建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “community” used twice) and unnecessary filler sounds like “uh.”

示例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small suburban community made up mostly of two- or three-storey houses, so people generally prefer low-rise homes for privacy and a quieter atmosphere.

建议: Give a brief topic sentence and then add a specific reason or example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating the word “taking.”

示例: No, I rarely photograph buildings. Instead, I prefer portraits and nature photography because I enjoy capturing people’s expressions and the colors of landscapes — for example, I often shoot sunsets in nearby parks.

建议: Make the response grammatically tighter and avoid filler words. Provide one clear reason and one specific detail about what you would do there. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” correctly.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is one of the tallest buildings in the world. I would love to go to the observation deck to enjoy the panoramic views and take photos with my friends.

建议: Open with a direct statement, then give a clear reason and a concise supporting detail. Fix grammar (e.g., “since I was a kid” and “two- or three-storey houses”) and avoid vague comparisons like “cozier than buildings.”

示例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because I have a fear of heights. Since I grew up in two- or three-storey houses, I prefer smaller homes that feel cozier and more comfortable.

× we have two to three story houses.

✓ we have two- to three-story houses.

Use hyphens for compound adjectival numbers before a noun and maintain plural 'houses'. The correct form is 'two- to three-story houses' to indicate a range. Alternatively 'two- or three-story houses' works.

× It's a community.

✓ It's a community.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but can be improved by adding an article for clarity only if specifying: 'It's a small community.' No change required; included for completeness.

× I do not take photos of buildings because I love taking portraits and taking pictures of nature instead, rather than of buildings.

✓ I do not take photos of buildings because I prefer taking portraits and pictures of nature instead of buildings.

Use 'prefer' with gerund forms and the comparative structure 'instead of' rather than 'instead, rather than of'. Removing redundancy ('taking' repeated) improves fluency.

× Uh, I want to visit is because it's one of the tallest building in the world and since I lived where we didn't have any tall buildings, I definitely would love to go there and make some beautiful memory with my friends.

✓ I want to visit it because it's one of the tallest buildings in the world, and since I have lived where we didn't have any tall buildings, I would definitely love to go there and make some beautiful memories with my friends.

Multiple issues: omitted object 'it' after 'visit'; 'building' should be plural 'buildings' after 'one of the'; tense consistency requires 'have lived' to indicate experience up to now; 'would definitely' preferred order 'would definitely'; 'memory' should be plural 'memories'. Reordering and correcting articles and plurality fixes clarity and grammar.

× ever since a kid I lived in a two to three story houses.

✓ Ever since I was a kid I have lived in two- to three-story houses.

Use 'ever since I was a kid' and present perfect 'have lived' to show continuity to the present. Fix plural and hyphenation: 'two- to three-story houses'.

× So I prefer living in a small house as it is cozier than buildings.

✓ So I prefer living in a small house because it is cozier than living in a building.

Comparisons must match forms: compare 'a small house' with 'a building' or 'living in a building'. Using 'because' is clearer than 'as' in spoken context; ensure parallel structure for comparison.

× it's one of the tallest building in the world

✓ it's one of the tallest buildings in the world

After the expression 'one of the', the noun must be plural ('buildings').

× I want to visit is because it's one of the tallest building in the world

✓ I want to visit it because it's one of the tallest buildings in the world

Missing pronoun 'it' after 'visit' caused sentence fragment; 'it's' is correct contraction for 'it is'. This fixes sentence structure and subject reference.