建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Javobingizni sodda va aniq qilib boshlang: mavzu gapini (topic sentence) toʻgʻri va grammatik jihatdan toʻgʻri ifoda eting. Ikkinchi jumlada qoʻshimcha tafsilotlar bering, lekin keraksiz takrorlardan saqlaning. Masalan: birlik va ko‘plik, artikl va to‘g‘ri fe’l shakllariga eʼtibor qarating (a/are, is/are), va bog‘lovchi so‘zlardan (for example, because, and) foydalaning.

示例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. One of them is a modern shopping market that is always busy. It houses many shops selling a wide range of goods, so many people visit it every day.

建议: Javobni strukturaga keltiring: avvalo qisqa toʻgʻri javob, keyin aniq misol va sababni keltiring. Feʼl zamonlari va artikllarni toʻgʻri ishlating (I love taking photos, when I went to…), takrorlarni olib tashlang va joy nomlarini aniqlik bilan ayting.

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of buildings, especially historical ones. For example, when I visited Bohra City last year, I photographed the Ark and an old house called the Love House, which gives me great memories.

建议: Bu javob juda chalkash va noaniq. Birinchi gapda aniq binoning nomini ayting, soʻngra nega borishni xohlayotganingizni qisqacha va mantiqan tushuntiring. Keraksiz toʻxtash va takrorlardan qoching. Ingliz tilida aniq soʻzlarni tanlang (e.g., "ancient fortress", "stone walls", "mysterious atmosphere").

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the ancient fortress called Summer Fort. It has massive stone walls and towers, and I think its mysterious atmosphere would help me imagine life in the past.

建议: Javobni aniq boshla: qisqa toʻgʻri javob (Yes/No) va tez sababni bering. Keyin bir yoki ikki qoʻshimcha tafsilot bilan fikringizni kengaytiring. Grammatik xatolarga eʼtibor bering (live vs leave, it takes, peak -> top/floor) va ortiqcha soʻzlardan saqlaning.

示例: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because it would be inconvenient for me. For instance, taking the elevator every day might be time-consuming, and I prefer a smaller apartment that feels cozier and easier to maintain.

× There are tall building in my home.

✓ There are tall buildings near my home.

'Building' should be plural as 'tall' and the verb 'are' indicate more than one. Also 'in my home' is unnatural; use 'near my home' to answer the question about nearby buildings.

× It's a market, uh, it's a very busy and very. Modern market there are many kind of things that is many people need.

✓ It's a market. It's a very busy and modern market; there are many kinds of things that many people need.

Use articles and punctuation: 'a very busy and modern market.' 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' when preceded by 'many.' Change 'is' to appropriate plural verbs 'are'. Ensure sentence breaks and connectors to improve clarity.

× Yes, of course I love the taking photos especially taking the historical photos of historical building.

✓ Yes, of course I love taking photos, especially of historical buildings.

'Love the taking' is incorrect; use 'love taking' (verb + -ing). 'Photos of historical building' requires plural 'buildings' and include 'of' for correct prepositional phrase.

× I I remember when I go to the Bohra city, I take the ark photos of Arkham and love house and some of the historical please because it's give me a good memory.

✓ I remember when I went to Bohra City, I took photos of Arkham, Love House, and some historical places because they gave me good memories.

Use past tense 'went' and 'took' for completed actions. Place names should be capitalized properly. 'Please' is wrong word; use 'places.' 'It's give' should be past 'they gave' and 'memory' plural 'memories' fits better.

× Yes, of course I love the go to the customer account uh summer account uh there are the rigs there are rigstones buildings uh it's a very beautiful and very high circle and very mystery uh when I go to the there uh, I really feel in the history and I when I.

✓ Yes, of course I would love to go to the castle account, the summer account; there are ruins and rockstone buildings. They are very beautiful, very tall, and mysterious. When I go there, I really feel like I am in history.

Replace incorrect 'love the go' with 'would love to go' (modal + base verb). The original has many unclear words; interpret probable meanings: 'ruins' and 'rockstone buildings.' Use plural verbs 'are' and adjectives 'tall' and 'mysterious.' Use 'feel like I am in history' for natural expression.

× Unfortunately no because it's not convenient for me and in my opinion I want to leave the apartment but it's not very tall because it's takes a long time to reach on the peak and in my opinion I just like a small building.

✓ Unfortunately, no, because it's not convenient for me. In my opinion I want to live in an apartment, but not a very tall one, because it takes a long time to reach the top. I prefer a small building.

Use 'live' not 'leave.' Correct use of articles: 'an apartment' and 'a very tall one.' 'It's takes' is wrong; use 'it takes.' Use 'top' instead of 'peak' for buildings. Split into sentences for clarity.