建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more concise and natural by combining ideas into 2–3 coherent sentences, use a clear topic sentence, and avoid minor grammatical slips (e.g., “Seems I'm in the city” → “I live in the city”). Add one specific detail to make the answer more vivid (e.g., a landmark or street).

示例: I live in the city, so there are many tall buildings near my home, mostly high‑rise apartments and office towers. From my window I can see several glass skyscrapers, which makes the area feel lively and modern, especially at night when the lights are on.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and then give one specific reason using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “however”). You can add a short example of a situation to support your point and show vocabulary control (e.g., ‘perspective’, ‘composition’). Keep it to two sentences to meet the natural length limit.

示例: I don't usually photograph buildings because I find them difficult to capture—tall structures make it hard to get a good angle and pleasing composition. For example, when I tried shooting a cathedral, I couldn't include the whole facade without distorting the perspective.

建议: Good, clear answer with a topic sentence and supporting detail. To improve further, add a brief reason or what you expect to see using a linking word (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘so’) and keep it within two sentences. This makes the response more informative and natural.

示例: I'd like to visit the higher floors of Taipei 101 because I want to see the panoramic view of the city from above. I've walked around the building several times, but I haven't been inside to experience the observation deck.

建议: Make the sentence more natural and correct small language errors (e.g., ‘feel fresh breath’ → ‘get fresh air’). Use a topic sentence then one clear reason introduced by a linking word like ‘because’ and add a concise specific detail (e.g., morning view or quiet at height). Avoid informal fillers like ‘totally’.

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy getting fresh air and having a wide view of the city. For instance, in the morning I imagine watching the sunrise from a high balcony.

× Seems I'm in the city.

✓ It seems I'm in the city.

This sentence is missing a subject; beginning with 'Seems' is informal and elliptical. Add the subject 'It' to form a complete sentence: 'It seems I'm in the city.' This improves sentence structure and clarity.

× My neighborhood has lots of high rise apartments and office towers.

✓ My neighborhood has lots of high-rise apartments and office towers.

The error is hyphenation and word form rather than strict grammar, but 'high rise' should be a compound adjective 'high-rise' before a noun. Use the hyphen to correctly form the compound adjective: 'high-rise apartments.' This follows standard adjective formation rules.

× The view from my window includes several tall buildings which makes the area feel really lively and modern.

✓ The view from my window includes several tall buildings, which make the area feel really lively and modern.

Relative clause agreement: 'several tall buildings' is plural, so the verb in the relative clause should be plural ('make' not 'makes'). Also add a comma before 'which' because the clause is non-restrictive.

× I enjoy keeping the windows open which allows me to feel fresh breath and have a great view of the city.

✓ I enjoy keeping the windows open, which allows me to feel a fresh breeze and have a great view of the city.

Two issues: 1) 'which allows' refers to the whole idea 'keeping the windows open' (singular idea), so 'allows' is correct; retain it. 2) 'fresh breath' is incorrect collocation; use 'a fresh breeze' or 'fresh air.' Also add a comma before 'which' for a non-restrictive clause. The corrected sentence uses the proper noun phrase and punctuation.