建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and give one or two specific details using linking words. For example, state whether there are tall buildings, then add where they are and why they are noticeable.

示例: Yes, there are several tall, modern buildings near my home because I live in the city centre. For instance, a new office tower and a glass apartment block dominate the skyline, which makes the area feel very contemporary.

建议: Give a clear yes/no plus a brief reason and one specific example. Remove hesitation and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'when I travel abroad' and 'impressive atmosphere'). Use a linking phrase to connect idea and example.

示例: I sometimes do. When I travel abroad, I enjoy photographing interesting buildings because they create an impressive atmosphere; for example, I always take pictures of historic cathedrals or modern skyscrapers to remember the trip.

建议: Be specific about the building and why you want to visit it. Use correct nouns and linking words to explain purpose and comparison. Avoid vague names; if unsure, describe the style and what you hope to learn or compare.

示例: Yes. I would like to visit Tibetan-style temples, especially the ones in Lhasa, because I want to study their architecture and take photos. Visiting them would allow me to compare their design with traditional Mongolian temples and learn about cultural differences.

建议: Reply clearly and give two concise reasons with proper linking words. Correct inaccurate or unclear phrases (e.g., 'illegal out' is unclear). Use vocabulary like 'prefer', 'detached house', 'privacy', and 'noise'.

示例: No, I would prefer to live in a house because it offers more privacy and comfort. Also, houses usually have fewer shared walls and neighbours, so they tend to be quieter than tall apartment buildings.

× Uh, there are a lot of buildings, uh, because this, uh, central area of, uh, city, then this, uh, buildings are modern style, uh, so you can find new things this area.

✓ Uh, there are a lot of buildings because this central area of the city has modern-style buildings, so you can find new things in this area.

Errors: plural and article usage and word order. 'this central area of city' needs the definite article 'the city'. 'this buildings' is incorrect because 'this' does not agree with plural 'buildings'; use 'these' or rephrase. 'are modern style' should be 'has modern-style buildings' or 'are modern in style'. 'in this area' requires preposition 'in'. Suggestion: use correct articles ('the'), match demonstratives with number ('these' with plural), hyphenate compound adjective 'modern-style', and include necessary prepositions.

× Yes and no. Uh, when I visit in abroad, I like, uh, take photos of building because this gives, uh, impressing, uh, mood and uh.

✓ Yes and no. When I visit abroad, I like to take photos of buildings because they create an impressive mood.

Errors: incorrect verb form and preposition use. 'visit in abroad' should be 'visit abroad' (no 'in'). After 'like' use the infinitive 'to take' (verb + to) or gerund 'taking' — here 'to take' is natural. 'photos of building' needs plural 'buildings'. 'this gives impressing mood' is ungrammatical; use 'they create an impressive mood' or 'it gives an impressive feeling'. Suggestion: remove extra filler words, use correct prepositions, choose correct verb form after 'like', and use appropriate adjectives/adverbs ('impressive' not 'impressing').

× Yes I have some buildings especially in Tibut style temples. One day I will visit in Montebott then I will look these buildings and take photos then also it gives me compare Mongolian.

✓ Yes, I have some buildings I especially like, such as temples in the Tibut style. One day I will visit Montebott; I will see these buildings and take photos, and I will also compare them with Mongolian architecture.

Errors: adjective usage and sentence structure. 'Tibut style temples' needs article and clearer phrasing: 'temples in the Tibut style'. 'visit in Montebott' should be 'visit Montebott' (no 'in'). 'I will look these buildings' is incorrect; use 'see these buildings'. 'it gives me compare Mongolian' is ungrammatical — intended meaning is 'I will compare them with Mongolian'. Suggestion: use clearer noun phrases, correct prepositions, appropriate verbs ('see' rather than 'look' in this context), and a correct comparative structure ('compare X with Y').

× No, because I prepared to live in a house because this is illegal out and more comfortable If I live in those building there are a lot of neighbors.

✓ No, because I prefer to live in a house; it is more comfortable and living in those buildings would be crowded with many neighbors.

Errors: article and verb choice and sentence structure. 'I prepared to live' is incorrect — likely 'I prefer to live' or 'I am prepared to live'. 'this is illegal out' is unclear and ungrammatical; possibly meant 'houses are legal outside' but natural response: 'it is more comfortable'. 'those building' needs plural 'buildings' and an article or determiners. Sentence run-on: separate ideas and use conditional/modal 'would be' for hypothetical. Suggestion: use correct verb ('prefer'), correct plural forms, and restructure into clear clauses; use 'crowded with many neighbors' to express having many neighbors.