旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and direct: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and word choice, and give one specific supporting detail. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

示例: Yes. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the passing scenery relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching the contrast between countryside fields and city streets, which helps me unwind during long journeys.

建议: Give a clear, grammatical main sentence, then a specific reason or brief example. Use correct verb forms and clearer nouns. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: Yes, I usually take photos from the bus window because I like capturing interesting landscapes. For instance, last month I photographed a row of old farmhouses and a dramatic sunset as we drove through the countryside.

建议: This answer is close to natural: keep the clear topic sentence and add one specific detail about activities or feelings. Use correct capitalization and a linking word such as 'because' or 'so'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy fishing as a hobby and the seaside offers many activities. For example, I can go fishing in the morning and then relax on the beach or try kayaking in the afternoon.

× Yes, it's really amazing for me and for every people because watching Nation and City with window is the perfect way of relaxing.

✓ Yes, it's really amazing for me and for everyone because watching the countryside and the city through the window is the perfect way to relax.

The student used 'every people' which is incorrect; use 'everyone' (pronoun) or 'every person'. 'Nation' is incorrect for scenery; use 'countryside' or 'the countryside' and 'city' should be 'the city'. 'with window' is ungrammatical; use 'through the window'. 'the perfect way of relaxing' is less natural than 'the perfect way to relax' — use the infinitive for purpose. Suggestions: replace 'every people' with 'everyone', use 'the countryside' for rural scenery, use 'through the window', and change 'way of relaxing' to 'way to relax'.

× Yes, always I take photo when I travel with bus because nation with windows seen very perfectly and well for take photo.

✓ Yes, I always take photos when I travel by bus because the countryside looks clear through the window and is great for taking photos.

The adverb 'always' is placed awkwardly; place it after the subject ('I always'). 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos'. 'travel with bus' is incorrect preposition; use 'travel by bus'. 'nation with windows seen very perfectly' contains several errors: 'nation' is wrong for scenery, 'with windows seen' is ungrammatical, and 'very perfectly and well for take photo' mixes adverbs and incorrect verb form. Use 'the countryside looks clear through the window' and 'great for taking photos' (gerund after 'for'). Suggestions: move adverbs after the subject, use 'by' with transport, use plural 'photos', and use gerund 'taking photos'.

× Yes, I prefer the sea because fishing is my hobby and in Seaside I can do fishing and other activities.

✓ Yes, I prefer the sea because fishing is my hobby and at the seaside I can go fishing and do other activities.

Use the correct preposition 'at the seaside' rather than 'in Seaside'. 'Seaside' should be lowercase unless part of a proper name. 'do fishing' is not the usual collocation; use 'go fishing'. Also add 'go' or use 'go fishing and do other activities' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: use 'at the seaside', use 'go fishing', and ensure common collocations for activities.