建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve accuracy, conciseness and correct minor vocabulary/grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct spelling (“neighborhood”, “Skykepper”?) and reduce length to 2–3 sentences. Use a linking word when adding a detail and give one specific example (e.g., a well-known tower or mall).

示例: Yes — there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. For example, a cluster of modern office towers surrounds the Central Mall, and the view from my building’s windows makes the area feel lively and contemporary.

建议: This answer is natural and relevant but could be tightened and made slightly more specific. Use linking words (e.g., “because” or “so”) to connect ideas, correct small phrasing issues (“on social media” not “the social media”), and add one concrete example of a memorable shot.

示例: Yes — I often photograph buildings when I travel because I enjoy contrasts between modern and historical architecture. For instance, I photographed an old cathedral in Prague last year and later shared the best shots on social media to remember the trip.

建议: Correct word choice and be concise. Replace incorrect adjective (“ignoble” means dishonorable) with appropriate words like “iconic” or “famous.” Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 supporting reasons using a linking word. Avoid redundancy.

示例: Yes — I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower because it is an iconic landmark and offers great views of Paris. Also, it appears in many films and photographs, which makes it especially appealing to me.

建议: Fix grammar and choose more natural collocations. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because”, “and”). Replace vague phrase “modern flexibility” with concrete benefits (e.g., amenities, elevators, parking).

示例: Yes — I would like to live in a tall building because the views from the top floors are fantastic, especially at night. In addition, many high-rises offer good security, on-site gyms and convenient parking, which would make daily life easier.

× Since I'm in the city, my near hood has lots of high rises, apartments, office towers and even a shopping mall.

✓ Since I'm in the city, my neighborhood has lots of high-rises, apartments, office towers, and even a shopping mall.

The word 'near hood' is a misspelling and incorrect compound form; the correct word is 'neighborhood'. Also compound nouns like 'high-rises' are commonly hyphenated; include a comma before 'and' for correct list punctuation. Suggestion: learn common compound nouns and use a spellchecker to catch spacing errors.

× In the Skykepper the view from a window includes several tall buildings which makes the area feel really lively and modern.

✓ In the Skykepper, the view from a window includes several tall buildings, which make the area feel really lively and modern.

There are two issues: missing comma after the introductory phrase 'In the Skykepper', and a subject-verb agreement issue (plural 'several tall buildings' requires 'make' not 'makes'). The relative clause refers to 'several tall buildings' (plural), so use plural verb 'make'. Also add commas to set off the nonrestrictive clause.

× I usually share these photos on the social media and it's a great way to remember the places I have visited.

✓ I usually share these photos on social media, and it's a great way to remember the places I have visited.

'Social media' is a general concept and normally used without the definite article 'the'. Also add a comma before the conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to platforms or mediums in general (e.g., 'on television', 'on social media').

× It's such an ignoble landmark and I think it would be amazing to see it in person, especially because it's so romantic and has appeared in so many films and photos.

✓ It's such an iconic landmark, and I think it would be amazing to see it in person, especially because it's so romantic and has appeared in so many films and photos.

The adjective 'ignoble' means dishonorable or shameful, which is the wrong meaning here. The correct adjective is 'iconic' to express well-known significance. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: check word meanings in a dictionary to avoid using false friends.

× Yes, I love to live in tall building.

✓ Yes, I would love to live in a tall building.

'tall building' is singular but the sentence structure and article are incorrect. We need an article 'a' before singular countable noun: 'a tall building'. Also in this context 'would love' is more natural for expressing desire. Suggestion: remember to use articles with singular countable nouns and choose appropriate modal (would) for preferences.

× The view from the top floors, especially at night when the city lights are on, must be amazing.

✓ The view from the top floors, especially at night when the city lights are on, must be amazing.

This sentence is grammatically correct as written; no correction needed. It is included for completeness to show no change is required.

× Plus, these buildings often have better security and modern flexibility, which makes life more comfortable and convenient.

✓ Plus, these buildings often have better security and more modern facilities, which make life more comfortable and convenient.

'Modern flexibility' is an odd collocation; likely intended 'modern facilities' or 'modern amenities'. Also 'which' refers to 'security and more modern facilities' (plural), so the verb should be 'make' rather than 'makes'. Suggestion: choose collocations that are natural (facilities, amenities) and ensure verb agrees with compound subjects.