旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Good direct answer and clear reason. To improve, make the response slightly more concise, vary vocabulary, and add one brief specific example to enrich content. Use a linking word to connect reason and example (e.g., “for example” or “so”). Keep to at most 4–5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do — I enjoy watching the scenery as I travel because it helps me relax and prevents carsickness. For example, when I take a long bus ride through the countryside I watch the fields and old villages go by, which keeps me calm and focused.

建议: Clear answer with reasons and examples, but work on grammar and wording: say “a picture is worth a thousand words” and avoid redundant phrases. Use a linking word to connect habits and purpose (e.g., “because” or “so that”). Limit to 2–4 sentences and add a brief specific detail about when you take photos.

示例: Yes, I do. I often take photos of coastal cliffs or sunrises because they capture the atmosphere of a trip and help me remember special moments. For instance, last summer I photographed a sunrise over the cliffs and later used the pictures in a travel diary.

建议: Good topic sentence and reasons, but the answer is incomplete and slightly long. Finish the final idea, avoid repeating similar reasons, and add a linking word (e.g., “because” then “also”). Be specific about feelings or activities and keep to 3–4 sentences max.

示例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and breathing fresh air, and they are usually quieter than beaches. Also, being in nature helps me relax and clear my mind — for example, I often spend a day trekking a nearby trail to unwind and take photos.

× Yes, I do look out the window at the scenery, especially when I am traveling because I love watching the scenery pass by and it helps me avoid getting carsick.

✓ Yes, I do look out of the window at the scenery, especially when I am traveling, because I love watching the scenery pass by and it helps me avoid getting carsick.

Use the phrasal verb 'look out of' for windows in this context; add a comma before 'because' to separate clauses for clarity. The rest of the sentence correctly uses -ing forms ('traveling', 'watching', 'getting') to describe ongoing actions, so no change is needed for verb forms.

× Yes I do. I often snap photos of coastal cliffs or sunrise and it helps me remember the special moments when I am traveling and I think a picture is worth of 1000 words.

✓ Yes, I do. I often snap photos of coastal cliffs or sunrises, and it helps me remember special moments when I am traveling, and I think a picture is worth 1000 words.

Change 'sunrise' to the plural 'sunrises' to match the general habit of taking multiple photos; add commas to separate clauses. Remove 'of' after 'worth' because the correct expression is 'worth 1000 words' (no 'of'). 'Worth' is followed by a noun phrase, not 'of' plus noun.

× Personally I prefer the mountains because I love hiking and breathing the fresh air and mountains are usually quieter and less crowded compared to the beaches. When I am in the mountains I always feel.

✓ Personally, I prefer the mountains because I love hiking and breathing the fresh air, and mountains are usually quieter and less crowded than beaches. When I am in the mountains, I always feel relaxed.

Add commas after introductory adverb 'Personally' and before conjunctions for clarity. Use 'less crowded than beaches' rather than 'compared to the beaches' to make a direct comparative structure. The original final sentence is incomplete ('I always feel.'), so supply a suitable adjective like 'relaxed' to complete the thought. This corrects the sentence structure error by providing a complete predicate.