list' for correct preposition.

× Umm, as I mentioned before that I like pizza because it's cheesy and tasty and slight sweet tomato sauce and also I like pasta with parmesan and oregano.

✓ As I mentioned before, I like pizza because it's cheesy and tasty with a slightly sweet tomato sauce, and I also like pasta with Parmesan and oregano.

Use 'a slightly sweet tomato sauce' (article plus adjective 'slightly' before 'sweet'). Capitalize 'Parmesan' as a proper noun. Add commas for clarity and 'also' before the second item.