食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, chính tả và dùng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn; tránh lỗi như “free food” thay vì “favourite food” và dùng thì đúng. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, đưa thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể kèm liên từ để câu mạch lạc (ví dụ: vì sao thích, khi nào ăn). Tránh câu quá dài không rõ ràng.

示例: My favourite food is fried chicken because I love the crispy, golden-brown skin. I usually eat it occasionally as a treat, although I know it is unhealthy if eaten often, so I try to balance it with salads and vegetables.

建议: Cần sửa thì (used to / liked) và ngữ pháp; sửa lỗi từ vựng và diễn đạt (e.g. “with an mice” là không đúng). Nên nêu rõ lý do kèm ví dụ cụ thể và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý. Tránh câu rời rạc và lỗi chủ-động từ số ít/đại từ.

示例: When I was young, I used to love chocolate cake because it was sweet and soft. My family always had it at celebrations, so the smell and taste always remind me of happy times with them.

建议: Cần sửa nhiều lỗi đánh máy/ phát âm viết (e.g. “east, South and still” unclear) và dùng từ chính xác (eat, foods, season names). Hãy nêu rõ ví dụ cụ thể cho từng mùa, dùng liên từ (for example, whereas) một cách chính xác và giữ câu súc tích tối đa 3–4 câu.

示例: Yes, I eat different foods during the year. For example, in winter I prefer hot, hearty meals like soups and stews because they keep me warm, whereas in summer I choose lighter options such as salads and grilled vegetables.

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, từ sai nghĩa và lỗi từ vựng lớn (ví dụ “shy”, “friend of”, “Swiss snacks”, “real fish and vegetable disease” đều không chính xác). Nên trả lời trực tiếp, so sánh quá khứ và hiện tại, giải thích nguyên nhân thay đổi và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về món hiện tại. Giữ câu ngắn gọn, đúng thì và dùng linking words như “but” hoặc “now”.

示例: When I was a child, I loved sweets like candy and chocolate because I had a big sweet tooth. Now my favourite foods are fish and vegetables because I try to eat healthier and feel better when I eat balanced meals.

× Well to be honest, my free food is fast food.

✓ Well, to be honest, my favourite food is fast food.

Student misused word 'free' for 'favourite' (word choice rather than article) and missed comma. Change to 'favourite food' to convey meaning. Add comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: proofread for incorrect words and punctuation.

× I am a big fan of chicken because the skin is crispy and golden brown, but I know it's unhealthy if eaten often.

✓ I am a big fan of chicken because the skin is crispy and golden brown, but I know it is unhealthy if eaten often.

Use full form 'it is' instead of contraction only if consistency needed; main issue is fine. Ensure subject 'it' refers to 'chicken' (singular) so verb form correct. Suggestion: keep pronoun reference clear.

× When I was young I love chocolate cake because it's with an mice.

✓ When I was young I loved chocolate cake because it came with mice.

Original mixes past time marker 'When I was young' with present 'love' (tense inconsistency). Use past 'loved'. Also phrase 'it's with an mice' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'it came with milk' or 'it had cream'—I corrected structurally but confirm intended noun. Suggestion: match tense to time reference and use correct nouns and determiners ('a mouse' vs 'mice').

× I usually eat with my family in celebrations.

✓ I usually eat with my family at celebrations.

Use preposition 'at' with 'celebrations' rather than 'in'. 'At celebrations' is the common collocation. Suggestion: learn common prepositional collocations (at a party/celebration).

× So it's always reminds me.

✓ So it always reminds me.

Incorrect combination of auxiliary 'is' plus verb 'reminds'. Use simple present 'reminds' to match subject 'it'. Suggestion: do not add unnecessary auxiliary verbs; choose correct verb form for subject.

× To be honest I usually eat different foods at different time of the year.

✓ To be honest, I usually eat different foods at different times of the year.

Count noun 'time' should be plural 'times' when referring to multiple occasions, and comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: use plural for repeated occasions: 'different times of the year'.

× For example in winter I tend to east, South and still because they keep me warm whereas in summer I prefer fresh foods, example salad.

✓ For example, in winter I tend to eat soups and stews because they keep me warm, whereas in summer I prefer fresh foods, for example, salad.

Multiple errors: 'east' should be 'eat'; 'South and still' unclear—likely 'soups and stews' (correct collocation). Use 'eat' base verb after 'tend to'. Add commas and 'for example' phrase punctuation. Suggestion: use base verb after 'tend to' and choose correct food words; proofread for typos.

× When I was shy, I am a big friend of Swiss snacks like candy and chocolates because I love sugar days.

✓ When I was young, I was a big fan of Swiss snacks like candy and chocolates because I loved sweet things.

Tense mismatch: 'When I was young' requires past tense 'was' and 'loved'. 'Shy' vs 'young' likely wrong word; 'big friend' should be 'big fan'; 'sugar days' unclear—changed to 'sweet things'. Suggestion: match past time expressions with past tense and use correct collocations 'big fan' and 'sweet things'.

× Now my favorite food is real fish and vegetable disease because I try to eat healthier.

✓ Now my favourite food is real fish and vegetables because I try to eat healthier.

Original contains 'vegetable disease' (nonsense) and 'real fish' is odd—kept 'real fish' but better as 'fresh fish'. Corrected plural 'vegetables'. Suggestion: use accurate vocabulary ('fresh fish', 'vegetables') and plural forms for general food categories.