旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitation and small errors, make your answer more concise and natural, and use one or two specific supporting details with a linking phrase. Aim for 2–3 sentences: a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Avoid plural/singular mismatches (e.g., "my favorite activities") and filler sounds.

示例: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I prefer to enjoy the scenery rather than use my phone. For example, I often watch the lush green forests and distant villages pass by, which helps me relax during the journey.

建议: Correct repetitions and grammar, use natural collocations ("take photos of"), and list examples succinctly using linking words such as "for example" or "such as." Avoid incorrect possessives/plural forms (e.g., "glossier's"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I often take photos out of the car window because I like to save memories and post a few on Instagram. For example, I usually photograph green hills, countryside scenes, bridges and waterfalls when I see them.

建议: Make the answer more natural by using a concise topic sentence and one or two clear supporting reasons with linking words. Correct singular/plural and tense usage ("the Himalayas", "I live in a landlocked country"). Avoid repetition like "forever will love mountains."

示例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I grew up in the Himalayas and feel very attached to mountain life. Also, since I live in a landlocked country and rarely see the sea, mountains feel more familiar and peaceful to me.

× Yes, I look out at the window, uh, at scenery.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window at the scenery.

The phrase 'look out at the window' is incorrect; native usage is 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window'. Also 'at scenery' needs an article: 'the scenery'. Use preposition 'of' for direction and definite article for a specific view. Suggestion: say 'I look out of the window at the scenery.'

× When I'm traveling by bus or car, it is my favorite activities.

✓ When I'm traveling by bus or car, it is my favorite activity.

'It' refers to a singular concept, so the noun must be singular: 'activity' not 'activities'. This is a subject-verb/agreement and number issue. Alternatively, rephrase: 'Traveling by bus or car is my favorite activity.' Suggestion: use singular 'activity' or rephrase the sentence.

× When traveling somewhere, I don't prefer to use my phone, so I look at the luscious green forest that passes through the destination.

✓ When traveling somewhere, I prefer not to use my phone, so I look at the lush green forests as we pass them on the way to the destination.

'I don't prefer to use my phone' is awkward; English prefers 'I prefer not to...'. 'Luscious' is acceptable but 'lush' is more natural collocation with 'green'. 'Forest that passes through the destination' is incorrect: places don't pass through destinations. Use plural 'forests' or 'the forest' and active phrase 'as we pass them on the way'. Also adjust pronouns and verb forms for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I prefer not to use my phone, so I look at the lush green forests as we pass them.'

× Yes I I take a lot of photo outside the car window because I can put it on Instagram story later.

✓ Yes, I take a lot of photos outside the car window because I can put them on my Instagram story later.

'Photo' must be plural 'photos' to match 'a lot of'. 'I I' is a repetition error. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer back to photos. Also use 'my Instagram story' for possession. Suggestion: 'I take a lot of photos outside the car window because I can put them on my Instagram story later.'

× But even if I add a memory I tend to keep photos especially from the green glossier's, countryside, bridges, waterfall and anything nature related.

✓ But even if I add a memory, I tend to keep photos, especially of the green glossier countryside, bridges, waterfalls and anything nature-related.

Several article and form issues: add comma after introductory clause. 'from the' should be 'of the' or just 'of'. 'Glossier's' is incorrect (apostrophe shows possession); use 'glossier' as comparative adjective or better 'lusher' or 'lush'. 'Waterfall' should be plural 'waterfalls' to match list. 'Nature related' should be hyphenated 'nature-related'. Suggestion: 'I tend to keep photos, especially of the lush countryside, bridges, waterfalls and anything nature-related.'

× I will always prefer mountains over sea.

✓ I will always prefer the mountains to the sea.

'Prefer' is usually used with 'to' when comparing two things: 'prefer A to B'. Also use definite articles 'the mountains' and 'the sea' when speaking generally about those environments. Suggestion: 'I will always prefer the mountains to the sea.'

× I was raised in the Himalaya so I have always been on the mountain side.

✓ I was raised in the Himalayas, so I have always been on the mountainside.

'Himalaya' as a region is referred to in English as 'the Himalayas'. 'Mountain side' is usually one word 'mountainside'. Add a comma before 'so' when joining clauses. Suggestion: 'I was raised in the Himalayas, so I have always been on the mountainside.'

× Plus I don't get to see the sea because I am living in a landlocked country.

✓ Also, I don't get to see the sea because I live in a landlocked country.

'I am living' is grammatical but simple present 'I live' is more natural for permanent situations. 'Plus' as sentence starter is informal; 'Also' is better. Use simple present for general facts. Suggestion: 'I don't get to see the sea because I live in a landlocked country.'

× So I love mountains and forever will love mountains.

✓ So I love the mountains and will love them forever.

Repeat of 'mountains' is redundant; use pronoun 'them'. Place adverb 'forever' after the verb or at the end: 'will love them forever'. Include definite article 'the' when referring to mountains in general. Suggestion: 'I love the mountains and will love them forever.'