建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and fill words, use correct grammar (singular/plural, prepositions), and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, I can see a cluster of modern high-rise apartments and office towers from my living room window. In addition, one quiet residential tower stands close by, which makes the area feel dense but well-developed.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation words, and provide a reason with a linking phrase. Use more natural phrasing and avoid negative-sounding expressions like "wasting my time"; instead explain preference politely.

示例: Not really — I'm not very interested in photography. When I see a beautiful scene, I prefer to enjoy it in person rather than take pictures; for example, I often pause to look at sunsets instead of photographing them.

建议: Answer directly and avoid vague or confusing references. Name specific buildings or landmarks and explain briefly why, using linking words for clarity. Correct grammar: say "a building in Hollywood" or name a landmark, and avoid unnecessary hesitations.

示例: Not in my town, but I would love to visit New York City, especially the Empire State Building. I want to go there because I admire its architecture and the view from the observation deck, which would be great for sightseeing.

建议: Respond clearly and avoid repetition. Start with a direct sentence, then add one or two specific details (floor number, advantages or disadvantages) using linking words. Remove filler words like "uh" and improve sentence structure.

示例: Yes, I live in a tall building — my apartment is on the 20th floor of a 25-storey block. Living high up gives me great city views, but it can be inconvenient when the elevator is busy.

× Yes, there is a quiet tall building and near where I live.

✓ Yes, there is a quiet tall building near where I live.

The idiomatic structure is 'there is/are + [noun phrase] + location'. The original has an extra 'and' that disrupts the sentence and makes the clause ungrammatical. Remove 'and' to correctly link the noun phrase and the location. Also consider adjective order: 'quiet, tall building' is acceptable, or 'a quiet, tall building'.

× Since I'm living in a city, when I'm looking out from the window I see many modern and high rise building from the window and from another window I'm.

✓ Since I live in a city, when I look out of the window I see many modern and high-rise buildings from one window and from another window I see others.

Use simple present for habitual facts: 'I live' and 'I look'. 'High rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as an adjective and the noun must be plural 'buildings' to match 'many' (singular/plural issue). The original also had an incomplete clause 'and from another window I'm.' Complete it with 'I see others' or similar. Use 'look out of' or 'look out from' is less common; 'look out of the window' is natural.

× No, not really. I'm not a big fan of, uh, photography.

✓ No, not really. I'm not a big fan of photography.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable aside from filler words. The correction removes unnecessary hesitation 'uh' and redundant punctuation. No modal error actually; classified here because 'not a big fan of' is a correct fixed expression and keeping filler words interferes with clarity. Keep concise: 'I'm not a big fan of photography.'

× Uh, when I, uh, when I'm seeing, uh, very beautiful and amazing scene, I prefer to enjoy the moment.

✓ When I see a very beautiful or amazing scene, I prefer to enjoy the moment.

Use simple present 'I see' for general/habitual actions rather than present continuous 'I'm seeing'. Also 'a scene' needs an article and 'very beautiful and amazing' is redundant; using 'very beautiful or amazing' or 'a very beautiful scene' is clearer. Remove filler words.

× I'm not wasting my time by taking photo of that.

✓ I don't waste my time taking a photo of it.

For habitual actions use simple present 'I don't waste'. Use gerund 'taking' after 'waste my time' without the preposition 'by' (both are possible but shorter without 'by'). 'Photo' needs an article 'a photo' and 'that' is better as 'it' to refer to the scene. Word order and verb tense corrected.

× Uh, in my town, not really, but I like to visit the New York City and a building for Hollywood.

✓ In my town, not really, but I would like to visit New York City and Hollywood.

Do not use the definite article 'the' with 'New York City'. The phrase 'a building for Hollywood' is unclear; likely intended 'Hollywood' as a place. Use 'would like to' for desire and remove article. 'There be' classification used because of article misuse and existential phrasing.

× I really like to visit that area by myself.

✓ I would really like to visit that area by myself.

To express a desire, 'would like to' is more natural than 'like to' in this context. Alternatively 'I really want to visit' is acceptable. The original is understandable but using 'would' matches prior corrected sentence and sounds more polite.

× I do live in a tall building.

✓ I live in a tall building.

Adding the auxiliary 'do' in affirmative present simple is unnecessary unless used for emphasis. Use the simple present 'I live' for a factual statement. Keep concise.

× Uh, my apartment is in the 20th floor of uh, the umm, of the building that has a 25th floor in it.

✓ My apartment is on the 20th floor of a building that has 25 floors.

Use 'on the 20th floor' not 'in the 20th floor'. Use 'a building that has 25 floors' rather than 'the building that has a 25th floor in it' which is wordy and incorrect. Also '25th floor' vs '25 floors': if the building has 25 floors, say '25 floors'. If you mean 'the building has a 25th floor', that is redundant. Correct preposition and article usage.

× Uh, actually I'm living in a high rise apartment in the city.

✓ Actually, I live in a high-rise apartment in the city.

For a permanent or long-term situation use simple present 'I live' rather than present continuous 'I'm living'. Hyphenate 'high-rise' when used as an adjective and keep 'in the city' for location. Remove filler 'uh'.