旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 发音和语法需要改进；答题时要直接回应问题并保持句子简洁（不超过5句）。避免重复词汇（如“by by by”）并注意时态和主语一致。提供更具体的细节并用连接词使表达连贯，例如说明看到的具体景物和为什么感到放松。

示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus. For example, last September in Thailand I enjoyed watching rice fields and small villages passing by. Watching the scenery helps me relax because the view is peaceful and different from my daily city life.

建议: 减少填充词（uh, um）和重复；使用正确的时态和主谓一致（we were, not we was）。回答要更具体：说明拍照的频率、拍什么类型的景物以及原因。用一两句扩展但不超过五句，并用连接词（for example, because）衔接。

示例: Yes, I often take photos from the bus window. For example, when I visited Singapore two years ago I frequently photographed modern buildings and city streets. I did this because I wanted to remember the contrast between the city and my hometown.

建议: 表达要更清晰、逻辑更顺畅，避免语义混乱（如“see Freak”）和重复。应先给出直接答案，然后用1–2句具体原因支持，例如说明海的特点和个人经历。注意用词准确（opportunities 而非 money chances）。

示例: I prefer the sea. Since I live inland, I rarely have the opportunity to visit the coast, so I really enjoy the fresh sea air and the wide horizon. The sea feels relaxing and different from the crowded city where I live.

× I think Noah will not look at the window, at the scenery when traveling by by by bus.

✓ I think Noah will not look out of the window at the scenery when travelling by bus.

句中主语 Noah 是第三人称单数，动词短语应与将来时“will”连用并保持动词原形。原句重复“by”且短语顺序不自然；将“look at the window, at the scenery”合并为“look out of the window at the scenery”更符合习惯表达。建议注意不要重复介词并使用正确的短语搭配。

× When I was in Thailand last year about September, I always looking for the sceneries and landscapes around the bus.

✓ When I was in Thailand last year, around September, I was always looking at the scenery and landscapes from the bus.

描述过去习惯或持续动作要用过去时（was/were + -ing）或一般过去时。原句“always looking”缺少助动词，应为“was always looking”。另外，“sceneries”通常用不可数“scenery”；“looking for”意味寻找，不符合语境，改为“looking at”或“looking out at”；将时间短语位置调整更自然。建议在表达过去持续动作时使用“was/were + -ing”。

× I think it can make me feel comfortable and let me calm down.

✓ I think it can make me feel comfortable and help me calm down.

动词“let”后接动词不带 to，意为“允许做某事”，此处需要表达“使我冷静下来”，更合适用“help me calm down”或“make me calm down”。用“make me feel comfortable”是正确的，但后半句应改为“help me calm down”。建议根据语义选择合适的动词搭配。

× Uh, yes, uh, two years ago when I went to Singapore, I always, uh, I always took photos of the scenery outside the bus, of the window.

✓ Yes, two years ago when I went to Singapore, I often took photos of the scenery outside the bus window.

描述过去习惯可用一般过去时“took”或过去频率副词“often”。原句重复“always”且与时间状语“two years ago”结合时用“always”不太自然，改为“often”。“outside the bus, of the window”重复并冗余，应合并为“outside the bus window”。建议使用简洁的短语并注意频率副词与过去时的搭配。

× Uh, and when, when, when we was in the, when we was in the, umm, uh, I took many, uh, scenery photos.

✓ And when we were there, I took many photos of the scenery.

主语“we”是复数，系动词应为“were”而非“was”。原句重复“when we was in the”且结构混乱，删去重复部分并把“scenery photos”改为更自然的“photos of the scenery”。建议注意主语与动词的一致，并避免语句重复。

× It must be the sea. I'm a person who's living in the inland, so I have, I don't have money chances to I don't have many chances to touch the sea and see it by myself.

✓ It must be the sea. I'm a person who lives inland, so I don't have many chances to visit the sea and see it myself.

原句中“who's living in the inland”时态和结构不自然，改为“who lives inland”。“I have, I don't have money chances”明显是口误，“money”应为“many”，并且双重否定和重复不正确，改为“I don't have many chances”。“touch the sea”用词不自然，改为“visit the sea”。建议注意代词从句和动词时态的一致，纠正拼写口误并使用更自然的动词搭配。

× So I must see Freak. Yeah. As for me, I love sea more than the mountains.

✓ So I must see it. Yeah. As for me, I love the sea more than the mountains.

原句“see Freak”可能是口误，“Freak”不符合语境，改为“see it”或省略。此外，“love sea”缺少定冠词，应为“love the sea”。建议使用正确的冠词并避免无意义或错误的词汇。