建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Сосредоточьтесь на ясности и грамматике: используйте правильные формы глаголов и простую структуру. Начните с темы, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных деталей, используя связки (for example, one of them, the other). Избегайте оборванных предложений и лишних слов.

示例: Yes, there are two tall buildings near my home. For example, one is a newly finished IT office building, and the other is a residential block built for company employees. Both buildings look very modern and clean.

建议: Улучшите связность и лексику: используйте связки (if, because, so) и точные прилагательные (modern, historic, unusual). Постройте ответ из 2–3 предложений, избегайте повторов и закончите мысль грамматически правильно.

示例: Yes, I often photograph unusual buildings. If a building is very modern or historically significant, I take pictures because I like collecting memorable photos of unique architecture.

建议: Уберите междометия (uh) и сделайте ответ короче и структурированнее: тема + причина + пример. Используйте связки (because, for example) и конкретизируйте: назовите один-два здания или города, чтобы ответ был более содержательным.

示例: I don't have a single building in mind, because I enjoy visiting famous architecture worldwide. For example, I would like to see the Colosseum in Rome and the Burj Khalifa in Dubai since I admire both ancient and modern structures.

建议: Сделайте заявление чётким и логичным: начните с прямого ответа («Yes»), затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины или места. Исправьте порядок слов и уберите повторения. Используйте связку for example или because для пояснения.

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building. For example, I would enjoy an apartment in London for the city views, and I would also like to stay in a tall building in Mecca to see the city and the holy sites from above.

× Yes, there are two tall buildings nearby my home that builders the recently finished IT building.

✓ Yes, there are two tall buildings near my home; the builders recently finished an IT building.

The preposition 'nearby' is used as an adverb; use 'near' + noun for location. Word order and article use were incorrect: 'the builders recently finished an IT building' places the adverb 'recently' correctly and uses the indefinite article 'an' before 'IT building'. Also use punctuation to separate clauses.

× One of them is flat and the other one is comfort builder builded for a company.

✓ One of them is an apartment, and the other was comfortably built for a company.

The original mixes noun/adjective forms incorrectly. 'Flat' is British for apartment; to describe a building use 'an apartment' or 'a flat'. 'Comfort' is a noun; use the adverb 'comfortably' to modify 'built'. 'Builded' is nonstandard; past participle is 'built'. Also ensure articles: 'an apartment'.

× They looks very new and.

✓ They look very new.

Subject 'they' requires the base verb form 'look' (plural). The sentence was also incomplete; remove the trailing conjunction and finish the sentence.

× Yes, I take photos of not usual buildings, but if it is new and modern building or it is very old ancient building, I will take a photo of them because I like something unusual unique things.

✓ Yes, I take photos of unusual buildings; if a building is new and modern or very old and historic, I will take a photo because I like unusual, unique things.

Use 'of' with plural noun 'buildings' is fine but 'not usual' should be 'unusual'. Use articles and adjective order: 'a building' when referring generically; combine adjectives with correct word choice: 'historic' or 'ancient'. Avoid plural mismatch: 'a photo' singular with 'them' plural; better to keep singular/plural consistent. Also 'something unusual unique things' is redundant; use 'unusual, unique things'.

× That's why I like have a memorable photos on my.

✓ That's why I like to have memorable photos.

'Like to have' requires the infinitive 'to have'. 'Photos' is plural so omit the article 'a' and drop the unnecessary '- on my' fragment. If intending location, add 'on my phone' or similar.

× I don't have one specific type of building to visit, but I like to travel and see, uh, all of the buildings that are popular in the world and see, uh, them with my own eyes because I like traveling.

✓ I don't have one specific type of building I want to visit, but I like to travel and see all the buildings that are famous around the world with my own eyes because I enjoy traveling.

Remove filler words 'uh' and tighten structure. Use 'famous around the world' instead of 'popular in the world'. Avoid repeating 'see' and 'them'; combine clauses for clarity.

× I like, uh, seeing ancient and modern buildings. They are.

✓ I enjoy seeing ancient and modern buildings.

Remove filler 'uh' and the incomplete sentence 'They are.' Finish thought or delete fragment; the corrected sentence is complete and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I want to live in tall building and once one it is in London I would like to have a tall building accommodation there and the second is I want to live in tall building in Mecca to see the Mecca from the from above with my own eyes it.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building. First, in London I would like to have accommodation in a tall building, and second, I want to live in a tall building in Mecca to see Mecca from above with my own eyes.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'tall building'. Clarify 'first' and 'second' to list preferences. 'Accommodation' does not need 'a tall building accommodation'—use 'accommodation in a tall building'. Remove duplicate words 'the from' and trailing 'it'. Capitalization of place names maintained. Ensure sentence boundaries.