建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct small grammar issues (e.g. “my area is a rural area” → “my area is rural”, “the tourist buildings” → “a famous tourist building”).

示例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area. However, I live in Osaka city, which has many skyscrapers, such as Abeno Harukas, a famous tourist building and the tallest in Japan.

建议: Use a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating words. Give a concise reason and one specific example with linking words (e.g. 'however' or 'but'). Correct grammar: say 'I usually don’t' and 'ancient' once. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: I usually don’t take photos of buildings because many of them look similar. However, I will take pictures if a building is unusual or very old, for example an ancient temple with intricate carvings.

建议: Give a direct answer then add concise supporting details. Avoid hesitations and repeated words. Use correct facts and grammar (e.g. 'the tallest building in the world, about 800 metres high' and 'I would like to see it').

示例: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world, about 800 metres high, and I’m curious to see its observation deck and the city views.

建议: Answer directly and give two clear reasons with linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Correct grammar and remove repetitions (e.g. 'takes a lot of time to get home', 'difficult to evacuate'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because it often takes a long time to get to my flat, especially in busy lifts. Also, I’d worry about evacuating quickly during an emergency.

× There are no tall buildings near my home because my area is rural area compared to the city center so there are no tall buildings.

✓ There are no tall buildings near my home because my area is a rural area compared to the city center, so there are no tall buildings.

Missing article 'a' before 'rural area' is a singular count noun; use 'a rural area'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× But I live in Osaka so there are a lot of tall buildings in Osaka, for example Ave. Harukas which is the tourist buildings in Japan.

✓ But I live in Osaka, so there are a lot of tall buildings there, for example Abeno Harukas, which is a tourist attraction in Japan.

Use 'there' to avoid repeating 'Osaka'. 'Ave. Harukas' is incorrect; the building is Abeno Harukas. 'the tourist buildings' is wrong: use singular 'a tourist attraction' to describe one notable building.

× I usually not because I think the buildings are the same atmosphere as as everywhere's building, so I usually don't take a picture, but especially the buildings are really unique or really an ancient ancient.

✓ I usually don't, because I think the buildings have the same atmosphere as buildings everywhere, so I usually don't take pictures. But if a building is really unique or very old, I will take a photo.

Missing auxiliary 'do' for negation: use 'don't'. Word order and phrasing: 'same atmosphere as buildings everywhere' is correct. Use plural 'pictures' for general habit. 'Really an ancient ancient' is ungrammatical; use 'very old' or 'ancient'. Use conditional 'if' and future/modal 'will' for intention.

× So in that case I will take the photo.

✓ So in that case I will take a photo.

Use 'a photo' rather than 'the photo' because it is not a specific previously mentioned photo; count noun requires appropriate article.

× Yes, I would like to visit the building which is located in Dubai, maybe because I've heard that the building is the tallest buildings in the world, which is an 800, about 800 meters.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the building located in Dubai, maybe because I've heard that it is the tallest building in the world, about 800 meters tall.

Mismatch between singular and plural: use 'the tallest building' (singular). Also simplify phrasing: 'it is ... about 800 meters tall.' Remove redundant words.

× So it is really tall. So I would like I, I would like to see them.

✓ So it is really tall. I would like to see it.

Pronoun must agree in number with 'building' (singular), so use 'it' not 'them'. Also remove stutter 'I, I'.

× Actually, I don't like it because if I live in the tall buildings, it's really, it takes a lot of time to to arrive the my home, my house.

✓ Actually, I don't like it because if I lived in a tall building, it would take a lot of time to get to my home.

Conditional meaning requires past tense in the 'if' clause ('if I lived') and modal 'would' in the result. Use singular 'a tall building' for a hypothetical general case. Use 'get to my home' instead of 'arrive the my home' and remove duplicated words.

× So I think I don't like it.

✓ So I don't think I would like that.

Rephrase to match hypothetical preference about living in tall buildings: 'I don't think I would like that' is more natural than present simple 'I don't like it' in this context.

× And also when the disaster happens, we are difficult to evacuate from the.

✓ Also, if a disaster happens, it would be difficult for us to evacuate from a tall building.

Original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical ('evacuate from the.'). Use conditional 'if a disaster happens' and restructure: 'it would be difficult for us to evacuate from a tall building.' Use 'for us' as the subject of 'be difficult' and include the object 'a tall building'.