食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문장 구조를 명확히 하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 주제문으로 직접 대답한 뒤 재료나 이유를 구체적으로 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 성분을 설명할 때는 ‘contains’나 ‘is made of’ 같은 동사를 사용하고, 단어가 이어지도록 연결어를 쓰세요.

示例: My favourite food is kimchi. It is a traditional Korean side dish made of fermented cabbage, red pepper powder, garlic, and sometimes small shrimp for extra flavor. I enjoy it because it has a spicy, tangy taste and goes well with many meals.

建议: 시제와 문법을 정확히 사용하세요(과거 시제 사용). 이유를 말할 때 불필요한 반복을 피하고, 근거를 하나로 좁혀 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(for example, because)를 이용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주세요.

示例: When I was young, my favourite food was instant ramen because it was cheap and convenient. I especially liked its strong salty and spicy flavour, which felt exciting to my young taste buds.

建议: 짧은 부정 답변 뒤에 이유나 예시를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 'usually' 같은 빈도 표현을 정확한 위치에 두고, 계절별 변화가 없다면 그 이유(습관, 가정 식습관 등)를 구체적으로 설명하세요.

示例: No, I usually eat the same kinds of food throughout the year. Because my family maintains traditional Korean meals, we often have kimchi and rice regardless of the season.

建议: ‘Not much has changed’와 같은 표현을 정확한 어순으로 사용하세요. 좋아하는 음식이 계속 같은 이유를 구체적으로 제시하고, 중복 표현(‘taste taste’, ‘something like that’)을 피하세요.

示例: Not much has changed; I still enjoy kimchi and instant ramyeon. I still like them because kimchi is flavorful and instant ramyeon has a satisfying spicy and salty taste.

× Kimchi is Korean traditional food, so I really like this food.

✓ Kimchi is a traditional Korean food, so I really like it.

'Korean traditional food' has incorrect word order; in English adjectives typically go before nouns and 'traditional' should come before 'Korean' when using the phrase 'traditional Korean food'. Also 'this food' is repetitive; use the pronoun 'it' instead. Suggestion: say 'a traditional Korean food' and replace 'this food' with 'it'.

× Kimchi ingredient.

✓ Kimchi has several ingredients.

The original is a fragment lacking a verb. To make it a complete sentence, add a verb such as 'has' and a quantifier like 'several ingredients'. Suggestion: 'Kimchi has several ingredients.'

× This food is that a shrimp, some kind of pepper powder and something like that.

✓ It contains shrimp, some kind of pepper powder, and other ingredients.

'This food is that a shrimp' is ungrammatical: wrong article use and structure. Use 'contains' to describe ingredients and list items without unnecessary articles. Also 'something like that' is vague; 'other ingredients' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'It contains shrimp, some kind of pepper powder, and other ingredients.'

× When I was young, my favorite food is instant ramen because this it it tastes very salty and spicy.

✓ When I was young, my favorite food was instant ramen because it tasted very salty and spicy.

The sentence mixes past time reference 'When I was young' with present tense 'is' and present 'tastes'. Use past tense 'was' and 'tasted' to match the time frame. Also remove repeated words 'this it it'. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent with past time expressions.

× When I was a child I mainly very like this tasty, that's why I like it.

✓ When I was a child I really liked it because it was so tasty, which is why I still like it.

Mixes past and present; 'When I was a child' requires past tense 'liked'. 'Mainly very like' is ungrammatical; use 'really liked' or 'mainly liked'. Clarify cause and effect: 'which is why I still like it.' Suggestion: use past tense for childhood and connect to present with 'still'.

× No, I'm I'm usually all season eating the same food.

✓ No, I usually eat the same food all year round.

Word order is incorrect: adverbial phrases like 'usually' should come before the main verb 'eat'. 'All season' is not natural; use 'all year round'. Remove repeated 'I'm'. Suggestion: 'I usually eat the same food all year round.'

× It is a Korean traditional food.

✓ It is a traditional Korean food.

Word order of adjectives is more natural as 'traditional Korean food'. Also using 'It is' is fine, but keep consistent phrasing with previous correction. Suggestion: use 'a traditional Korean food.'

× Nothing much changed, I'm still like a kimchi and instant ramyeon.

✓ Not much has changed; I still like kimchi and instant ramyeon.

'Nothing much changed' is less natural than 'Not much has changed.' Also 'I'm still like a kimchi' incorrectly uses 'like' with 'I'm' and an article before 'kimchi'. Use 'I still like kimchi and instant ramyeon.' Suggestion: use present perfect for changes since childhood and correct verb phrase 'I still like'.

× This food tasted taste too very salty and spicy and something like that.

✓ These foods taste very salty and spicy.

Original mixes tenses and uses redundant words 'tasted taste too very'. Use present tense 'taste' when making general statements about flavor. 'Too' and 'very' together are redundant; choose one. 'Something like that' is vague; omit it. Also use plural 'these foods' if referring to both kimchi and ramyeon. Suggestion: 'These foods taste very salty and spicy.'