建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, give one or two specific details (name, height, year) and use linking words if needed. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct tense and articles.

示例: Yes. There is an attractive tower near my home that was built in 2020. I like it because its glass façade reflects the sunlight and it has a public observation deck with great views.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and then one specific example. Avoid vague phrases and unfinished sentences. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct collocations (different cities, when I travel). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings when I travel. For example, last year in Barcelona I photographed Gaudí’s Sagrada Família because its shapes and colours were unique and photogenic.

建议: Remove hesitations and add a specific reason and one detail about the building to show knowledge. Begin with a clear statement, then use a linking word to explain why. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I would love to visit the Forbidden City in Beijing because it is a historic imperial palace. I want to see its traditional architecture and the famous Hall of Supreme Harmony to learn more about Chinese history.

建议: Start with a concise direct answer, then give one clear reason with a specific detail or example. Replace filler words and general lists with a coherent explanation using linking words such as because or so.

示例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building because I prefer being close to nature. For example, I enjoy having a small garden and being near a lake where I can walk with birds and other wildlife.

× Yes there are yes, most attractive tower near my home which was built around the 2020 and I really like it.

✓ Yes, there is a very attractive tower near my home that was built around 2020, and I really like it.

The original used 'are' incorrectly with singular 'tower' (There be issue). Use 'there is' for singular nouns. Also use 'a' or 'very' to modify 'tower' and 'that' as a relative pronoun. Remove 'the' before year and 'around 2020' is correct. Use commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 3

× Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings, especially when I'm traveling around the different city and see different buildings.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings, especially when I'm traveling around different cities and seeing different buildings.

The sentence needed 'cities' (plural) to match 'different' and the second verb should be in -ing form ('seeing') after 'when' to indicate simultaneous action (Verb + -ing form). Also drop the definite article before 'different city' (Incorrect use of prepositions/articles) but primary correction fits rule 8. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× It is really exciting and interesting when I see the building. I never.

✓ It is really exciting and interesting when I see buildings. I never get tired of taking their photos.

Original is fragmented and unclear ('I never.' is incomplete). Fix by making a complete sentence explaining what 'never' refers to. Also pluralize 'buildings' for general reference. This addresses sentence structure errors and incomplete sentence (Sentence structure errors). Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes. I really want to uh, visit this uh, Forbidden City in Beijing.

✓ Yes. I really want to visit the Forbidden City in Beijing.

Remove filler 'uh' and use the definite article 'the' with 'Forbidden City' (well-known place). The verb 'want to visit' is correct; no present participle needed. This correction addresses unnecessary filler and article use (Verb in the present participle form label used for minimal change). Grammar problem type ID: 10

× It is one of the most famous buildings in China and uh, almost all people know it and uh, I really want to visit it.

✓ It is one of the most famous buildings in China, and almost everyone knows it, so I really want to visit it.

'Almost all people' is unnatural; use 'almost everyone'. Add a conjunction to connect ideas and smooth the sentence. This falls under incorrect use of quantifiers. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× To be honest, I do not like it. Uh, because I love the grass, the lake, the sea.

✓ To be honest, I do not like living in tall buildings because I love grass, lakes, and the sea.

The original has a sentence fragment starting with 'Because'. Combine into one sentence and use 'living in tall buildings' to make the idea explicit. Use plural nouns for general preferences and remove 'the' before 'grass'. This uses present participle 'living' appropriately. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I prefer my building near the nature and the cute animals.

✓ I prefer my building to be near nature and close to animals.

'Near the nature' is incorrect; use 'near nature' or 'close to nature'. Also 'the cute animals' is odd—'animals' or 'wildlife' is better. Rephrase to 'to be near nature and close to animals' to correct preposition and article use. Grammar problem type ID: 11