建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a direct, concise topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two clear supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Use precise vocabulary (tall buildings, apartment blocks, skyline) and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct basic grammar (there are / they are).

示例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a high apartment block right in front of us and a few office towers beside it, which dominate the local skyline.

建议: Start with a clear direct answer, then briefly explain your reasons with linking words (because / instead). Use accurate grammar (I don't want to / I prefer to) and vocabulary (buildings, skyline, architecture). Keep it concise and avoid repetitive phrases.

示例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer photographing the sky and my pet cats. For instance, I often capture sunsets and candid shots of cats, so architecture photography isn't something I focus on.

建议: Answer directly in the present or conditional (I would like to visit / I want to visit), then give specific reasons using linking words (because / so). Be concise and avoid repetition. Mention concrete details about the experience you expect (views, height, observation deck).

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is the tallest building in the world and offers spectacular views. I want to go to the observation deck to feel the height and see the city and coastline from above.

× 'Yeah, they are some of high builder around my home.'

✓ 'Yeah, there are some tall buildings around my home.'

'They are' + 'some of' is incorrect for introducing existence; singular/plural of "builder/buildings" is wrong. Use "there are" to show existence and plural noun "buildings". Also use adjective order: "tall buildings". Suggestion: start sentence with "Yeah, there are..." and use plural nouns with quantifiers.'

× 'They are front of front of us.'

✓ 'They are in front of us.'

'front of front of us' repeats phrase and misses preposition "in". Correct preposition for location is "in front of". Keep single occurrence: "in front of us".'

× 'They build high builders and beside us.'

✓ 'They built tall buildings beside us.'

'Builders' (people) is used instead of "buildings" (structures); verb tense/choice also incorrect: context suggests past or general action — use 'built' or 'have built'. Preposition placement: use 'beside us' after noun. Use adjective "tall" rather than "high" for buildings.'

× 'No, I don't have any desire to take photos of higher builder.'

✓ 'No, I don't have any desire to take photos of tall buildings.'

'Higher builder' is ungrammatical: wrong comparative "higher" without comparison and singular "builder" instead of plural "buildings". Use plural noun and correct adjective "tall". "Any" is fine with plural noun.'

× 'I like take photo of the sky or I am someone who admire cat cats so I take a lot of photo about cats.'

✓ 'I like taking photos of the sky, or I am someone who admires cats, so I take a lot of photos of cats.'

'Like' should be followed by verb+ing: "like taking". Plural forms: "photos" and "cats". Subject-verb agreement: "who admires" (third person singular). Use preposition "of" for photos "of cats". Also simplify wording.'

× 'But builders now I never took one.'

✓ 'But I have never taken a photo of a building.'

'Never took' with "now" is awkward; present perfect "have never taken" fits experience up to now. Use correct past participle "taken". Use singular or count noun: "a photo of a building" or "photos of buildings".'

× 'Yes, I wanted to visit Burj Khalifa 'cause everyone go there and I wanted to, I wanted to express, express experience, this feeling of being in high building and the air around my face.'

✓ 'Yes, I want to visit the Burj Khalifa because everyone goes there, and I want to experience the feeling of being in a tall building and the air on my face.'

Mixed tenses: student used past 'wanted' but question asks about a building they would like to visit (present/future intention) so use present 'want'. Use definite article 'the' before 'Burj Khalifa'. Subject-verb agreement: 'everyone goes'. Use 'experience' (verb) rather than noun repetition, correct adjective 'tall', and preposition 'on my face' for air. Remove duplicate words.'