建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (ums/uhs), correct articles and singular/plural (a suburb, not a suburbs), and organize supporting details with linking words (for example, "because"). Limit to 2–4 sentences. Include one or two specific details (e.g., nearby features).

示例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in a suburb surrounded by mountains and jungle, and a river runs close by, so the area is mostly natural rather than urban.

建议: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary. Remove fillers, correct mispronounced words (buildings), and use linking words (however, because, so) to explain frequency and reason. Give a brief example of what you photograph.

示例: Yes, I take photos of buildings occasionally because most of them here are ordinary. However, I photograph modern or unusual buildings that look like works of art, such as a glass-fronted museum downtown.

建议: Provide a focused response and avoid irrelevant details. Use correct names (Burj Khalifa, Eiffel Tower) and grammar (I want to see). Give a short reason why you want to visit one or two buildings and avoid mentioning unrelated tasks like IELTS unless it directly answers the question. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa and the Eiffel Tower because I am fascinated by impressive architecture. For example, I want to see the view from the top of the Burj Khalifa to experience how skyscrapers shape a city's skyline.

建议: State your opinion clearly and use correct expressions (afraid of heights). Avoid repetition and fillers. Give one or two brief supporting reasons or an alternative preference, using linking words like "because" or "so." Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid of heights and it would make me feel anxious. I prefer a low-rise house close to the ground where I feel more comfortable and relaxed.

× No, and there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a suburbs, umm uh and just mountains and jungles are near uh, the location that I live and umm also the river is near to me.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in the suburbs, and there are only mountains and jungles near the location where I live, and also a river is close to me.

The student used 'a suburbs' which is incorrect article+noun agreement; 'suburbs' is plural and requires no indefinite article: use 'the suburbs' for a specific area. 'Just mountains and jungles are near' is awkward; use 'there are only mountains and jungles near' to include the verb 'there are' (There be issue and sentence structure). 'the location that I live' is unnatural; use 'the location where I live' or 'where I live'. 'the river is near to me' is unnatural; use 'a river is close to me' or 'the river is near me'. Suggestions: use correct article with plural nouns ('the suburbs'), include 'there are' for existence statements about plural items, use 'where' for relative clauses of place, and prefer 'near me' or 'close to me' rather than 'near to me'.

× Yes, but uh, just a few Billings because umm, all of them are not beautiful and so umm, so just a few of them are are modernized and beautiful like art. So if I see them.

✓ Yes, but just a few buildings, because not all of them are beautiful; only a few are modernized and as beautiful as art, so I take photos of them when I see them.

Multiple errors: 'Billings' is a spelling error but treated here as word choice; 'all of them are not beautiful' is grammatically awkward—use 'not all of them are beautiful' (sentence structure). 'Beautiful like art' should be 'as beautiful as art' (incorrect comparison object). Also 'So if I see them.' is an incomplete sentence; expand to 'so I take photos of them when I see them.' Suggestions: use 'not all' instead of 'all...not', use 'as...as' for comparisons, and complete fragments into full sentences.

× Yes, actually I wanna see uh Burj Khalifa, umm Milattao and Mila Towel and umm the tall building in Paris. I wanna see all of them. But I uh, had when I uh, get a grade on IELTS after.

✓ Yes, actually I want to see the Burj Khalifa, Milad Tower, and the tall building in Paris. I want to see all of them, but I will go after I get my IELTS score.

Multiple issues: 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. Missing definite article 'the Burj Khalifa' and correct building name spelling 'Milad Tower'. The clause 'But I uh, had when I uh, get a grade on IELTS after' mixes tenses and incorrect verbs; use future plan 'I will go after I get my IELTS score' (future tense and correct noun 'IELTS score'). Suggestions: use standard forms 'want to', include 'the' for specific famous buildings, correct proper names, and use 'after I get my IELTS score' to show sequence.

× No, because I'm afraid of the high so I can't live in the tall buildings and they made me scarier and feel, uh, stressed.

✓ No, because I'm afraid of heights, so I can't live in tall buildings; they make me more scared and feel stressed.

Errors: 'afraid of the high' should be 'afraid of heights' (idiomatic noun). 'the tall buildings' can be simplified to 'tall buildings' (article error). 'they made me scarier' is wrong verb tense and incorrect comparative form; use present simple 'they make me more scared' or 'they scare me' and 'feel stressed' remains but combine with correct verb. Suggestions: use idiomatic expressions ('afraid of heights'), ensure subject-verb agreement in present simple for general truths ('they make' not 'they made' if it's habitual), and use 'more scared' or 'scare me' instead of 'scarier'.